Homegrown Flowers
Tanka 5/7/5/7/749 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
You wrote a beautiful Tanka poem about things I do love - flowers. I love the wording you used when you spoke of love, hope and peace. I think I will join your flower garden and smell the scented flowers! love, Teri
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You wrote a beautiful Tanka poem about things I do love - flowers. I love the wording you used when you spoke of love, hope and peace. I think I will join your flower garden and smell the scented flowers! love, Teri
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from ronnie k
"Home grown in lush.....Flowerbed" I can, after a very good look come to see lush as a fertilizer of sorts that starts the grow of the true action of love, a very complex subject but a write that gives defining a chance.
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"Home grown in lush.....Flowerbed" I can, after a very good look come to see lush as a fertilizer of sorts that starts the grow of the true action of love, a very complex subject but a write that gives defining a chance.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from nomi338
Anything that is home grown is superior to something grown by someone else for profit. Things grown for profit is grown out of a love of money, while things grown at home are grown out of pure unselfish love. While it is okay to make money, love will always outshine commerce.
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Anything that is home grown is superior to something grown by someone else for profit. Things grown for profit is grown out of a love of money, while things grown at home are grown out of pure unselfish love. While it is okay to make money, love will always outshine commerce.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
The centre line of this tanka has that all-important pivotal feel. It unites the whole five lines while also workin as as conclusion of the first three and a commencement of the final three. Without this the essence of the tanka is lost.
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The centre line of this tanka has that all-important pivotal feel. It unites the whole five lines while also workin as as conclusion of the first three and a commencement of the final three. Without this the essence of the tanka is lost.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from William Ross
Nice job on the tanka about the home grown or drawn flowers, a flower show the beauty of the world. good luck on this and have a good day
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Nice job on the tanka about the home grown or drawn flowers, a flower show the beauty of the world. good luck on this and have a good day
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, Luna, this is a good tanka. I have been doing reading on them in the Haiku Handbook and am thinking about writing my first. I love how your flowers represent metaphor for inner peace and outward change. You end your musings strongly with ""Join us ~ pick some harmony." I was going to suggest not to repeat the words flower and change, but as written the repetition adds to the rhythm of your poem.
Thank you for sharing and inspiring.I wish you success in the contest.
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Wow, Luna, this is a good tanka. I have been doing reading on them in the Haiku Handbook and am thinking about writing my first. I love how your flowers represent metaphor for inner peace and outward change. You end your musings strongly with ""Join us ~ pick some harmony." I was going to suggest not to repeat the words flower and change, but as written the repetition adds to the rhythm of your poem.
Thank you for sharing and inspiring.I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Rasmine
Good luck in the contest!! Thank you, for choosing my painting. I had tried to enter that in the 'white' art contest--they said it was beige, oh well.
I have one suggestion. You used the word 'peace' twice, perhaps you could replace one with a synonym. Again, good luck in the contest--I am honored to be part of it!
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Good luck in the contest!! Thank you, for choosing my painting. I had tried to enter that in the 'white' art contest--they said it was beige, oh well.
I have one suggestion. You used the word 'peace' twice, perhaps you could replace one with a synonym. Again, good luck in the contest--I am honored to be part of it!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tanka. We are sowing our own seeds in our gardens. What we sow, will grow. Be careful what you sow and pull out the weeds as quickly as they appear.
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A very well-written Tanka. We are sowing our own seeds in our gardens. What we sow, will grow. Be careful what you sow and pull out the weeds as quickly as they appear.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
Comment from mbroyles2
A beautiful and peaceful image presented here with a crisp pace.
"Souls seeking inner peace say. Join us pick some harmony."
Great stuff!
Michael
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A beautiful and peaceful image presented here with a crisp pace.
"Souls seeking inner peace say. Join us pick some harmony."
Great stuff!
Michael
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
