5/7/5 (sad refugee eyes)
Poem 5/7/513 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Absolutely gorgeous eyes, dark chocolate longing. I'd rescue them all if I could. The terrible things that some have to live and die through..just because of where they're born. A lovely, sad poem. Blessings...
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Absolutely gorgeous eyes, dark chocolate longing. I'd rescue them all if I could. The terrible things that some have to live and die through..just because of where they're born. A lovely, sad poem. Blessings...
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from marybell1
For your 5-7-5 poem you chose a subject that is prominent on the news all over the world and a major problem. All your lines and syllables were correct.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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For your 5-7-5 poem you chose a subject that is prominent on the news all over the world and a major problem. All your lines and syllables were correct.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Sad Refuge Eyes, has the proper syllable count and reminds us that we must act on our sympathy before it shifts to the next fad thing that ditched our attention.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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This 5-7-5, Sad Refuge Eyes, has the proper syllable count and reminds us that we must act on our sympathy before it shifts to the next fad thing that ditched our attention.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from nuthead
This is a profoundly sad, and true statement expressed perfectly in a compressed format, a haiku. "though we shift our gaze" is a statement that haunts. well done.
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sad refugee eyes
stir our deepest emotions
though we shift our gaze
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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This is a profoundly sad, and true statement expressed perfectly in a compressed format, a haiku. "though we shift our gaze" is a statement that haunts. well done.
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sad refugee eyes
stir our deepest emotions
though we shift our gaze
Comment Written 09-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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I am simply delighted with this critique and those 6 bright stars ! Zanya
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Resonating words and I can't begin to know how terrible it would be to be a refugee, to lose everything you own and throw yourself on the mercy of others, shame on us all if we turn our backs, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Resonating words and I can't begin to know how terrible it would be to be a refugee, to lose everything you own and throw yourself on the mercy of others, shame on us all if we turn our backs, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Yes thanks for reading and the critique zanya
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
A well written 5-7-5 that questions humanity, unfortunately your words ring true and most people don't care enough.
Your last line compounds this feeling wonderfully well.
Have a lovely evening
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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A well written 5-7-5 that questions humanity, unfortunately your words ring true and most people don't care enough.
Your last line compounds this feeling wonderfully well.
Have a lovely evening
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the critique -much appreciated zanya
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. I have great sympathy for real refugees. The problem is lately we cannot be sure if they are refugees or terrorists posing as refugees. We have to be careful not to make a wrong choice.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. I have great sympathy for real refugees. The problem is lately we cannot be sure if they are refugees or terrorists posing as refugees. We have to be careful not to make a wrong choice.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Yes what strange times we seem to be living in ! Thanks for reading & critique zanya
Comment from His Grayness
Beautifully done in all ways. The rhyme and meter is splendid. The artistic packaging and coloration is splendid and the message is excellent. I have no suggestions to improve this work and thank the author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Beautifully done in all ways. The rhyme and meter is splendid. The artistic packaging and coloration is splendid and the message is excellent. I have no suggestions to improve this work and thank the author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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And thank you for a most encouraging review zanya
Comment from MaggieF
Interesting picture. Good alliteration. You are right in what you say, it is heartbreaking to see the faces, especially the eyes of refugees on tv , it is very emotive and makes us uncomfortable, makes us feel guilty and useless. MaggieF
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Interesting picture. Good alliteration. You are right in what you say, it is heartbreaking to see the faces, especially the eyes of refugees on tv , it is very emotive and makes us uncomfortable, makes us feel guilty and useless. MaggieF
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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Yes makes one wonder where it is all going -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from LaRosa
This is a really different, interesting picture illustration, which adds well to the sentiment of your poem. Good choice.
In three short lines, you have expressed the overwhelming dilemma the world has found itself in.
Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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This is a really different, interesting picture illustration, which adds well to the sentiment of your poem. Good choice.
In three short lines, you have expressed the overwhelming dilemma the world has found itself in.
Well done!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
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A dilemma indeed ! Thanks for reading & critique zanya
