The Piper
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Piper, part 11"Young Adult Fantasy
20 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I'm so glad you are beginning to list the cast of characters... It's very helpful! It seems oddly disturbing to me that Burkehart would want to call off the search...
Am I wading in too deep, of may he be intending to pursue this search on his own?
Hmmmm.
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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I'm so glad you are beginning to list the cast of characters... It's very helpful! It seems oddly disturbing to me that Burkehart would want to call off the search...
Am I wading in too deep, of may he be intending to pursue this search on his own?
Hmmmm.
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
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Hi Karenina,
I'm glad it raises questions so you have a reason to keep reading.
Debi
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Yup That's the key to good writing...
You've got "it"
:)
Comment from May 1
That sure is intense. Burkehart sure is bitter and doesn't seem to be able to stand the Fae I wonder why. So far I haven't seen any obvious reasons. Wow, that sure is harsh but I guess honest of Burkehart. Oh, I see. Well, honestly in a war I feel all the species are cruel. I am guessing humans weren't much better towards their captives, but I guess I'll learn more in the future and be able to make a better judgment. :)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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That sure is intense. Burkehart sure is bitter and doesn't seem to be able to stand the Fae I wonder why. So far I haven't seen any obvious reasons. Wow, that sure is harsh but I guess honest of Burkehart. Oh, I see. Well, honestly in a war I feel all the species are cruel. I am guessing humans weren't much better towards their captives, but I guess I'll learn more in the future and be able to make a better judgment. :)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2020
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Hi May 1,
Yes, Burkehart harbors some ill feeling toward the Fae, but you are correct, war brings out the worst in people. Thank you again for going back to read these beginning chapters.
Debi
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello w.j.debi,
An interesting chapter in your fantasy novel. In which period in history is this story unfolding?
There's something about music that's seems to attract "other worldly" forces. I like the name Piper. :)
Best wishes for the rest of the book.
Sonali
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hello w.j.debi,
An interesting chapter in your fantasy novel. In which period in history is this story unfolding?
There's something about music that's seems to attract "other worldly" forces. I like the name Piper. :)
Best wishes for the rest of the book.
Sonali
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi Sonali,
Thank you for the kind comments, especially the insightful oberservstion about music. I appreciate the best wishes, too. This is set in the 1200's.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-You definitely put some twists in this chapter.
-Seems like a pack of wolves, no sign of Rupert or Piper,
Braun is very concerned, but for some reason Burkehart
is at odds with Braun.
-They each also had opposing views of the Fair Folk and Fae.
-I didn't understand Burkehart's views until the end, even
though no specifics were given.
-I like that you didn't give details; it was just right to keep us all wondering!
-Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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-You definitely put some twists in this chapter.
-Seems like a pack of wolves, no sign of Rupert or Piper,
Braun is very concerned, but for some reason Burkehart
is at odds with Braun.
-They each also had opposing views of the Fair Folk and Fae.
-I didn't understand Burkehart's views until the end, even
though no specifics were given.
-I like that you didn't give details; it was just right to keep us all wondering!
-Well done!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi Pam,
Thank you for the gorgeous six star rating to light up my day! I am happy to hear you like the twists. Thank you so much for your dedication to the story, I appreciate your time and continued interest.
Debi
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Debi. I enjoy the story very much.
Comment from rspoet
Another excellent chapter in the story of The Piper.
Of course, being the main character, one would assume Piper
has survived and is with the Fae, presumably Summerstorm.
But this chapter also informs us that Captain Burkehart
has had past experience with the Fair Folk,
and seemingly, not a good experience.
But being on opposite side of a war is a different experience, all together.
Excellent use of uncertainty and suspense.
Very well done
RS
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Another excellent chapter in the story of The Piper.
Of course, being the main character, one would assume Piper
has survived and is with the Fae, presumably Summerstorm.
But this chapter also informs us that Captain Burkehart
has had past experience with the Fair Folk,
and seemingly, not a good experience.
But being on opposite side of a war is a different experience, all together.
Excellent use of uncertainty and suspense.
Very well done
RS
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi RS,
Thank you for the wonderful shiny six star rating. It brightens my day and makes me smile. I appreciate you following the story and the encouraging comments you continue to give. I am pleased you enjoyed the uncertainty and suspense.
Debi
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
So exciting and I loved the fantasy element of it, it was nail-biting stuff I want to know more about these amazing characters you have brought to life, you can create world not just words with your pen, I absolutely loved reading this. Kind regards and well done, Meia :)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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So exciting and I loved the fantasy element of it, it was nail-biting stuff I want to know more about these amazing characters you have brought to life, you can create world not just words with your pen, I absolutely loved reading this. Kind regards and well done, Meia :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi Meia,
You make me smile with the high praise you give this chapter. Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and brightening my day with your comments.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Great job! I thought your scene was intense and built tension throughout. It's Redd Leif out there, right? Looking forward to the next part.
In a low controlled voice he said,--Suggest comma after voice.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Great job! I thought your scene was intense and built tension throughout. It's Redd Leif out there, right? Looking forward to the next part.
In a low controlled voice he said,--Suggest comma after voice.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi Russell,
Thank your for the wonderful six star rating and encouraging comments. Thank you for the suggestion for improvement. Inapprcait the close read.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Now I have to come to find out what they do to their captives LOL. This is very well penned and thoroughly held my attention. I think it very clever that you leave us wondering about the boys - who has them what has them? are they even alive? Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Now I have to come to find out what they do to their captives LOL. This is very well penned and thoroughly held my attention. I think it very clever that you leave us wondering about the boys - who has them what has them? are they even alive? Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind words about the writing. Your encouragement means a lot.
Comment from papa55mike
Awesome chapter in your book, just a few characters but loads of discovery! There's a battle brewing down the plot line and it should be a whopper! This is very well written but I would like to see it in a Gothic font on the Advanced Editor on your writing page. It's a lot of fun.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Awesome chapter in your book, just a few characters but loads of discovery! There's a battle brewing down the plot line and it should be a whopper! This is very well written but I would like to see it in a Gothic font on the Advanced Editor on your writing page. It's a lot of fun.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi Mike,
Wow. This is an encouraging review. I'll have to take a look at the font you suggest. Thank you so much for stopping in to read and review. I appreciate your time.
Comment from country ranch writer
Times like this one must stay tuff and keep the faith that they are still alive and well.we won' find out till we continue on in this saga so we must stay strong for them.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Times like this one must stay tuff and keep the faith that they are still alive and well.we won' find out till we continue on in this saga so we must stay strong for them.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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You are so right. Tough time ahead, but we must stay strong. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
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