Momma's Hwrt
A 911 Call6 total reviews
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
This is an excellent entry to this contest. The little girl was very likable, the way she talked made the character adorable. It's not easy to write with just dialogue, and the story line was very interesting, too. Unfortunately, there are many cases out there like this.
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Hi,
This is an excellent entry to this contest. The little girl was very likable, the way she talked made the character adorable. It's not easy to write with just dialogue, and the story line was very interesting, too. Unfortunately, there are many cases out there like this.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
Comment from wilkswrites
This dialogue made me almost want to cry. It really reminded me of my granddaughter, her mother, and the boyfriend. I have taught her to call me and even to use her tablet to Skype me. However, I think that I am going to train her to dial a 911 instead of me so that the police are involved instead of myself.
Your depiction of this event was spot on. What a wonderful way for others to learn just how this kind of event should go down.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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This dialogue made me almost want to cry. It really reminded me of my granddaughter, her mother, and the boyfriend. I have taught her to call me and even to use her tablet to Skype me. However, I think that I am going to train her to dial a 911 instead of me so that the police are involved instead of myself.
Your depiction of this event was spot on. What a wonderful way for others to learn just how this kind of event should go down.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the Exceptional review. I agree, have her call 911, she'd get help faster than if you had to act as the middle man.
Thanks for your wonderful comments.
Comment from Ronni
Very realistic and intriguing dialogue between this 2 yr. old and 911
Operator, and one very brave and focused little caretaker of her mom
in this event. Amazing how kids can take charge in an emergency
almost like and adult, and God bless them when they can and do.
Thanks for sharing this real life drama, that can happen and does
happen more than we know. The word dialogue of little Jennifer
was perfect for a 2 yr old. making the story all the more realistic.
Thanks for sharing....
Best wishes, Ronni
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Very realistic and intriguing dialogue between this 2 yr. old and 911
Operator, and one very brave and focused little caretaker of her mom
in this event. Amazing how kids can take charge in an emergency
almost like and adult, and God bless them when they can and do.
Thanks for sharing this real life drama, that can happen and does
happen more than we know. The word dialogue of little Jennifer
was perfect for a 2 yr old. making the story all the more realistic.
Thanks for sharing....
Best wishes, Ronni
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you Ronnie. I appreciate your kind review. Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from tfawcus
As your dialogue suggests - one smart little girl. We often underestimate the abilities of young children. It's never too early to put safety plans into place. The 911 operator was pretty smart, too - picking up on Mickey like that!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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As your dialogue suggests - one smart little girl. We often underestimate the abilities of young children. It's never too early to put safety plans into place. The 911 operator was pretty smart, too - picking up on Mickey like that!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your insightful remarks. I appreciate them. I'm glad you read my work.
Comment from noeldiablo
Cool. How often do you actually laugh out loud during a 911 call. Of course I felt for the emergency but the language of the little girl was so cute. It truly demonstrates how resourceful and smarter then we think, children are. (My attempt at trying to be cute also, a little Yoda)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Cool. How often do you actually laugh out loud during a 911 call. Of course I felt for the emergency but the language of the little girl was so cute. It truly demonstrates how resourceful and smarter then we think, children are. (My attempt at trying to be cute also, a little Yoda)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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I caught the Yoda in there. Thanks for reading and for your comments. I agree, children can be very resourceful.
Comment from robertlmcgraw
Excellent piece. The emotional gravity is immediately intense and great use of characterization with the child's language skills. Great job! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Excellent piece. The emotional gravity is immediately intense and great use of characterization with the child's language skills. Great job! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the Excellent review. I'm glad the story came across well. I appreciate your comments.
