Sometimes Roses, Sometimes Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Lovely Valentine"A collection of sonnets
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
LOL loved the 'acrostic' just didn't know what you were spelling but of course, Webster added over 1000 new words.lol
VErynicely done but are you content just sitting back?
I missed a lot of your pieces. I am still reviewing them from your profile.
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LOL loved the 'acrostic' just didn't know what you were spelling but of course, Webster added over 1000 new words.lol
VErynicely done but are you content just sitting back?
I missed a lot of your pieces. I am still reviewing them from your profile.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
Comment from Susanjohn
ouch!!! that unrequited love!!!....and on valentine's day!! the worst!!...Mikey my mind is in a whirl pondering your words!! well done ;-)
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ouch!!! that unrequited love!!!....and on valentine's day!! the worst!!...Mikey my mind is in a whirl pondering your words!! well done ;-)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
Comment from dragonpoet
This is what Valenitne's Day is for. To give the secret love a card to see if she can figure out who the secret admirer is.
This poem tells well of unrequited love and about putting someone on a pedestal like the artwork. Though smile as bright as the sun is a bit cliche, it works in this poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
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This is what Valenitne's Day is for. To give the secret love a card to see if she can figure out who the secret admirer is.
This poem tells well of unrequited love and about putting someone on a pedestal like the artwork. Though smile as bright as the sun is a bit cliche, it works in this poem.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dp
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
Comment from Thal1959
Very nice, Michael. A good sonnet with some very charming expressions. I didn't exactly trip over the meter - it is all fine, but the last line is a challenge:
"but I'M/ con-TENT/ to LOVE/ she WHO'S/ not MINE." The capitalized words and syllables are the stressed ones, but one cannot help but stress "she" over "who's." So it is a pentameter, but the presence of "she" in the fourth iam upsets the natural reading a bit. Or, maybe it's just me.
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Very nice, Michael. A good sonnet with some very charming expressions. I didn't exactly trip over the meter - it is all fine, but the last line is a challenge:
"but I'M/ con-TENT/ to LOVE/ she WHO'S/ not MINE." The capitalized words and syllables are the stressed ones, but one cannot help but stress "she" over "who's." So it is a pentameter, but the presence of "she" in the fourth iam upsets the natural reading a bit. Or, maybe it's just me.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
