A deeply personal and reflective sonnet with two most effective metaphors in the first pair of quatrains and the bonus of a perfect summation in the third:
"A moment spent on care is sanctified,
And time infused with love is sacrament".
What a wonderful tribute to your beloved in the closing couplet:
"I do not fret if time is almost through,
Because I found eternity in you."
Needless to say the iambic pentameters are spot on, as is your rhyming. I also liked the internal rhyme of 'gravity' in the second stanza.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
Thank you Tony. Coming from a writer of your caliber, this is doubly meaningful.
Bill and Cathy profess their love to each other under a willow tree in Tennessee before he leaves her. The year is 1964. Enlisted in the United States Air Force, he will be stationed in Texas, then Florida, before leading a Commando unit in Vietnam. The future for them remains uncertain.