Darkness
Lanturne contest entry36 total reviews
Comment from marybell1
A interesting choice for a lanturne poem. You had the correct number of lines and syllables for this style of poem and I liked your choice of photo.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
A interesting choice for a lanturne poem. You had the correct number of lines and syllables for this style of poem and I liked your choice of photo.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
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Thank you Marybell, I appreciate your review.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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:)
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is a very good Laturne poem.
It is really good, I love horror horror in any work, poetry as well. This is awesome.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
This is a very good Laturne poem.
It is really good, I love horror horror in any work, poetry as well. This is awesome.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much Lu. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Kerry; this is a powerful lanturne. With just a few words, you've created a story, and sent a chill down the reader's spine. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
Hi Kerry; this is a powerful lanturne. With just a few words, you've created a story, and sent a chill down the reader's spine. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 11-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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Thanks Patty, I never wrote anything dark. I was inspired by Dean.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, looks like the syllable count is A-OK, Kerry.
I like the presentation, very Gothic.
I know very little about the Lanturne form, but the description/explanation in your author's notes helped.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
Well, looks like the syllable count is A-OK, Kerry.
I like the presentation, very Gothic.
I know very little about the Lanturne form, but the description/explanation in your author's notes helped.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 11-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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Thank you Dean, It is much appreciated. I was having trouble getting the picture from photo bucket, I gave up. The picture of the girl has red eyes and the birds as well, but cant see it, maybe you can help me later. :)
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Sure, it still looks great just as it is.
Good job!
~Dean :)
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Awww, Thank you. :) You've already helped me fix it.
So, thanks a bunch.
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:)))
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You have turned this into quite a dark poem, Kerry, which puts quite a forceful slant on it. It is heavy with meaning and I thought your last line very effective. I hadn't heard of this type of poem so I have put my name down to join the contest, Giddy
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
You have turned this into quite a dark poem, Kerry, which puts quite a forceful slant on it. It is heavy with meaning and I thought your last line very effective. I hadn't heard of this type of poem so I have put my name down to join the contest, Giddy
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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I've never written anything dark, it's a first. Im glad you like it. happy you joined it. It's my 1st Lanturne as well.
Comment from Rhonni
Follows the rules of a lanturne poem, this seems to describe a sadness that has overshadowed someone. It speaks of how depression feels to me...somber and gloomy, but well written..good luck in the contest
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
Follows the rules of a lanturne poem, this seems to describe a sadness that has overshadowed someone. It speaks of how depression feels to me...somber and gloomy, but well written..good luck in the contest
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your review.