Homegrown Flowers
Tanka 5/7/5/7/749 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Home grown flowers are gorgeous. I'll take store bought too. Flowers represent beauty and love to me. I enjoyed your short poem. Great visual imagery. Nice narrative invitation. Hearts & hugs to a great Valentines Day :)
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Home grown flowers are gorgeous. I'll take store bought too. Flowers represent beauty and love to me. I enjoyed your short poem. Great visual imagery. Nice narrative invitation. Hearts & hugs to a great Valentines Day :)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
Comment from strivinginsc
Always love your work. Maybe theses are lovers expressing their love, or a family talking about the love grown within their home, that they wish to share. As usually well written.
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Always love your work. Maybe theses are lovers expressing their love, or a family talking about the love grown within their home, that they wish to share. As usually well written.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem along with a very true and needed message. We need to all pick the flowers of love, peace, and understanding. Our country is so violent right now, it is scary.
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Good poem along with a very true and needed message. We need to all pick the flowers of love, peace, and understanding. Our country is so violent right now, it is scary.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from Patricia Crandall
This is a beautiful poem and equal in beauty is the artwork. It flows well and the meaning is simple and refreshing. Think spring. My favorite line - scented love, hope, peace. Good writing.
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This is a beautiful poem and equal in beauty is the artwork. It flows well and the meaning is simple and refreshing. Think spring. My favorite line - scented love, hope, peace. Good writing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from RGstar
Imagery and its action, a little separate as the reader is drawn to the very flowers in the image by the statement of them being ''our flowers, instead of the idea of flowers, yet, nicely done, and your words elaborate well.
Good luck.
My best wishes.
RG
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Imagery and its action, a little separate as the reader is drawn to the very flowers in the image by the statement of them being ''our flowers, instead of the idea of flowers, yet, nicely done, and your words elaborate well.
Good luck.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from Jacob Collins
Your poem brought images of spring to my mind. I can't wait to get this dreary winter out of the way. Your poem complements the artwork beautifully and I thought that you created a very welcoming atmosphere. Good luck in the competition!
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Your poem brought images of spring to my mind. I can't wait to get this dreary winter out of the way. Your poem complements the artwork beautifully and I thought that you created a very welcoming atmosphere. Good luck in the competition!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from Unspoken94
I love this piece. You call it a Tanka poem but I'm not
sure that it meets that criteria. However, the simple
drawing and the concept of homegrown flowers is so
appropriate. You could have given a field of flowers,
but you chose a simple drawing. Excellent. All the best
in the contest. -Bill
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I love this piece. You call it a Tanka poem but I'm not
sure that it meets that criteria. However, the simple
drawing and the concept of homegrown flowers is so
appropriate. You could have given a field of flowers,
but you chose a simple drawing. Excellent. All the best
in the contest. -Bill
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from azwildrosa
Nice, I love flowers and can't wait til spring to get started on my flower beds. This little poem offer a sense of peace, tranquility. It's a perfect poem for this prompt. Thanks for sharing. best wishes to you in the booth.
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Nice, I love flowers and can't wait til spring to get started on my flower beds. This little poem offer a sense of peace, tranquility. It's a perfect poem for this prompt. Thanks for sharing. best wishes to you in the booth.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Your poem evokes strong emotion, and leaves this reader longing to go and pick some of these lovely blooms.
The words and rhymes flow well, and left me wanting to read on.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
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Your poem evokes strong emotion, and leaves this reader longing to go and pick some of these lovely blooms.
The words and rhymes flow well, and left me wanting to read on.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
Comment from robyn corum
these are our flowers ~
home grown in lush flowerbeds
scented love, hope, peace
souls seeking harmony ~
Join~ pick some of our beauty
Luna,
Let me tell you about tanka -- if you will permit. I realize that this contest does not necessarily call for it, but it may still be judged on it. (who knows!) A true tanka is very special. It is like two haiku pushed together.
The third line is all-important.
--> It acts as the closing line (satori) for the top three lines (the top haiku).
--> It acts as the opening line (satori) for the bottom two lines (the bottom haiku)
--> AND it acts as the pivot line for the two poems.
Makes sense. SO THAT--
You could actually take the poem apart and have two poems, if necessary - or if you had to. BUT - the whole poem still reads beautifully as one whole.
In real, modern-day tanka, the 5/7/5/7/7 rule does not apply, though the short/long/short/long/long rule generally does. For this contest, I think they are requesting the 5/7/5/7/7 rule.
They did not specify the third line rule, but if you want to learn about tanka, and I've been watching you write alllll kinds of poetry, I thought you might want to know.
--wink--
Good luck in the contest!
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these are our flowers ~
home grown in lush flowerbeds
scented love, hope, peace
souls seeking harmony ~
Join~ pick some of our beauty
Luna,
Let me tell you about tanka -- if you will permit. I realize that this contest does not necessarily call for it, but it may still be judged on it. (who knows!) A true tanka is very special. It is like two haiku pushed together.
The third line is all-important.
--> It acts as the closing line (satori) for the top three lines (the top haiku).
--> It acts as the opening line (satori) for the bottom two lines (the bottom haiku)
--> AND it acts as the pivot line for the two poems.
Makes sense. SO THAT--
You could actually take the poem apart and have two poems, if necessary - or if you had to. BUT - the whole poem still reads beautifully as one whole.
In real, modern-day tanka, the 5/7/5/7/7 rule does not apply, though the short/long/short/long/long rule generally does. For this contest, I think they are requesting the 5/7/5/7/7 rule.
They did not specify the third line rule, but if you want to learn about tanka, and I've been watching you write alllll kinds of poetry, I thought you might want to know.
--wink--
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2017
