This is the Deep
Free verse34 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Dreams drowned in deed - great line great D alliteration. Dreams forsaken, lost maybe not even sought and ending up in the deep, dark sea floor. Interesting read Tony, I think we could put different interpretations on this one, but whatever, it is a great read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Dreams drowned in deed - great line great D alliteration. Dreams forsaken, lost maybe not even sought and ending up in the deep, dark sea floor. Interesting read Tony, I think we could put different interpretations on this one, but whatever, it is a great read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Very many thanks, Valda, for your kind comments. I'm most appreciative. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mustang Patty
The whole poem intrigues me, but my favorite line:
a loss, but lost no more.
So many things have been a loss in my life, and as this year has dawned, they are truly lost no more.
Thank you for sharing this well penned poem,
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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The whole poem intrigues me, but my favorite line:
a loss, but lost no more.
So many things have been a loss in my life, and as this year has dawned, they are truly lost no more.
Thank you for sharing this well penned poem,
~patty~
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this and giving your interpretation of it. It was, perhaps, a bit obscure! I had in mind death with unfulfilled dreams - or something along those lines. I got a bit carried away! LOL
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Truly stated, simply and experimentally, when anything is deep there is likeness of loss and it has to be tackled carefully, I liked the inspirational words of explanations in imagery.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Truly stated, simply and experimentally, when anything is deep there is likeness of loss and it has to be tackled carefully, I liked the inspirational words of explanations in imagery.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this and giving your interpretation of it. It was, perhaps, a bit obscure! I had in mind death with unfulfilled dreams - or something along those lines. I got a bit carried away! LOL
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi friend, i have read this write twice, i still cannot understand what it is about except that it sings of pain and loss and a lot of despair.
I am sorry.
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Hi friend, i have read this write twice, i still cannot understand what it is about except that it sings of pain and loss and a lot of despair.
I am sorry.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this and giving your interpretation of it. It was, perhaps, a bit obscure! I had in mind death with unfulfilled dreams - or something along those lines. I got a bit carried away! LOL
Comment from sue133
I thought that this was well composed and the alliteration and words made it song-like and imaginative. I think, but am not sure, that it is about not leading a fulfilling life for whatever reason; 'Dreams drowned in deed' seemed to speak of this but then I was confused with the final line, 'a loss, but lost no more'. Maybe I have got it wrong. Susan
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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I thought that this was well composed and the alliteration and words made it song-like and imaginative. I think, but am not sure, that it is about not leading a fulfilling life for whatever reason; 'Dreams drowned in deed' seemed to speak of this but then I was confused with the final line, 'a loss, but lost no more'. Maybe I have got it wrong. Susan
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Thanks for your review, Sue. Pretty much what I had in mind. Death with unfulfilled dreams. They are lost but the poet, being dead, has found his final resting place and is lost no more.
Comment from Craigitar
Often, when I really like a poet's piece but fail, despite repeated readings, to find the meaning, I allow that many poems are more about the flow of words than anything else. Dylan (Bob) confounded me and insulted my intelligence with many of his songs until I finally figured out that he frequently strung words together just for the images they produce. In my mind, this is what you have expertly done here. Your imagery is outstanding, and for me, no message is required to complete this poem. Very well done!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Often, when I really like a poet's piece but fail, despite repeated readings, to find the meaning, I allow that many poems are more about the flow of words than anything else. Dylan (Bob) confounded me and insulted my intelligence with many of his songs until I finally figured out that he frequently strung words together just for the images they produce. In my mind, this is what you have expertly done here. Your imagery is outstanding, and for me, no message is required to complete this poem. Very well done!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reviewing this and giving your interpretation of it. It was, perhaps, a bit obscure! I had in mind death with unfulfilled dreams - or something along those lines. I got a bit carried away! LOL
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a bit sad, Tony. But a good analogy with the widows heartache and dread of losing her husband in the ocean and how she would feel just like her soul is washed up on the beach with all the detritus washed up on the beach when the tide goes out. Well done, Giddy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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This is a bit sad, Tony. But a good analogy with the widows heartache and dread of losing her husband in the ocean and how she would feel just like her soul is washed up on the beach with all the detritus washed up on the beach when the tide goes out. Well done, Giddy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Giddy, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from MelB
Fantastic use of alliteration. Wonderful imagery and description created. This spoke loss to me with the word widow in there.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Fantastic use of alliteration. Wonderful imagery and description created. This spoke loss to me with the word widow in there.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Mel, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL You were one of very few who saw any connection with death. I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Deep and open for ideas I assume.
Not sure what you are saying but to me it goes with the mind and the tricks it plays. Depending on our moods as to how things are thought
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Deep and open for ideas I assume.
Not sure what you are saying but to me it goes with the mind and the tricks it plays. Depending on our moods as to how things are thought
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Barb, for your review of this and for your interesting comments. I actually had in mind the death of one whose dreams had failed to materialise through lack of action ? which goes to show that what is in the mind of the poet is not necessarily what is in the mind of the reader! LOL I like the way reviews here open up different interpretations of a piece of work. All the best, Tony
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Tony. Wonderful idea to incorporate into a free verse poem. I liked these lines in particular, my friend:
"where dreams, like plankton,
swirl through weed,
the widow's weeds of dread,"
Excellent imagery. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Hi, Tony. Wonderful idea to incorporate into a free verse poem. I liked these lines in particular, my friend:
"where dreams, like plankton,
swirl through weed,
the widow's weeds of dread,"
Excellent imagery. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Many thanks, Bob, for your review of this and for your affirming comments. All the best, Tony
