2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "haiku (seagull cries at dawn)"A collection of Japanese poetry
33 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Gypsy, so very beautiful my sweet Queen of Haiku...this is just beautiful...seagulls cry at dawn, as I sip salty tears...I love your poem sweet girl....and a beautiful picture....love ya you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Hi Gypsy, so very beautiful my sweet Queen of Haiku...this is just beautiful...seagulls cry at dawn, as I sip salty tears...I love your poem sweet girl....and a beautiful picture....love ya you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Thank you very much, sweetie pie, you are an awesome friend and reviewer. 3 poems in a row? you are a glutton for punishment... LOL
Peace be with you,
Gypsy Blue Rose
Fanstory Haiku Teacher
Haiku Society of American member
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and also with you my sweet friend...I may fall behind...but I do catch up...and it's keep of fun...I love reading the writings...you are always sooooo welcome...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment from ruzu27
I enjoyed reading your excellent haiku with the great predawn atmosphere you paint, (seagull's cry and tear: sound and taste) and the spectacular artwork. Good satori line. Thank you for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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I enjoyed reading your excellent haiku with the great predawn atmosphere you paint, (seagull's cry and tear: sound and taste) and the spectacular artwork. Good satori line. Thank you for sharing with us.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words. Gypsy
Comment from Marykelly
The imagery of a seagull shattering the silence at dawn is vivid and the word cry harmonizes with the speaker's tearful mood. The seagull's call can also be interpreted as a wake up call for whatever is causing the speaker distress.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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The imagery of a seagull shattering the silence at dawn is vivid and the word cry harmonizes with the speaker's tearful mood. The seagull's call can also be interpreted as a wake up call for whatever is causing the speaker distress.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you you for the review review and kind words sweetie sweetie pie
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image.
-Good nature reference, concrete
imagery, and connection.
-Your descriptions are very good, Gypsy.
-They create the mood for the poem.
-Satori is also very good.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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-Very nice image.
-Good nature reference, concrete
imagery, and connection.
-Your descriptions are very good, Gypsy.
-They create the mood for the poem.
-Satori is also very good.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you you for the the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You are welcome.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Gypsy
This is a fine haiku
with excellent imagery in the seagull/tears
and excellent use of the sense of sound and taste
The em dash works well providing the separation
and the single word satori is very effective
A fine photograph and presentation enhances
Well done
RS
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Hello Gypsy
This is a fine haiku
with excellent imagery in the seagull/tears
and excellent use of the sense of sound and taste
The em dash works well providing the separation
and the single word satori is very effective
A fine photograph and presentation enhances
Well done
RS
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Pantygynt
This is as fine an example of a first class satori line as one could expect to see. That single, three syllable word, "affinity", says it all. But then we should expect perfection from the haiky queen herself.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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This is as fine an example of a first class satori line as one could expect to see. That single, three syllable word, "affinity", says it all. But then we should expect perfection from the haiky queen herself.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Jim. I appreciate your kind words. I am hardly a queen of haiku but it is nice to hear you say it.
gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A serene scene, calming and ambient. Few words but great feeling in your poem, a very enjoyable read, best wishes Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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A serene scene, calming and ambient. Few words but great feeling in your poem, a very enjoyable read, best wishes Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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thank you, dolly
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your inspiration for this haiku in your notes. I admired your artwork selection that helped to establish the mood and your use of alliteration that intensified it. I hope you sleep better tonight! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Thank you for sharing your inspiration for this haiku in your notes. I admired your artwork selection that helped to establish the mood and your use of alliteration that intensified it. I hope you sleep better tonight! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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JOan, thank you for your kind reviews, you are always so nice to me. Thank you!
gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
This haiku, Gypsy, relaxes me like a walk along the beach. Your words, image, and sound effects capture the predawn mood at the sea. I love how you found an affinity between a salty ocean and salty tears.
Thank you for sharing your haiku for Mary and Douglas' 19th wedding anniversary.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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This haiku, Gypsy, relaxes me like a walk along the beach. Your words, image, and sound effects capture the predawn mood at the sea. I love how you found an affinity between a salty ocean and salty tears.
Thank you for sharing your haiku for Mary and Douglas' 19th wedding anniversary.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Thank you for for the the review and kind words, sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely setting of empathy. A single bird call in morning can evoke such feelings. The next line show the expression of sadness in the tears and the final line shows a connection carrying the emotions of a kindred spirit.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Lovely setting of empathy. A single bird call in morning can evoke such feelings. The next line show the expression of sadness in the tears and the final line shows a connection carrying the emotions of a kindred spirit.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs