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Comment from Asem.inspirations
This poem is full of genius. I love how you related the renewal of the spring and all of the splendor of it, its color, its growth occurring, the marvelous that it all is - you so eloquently related it all to that resurrection, that coming to life again, the rebirth of a will that always will, yes, genius.
Life celebrates,
Born again
Out of winter and death,
Reaching upwards
Clear with the clarity
Within the light
Lighting the darkness
And the reborn landscape,
A rainbow
Silk thread
Pulled tight
Overhead,
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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This poem is full of genius. I love how you related the renewal of the spring and all of the splendor of it, its color, its growth occurring, the marvelous that it all is - you so eloquently related it all to that resurrection, that coming to life again, the rebirth of a will that always will, yes, genius.
Life celebrates,
Born again
Out of winter and death,
Reaching upwards
Clear with the clarity
Within the light
Lighting the darkness
And the reborn landscape,
A rainbow
Silk thread
Pulled tight
Overhead,
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Thank you again for this magnificent review and for supporting this poem with these uplifting comments. Spring is the metaphor for resurrection, light for the spirit of life, and the colors and shapes for the personality, the character of life. estory
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No problem. You are so worthy.
Comment from rama devi
Up from the depths
Life breaks the dark
And ground
Into air and light
Compelling opening. Love it. Good descriptive metaphor.
All of the colors
Of all the blossoms of spring
Exclaim these resurrections,
This resilience
Very nice voicing plus alliteration of R.
In the brilliance of light,
In the brilliance of skies,
In the brilliance of air,
Determined, beautiful, alive
Good flow and rhythmic repetition.
Life celebrates,
Born again
Out of winter and death,
Reaching upwards
Lovely tone and imagery and personification.
Clear with the clarity
Within the light
Lighting the darkness
And the reborn landscape,
LOVE reborn landscape. Fine voicing. Fine alliteration too.
A rainbow
Silk thread
Pulled tight
Overhead,
Nice random rhyme and good imagery.
Turned inside
Out, a butterfly fluttering
Over the flowers
Growing out of the graves
Of the dead
Superb phonetics with F and sounds. Good metaphorical imagery, tone and meaning. A fine AHA effect.
My only technical suggestion is to not cap every single line but rather only the starts of sentences so the enjambment is smoother. Optional, of course.
Bravo. Great post.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Up from the depths
Life breaks the dark
And ground
Into air and light
Compelling opening. Love it. Good descriptive metaphor.
All of the colors
Of all the blossoms of spring
Exclaim these resurrections,
This resilience
Very nice voicing plus alliteration of R.
In the brilliance of light,
In the brilliance of skies,
In the brilliance of air,
Determined, beautiful, alive
Good flow and rhythmic repetition.
Life celebrates,
Born again
Out of winter and death,
Reaching upwards
Lovely tone and imagery and personification.
Clear with the clarity
Within the light
Lighting the darkness
And the reborn landscape,
LOVE reborn landscape. Fine voicing. Fine alliteration too.
A rainbow
Silk thread
Pulled tight
Overhead,
Nice random rhyme and good imagery.
Turned inside
Out, a butterfly fluttering
Over the flowers
Growing out of the graves
Of the dead
Superb phonetics with F and sounds. Good metaphorical imagery, tone and meaning. A fine AHA effect.
My only technical suggestion is to not cap every single line but rather only the starts of sentences so the enjambment is smoother. Optional, of course.
Bravo. Great post.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the great review, and your detailed inspection of the poem, with all these encouraging comments. I am so glad you enjoyed this upbeat piece, and all the musical elements and imagery that went into the crafting of it. estory
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Thanks for your encourgaing response to my review and your gracious gesture as well. Much appreciated!~
Love, rd
Comment from kahpot
A very absorbing and challenging read great use of words leading me ( the reader) to imagine the growing of my garden and its struggles very well done ****kahpot
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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A very absorbing and challenging read great use of words leading me ( the reader) to imagine the growing of my garden and its struggles very well done ****kahpot
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the great review and I am glad you enjoyed it. The garden is a metaphor for the spirit, the flower, and image of the resurrection, a triumph over death. so it is a very upbeat poem, in an abstract style estory
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Thank you for clarifying I will enjoy reading it again
Comment from Irish Rain
What a glorious interpretation of the Easter story. I especially liked the ending...the butterfly fluttering over the flowers, which grew out of the graves, of the dead. Now...THAT'S rebirth!!! and beauty, transformation, worship and promise. Just wonderful! Happy Easter to you!!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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What a glorious interpretation of the Easter story. I especially liked the ending...the butterfly fluttering over the flowers, which grew out of the graves, of the dead. Now...THAT'S rebirth!!! and beauty, transformation, worship and promise. Just wonderful! Happy Easter to you!!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your terrific review and your wonderful comments. you got this upbeat, triumphant poem exactly. this is Easter, of course, the resurrection of life, its spirit and the triumph over death estory
Comment from ronnie k
A welcome read, the birth of spring, what a life giving introduction to spring, I have reviewed many awaking of spring but this by far is awakening that gave, for me, the birth of spring, well written.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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A welcome read, the birth of spring, what a life giving introduction to spring, I have reviewed many awaking of spring but this by far is awakening that gave, for me, the birth of spring, well written.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your excellent review and all your positive encouraging comments. I am glad you enjoyed the poem and found the connection to the resurrection of life, the triumph over death that is the Easter gospel estory
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful Easter poem you have penned. It is the true story of Easter. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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This is a very beautiful Easter poem you have penned. It is the true story of Easter. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and I am glad you enjoyed this Easter piece, and all its upbeat, triumphant imagery estory
Comment from sheena121
A good poem for spring, depicting new beginnings. Well written and I like the style it is written in. Keep up the good work.
Best wishes and Happy Easter.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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A good poem for spring, depicting new beginnings. Well written and I like the style it is written in. Keep up the good work.
Best wishes and Happy Easter.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and your encouraging comments about the construction and style of this open ended, abstract expressionist capture of Easter and its triumph estory
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing this poem of hope and God's love. You did a wonderful job of describing how His resurrection is reflected in nature. Its a great thought to bring to the holiday season,
~patty~
(the season isn't really about bunnies, but it does signify the joy.)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for sharing this poem of hope and God's love. You did a wonderful job of describing how His resurrection is reflected in nature. Its a great thought to bring to the holiday season,
~patty~
(the season isn't really about bunnies, but it does signify the joy.)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and your encouraging comments about this Easter piece. Glad you enjoyed it, happy Easter to you! estory
