Comment from Bill Schott

Exceptional

This is a terrific story could be ripped from the headlines of recent hostages, having lived for years as prisoners. Nicely builds to the confrontation and the happy resolution.

"Jesus!" is all he can say.
"I don't think he's here," I say. "But then again, maybe he is."

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017

Oh, thanks so much for the lovely green star, Bill. I did think of the stories from the headlines as I wrote it and I would want more revenge...though I'm pretty sure I couldn't do it myself. Much appreciated.

Comment from frierajac

Exceptional

thank you for the story. I liked all the interior voice of the girl and the ending
in which she speaks. Actually, it reminds me of the book, "ROOM" which was a true story. It just took the girl a few years more to escape and her child by her captor
helped.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017

Thanks so much for this magnificent green star. It is truly appreciated and I am pleased that you thought it was deserved.

reply by frierajac on 27-Mar-2017

Frongs and Toads 2 U!

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Wow! This is a gruesome, but gripping story you have written. I can't imagine being locked up for many years with a crazy person. I can see why this won the contest! Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017

Thanks so much.

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

That was a super terrific kidnapping story. I would kept stabbing him as well, I like the last line in your ending. It was a well played out kidnapping.
Good luck. ~Kerry~

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017

Thanks so much for reading and the great comments.

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 26-Mar-2017

Your welcome

Comment from valmay

Excellent

A great contest entry. Gritty and believable. P4 makes the protagonist so pitiful as well as establishing the time line. P3 the analogy of the hearse is also a mood setter. Good luck

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017

Thanks much for reading and your thoughtful review.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Yu crafted a great little piece here for this competition. Good tension, taut writing and excellent voice in the story. very nice end line to wrap thing up.

Should do well
All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017

Thanks so much. I appreciated the read.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

A very dark and moving short story. The images stand out and are easy to imagine. I wrote a similar short story "Snapped", the young girl was being molested by her father. Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017

Thanks so much for reading and I will have to go check yours out.

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

You managed to pull off a complete story in so few words.
Love the detail and determination .
Great descriptions.
Good luck in the contest.
Michael

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017

Thanks much for reading and your thoughtful comments.

Comment from emptypage

Exceptional

Great story!

I adore the fact that this woman took back her strength, he voice, her everything.

Pass it on! Everyone needs to read this.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017

Ah, I thank you so much for this wonderful green star. Truly appreciated.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

A sad tale of kidnapping and physical, sexual torture. Your words flow well and tell a compelling story. Thank you for sharing,
A nit: conger (conjure) up her twinkling eyes.
~patty~

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017

You know I didn't think that looked right-thanks so much -will chg it.