High-Wired Hot Tempers
not a good place for an argument15 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This limerick, High-wired Hot Tempers, sounds really good as far as the beat and rhyme scheme goes. I would hate to find out that I couldn't trust my catcher on the trapeze. No net, of course.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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This limerick, High-wired Hot Tempers, sounds really good as far as the beat and rhyme scheme goes. I would hate to find out that I couldn't trust my catcher on the trapeze. No net, of course.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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it's all in fun, Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahaha...
I've read six of the entries in this contest, Anonymous Poet, and this is my favorite so far...by a LONG shot!
Having said that, I enjoyed this and laughed aloud.
You've got my vote thus far...for what it's worth.
Best of luck!
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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Hahaha...
I've read six of the entries in this contest, Anonymous Poet, and this is my favorite so far...by a LONG shot!
Having said that, I enjoyed this and laughed aloud.
You've got my vote thus far...for what it's worth.
Best of luck!
~Dean :)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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muchas gracias!
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De nada, buena suerte...
Comment from jaded831
Very creative and fun to read. Great picture, it compliments your limerick well. And everyone can relate to your theme. I have to read the others to be fair, but yours sounds like a winner.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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Very creative and fun to read. Great picture, it compliments your limerick well. And everyone can relate to your theme. I have to read the others to be fair, but yours sounds like a winner.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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many thanks. Appreciate it!
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading the story line in your poem "High- wired Hot tempers". You had the correct number of lines and the rhyming was correct. Unfortunately your meter was not correct. You may wish to discuss this with Fanstory as these rules were not displayed. I would be happy to give you another star if your poem is acceptable.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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I enjoyed reading the story line in your poem "High- wired Hot tempers". You had the correct number of lines and the rhyming was correct. Unfortunately your meter was not correct. You may wish to discuss this with Fanstory as these rules were not displayed. I would be happy to give you another star if your poem is acceptable.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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what's wrong with the meter?
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The traditional reter for a limerick is;-
Line 1 - ''/''/''/ or - '/"/"/
Line 2 - "/"/"/
Line 3 - "/"/
Line 4 - "/"/
Line 5 - "/"/"/
As I said previously it might be better if you discuss this with FanStory.
Marybell1.
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thank you.
It won, so it must have passed.
PL
Comment from Marvin Calloway
I found this to be very funny. Had no idea where you were going with it. The reward was a humorous and surprising finish.
Thanks for the laugh.
Marv
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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I found this to be very funny. Had no idea where you were going with it. The reward was a humorous and surprising finish.
Thanks for the laugh.
Marv
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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thanks, Marv! and thanks for the 6! glad you were surprised and glad you laughed.
Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
A very humorous limerick. That would definitely not be the place for an argument. I especially like the last line when we see the result of arguing at a bad time. lol
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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A very humorous limerick. That would definitely not be the place for an argument. I especially like the last line when we see the result of arguing at a bad time. lol
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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yep. sort of sick humor. :)
PL
Comment from MLEaton
Really enjoyed this limerick and it did all the right things in flowing and scanning and having a wonderful punch line. Well done! I hope you do very well in the contest.
Marion:)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Really enjoyed this limerick and it did all the right things in flowing and scanning and having a wonderful punch line. Well done! I hope you do very well in the contest.
Marion:)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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thank you so much!
Comment from lyenochka
Excellent! To do a high wire act, the partners need to be entirely on the same page and working as one so to have them angry with each other is doubly dangerous. great limerick and life lesson that tempers and life-threatening work don't go well together!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Excellent! To do a high wire act, the partners need to be entirely on the same page and working as one so to have them angry with each other is doubly dangerous. great limerick and life lesson that tempers and life-threatening work don't go well together!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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thank you very much!
Comment from humpwhistle
Whoa! Bad partners, indeed.
If I were relying on someone to catch me,
I'd mind my p's and q's.
And I'd make sure someone knew what to do
'In the event of my untimely death'.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Whoa! Bad partners, indeed.
If I were relying on someone to catch me,
I'd mind my p's and q's.
And I'd make sure someone knew what to do
'In the event of my untimely death'.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 09-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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yep. you'd think.
thanks for the good wishes.
Comment from cholb22
A good limerick... what happened next! You have the rhyme and rhythm pretty spot on in my opinion, I just feel story was slightly missing something, this may be my take but... they are splitting up and going their own way, everyone is staring as they are mad, and the punchline is one of them shouting bombs away, presumably as they jump? Having re-read this I think it maybe the picture that is confusing me as, I may be wrong but it shows people on the trapeze not high wire, high wire if they jump is into the net and they walk away... perfect for your ending, but trapeze they would be swinging probably towards their arguee!! Sorry it's long winded but I hope you get what I mean?? Thank you for sharing it was an enjoyable read!!
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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A good limerick... what happened next! You have the rhyme and rhythm pretty spot on in my opinion, I just feel story was slightly missing something, this may be my take but... they are splitting up and going their own way, everyone is staring as they are mad, and the punchline is one of them shouting bombs away, presumably as they jump? Having re-read this I think it maybe the picture that is confusing me as, I may be wrong but it shows people on the trapeze not high wire, high wire if they jump is into the net and they walk away... perfect for your ending, but trapeze they would be swinging probably towards their arguee!! Sorry it's long winded but I hope you get what I mean?? Thank you for sharing it was an enjoyable read!!
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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blast! you're right. actually I meant he let her go in anger - supposed to be semi-funny. wrote it in too big a hurry. was inspired, wrote it, without thinking it through. oh, well.
I appreciate your thorough review. thanks.
pome lover
