Little Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
What would I do without you--I wouldn't be able to keep up with all the poetic forms and I'd miss splendid photography! I enjoyed the ensemble and colorful presentation plus your meter and rhymes. Hugs and here's to spring- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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What would I do without you--I wouldn't be able to keep up with all the poetic forms and I'd miss splendid photography! I enjoyed the ensemble and colorful presentation plus your meter and rhymes. Hugs and here's to spring- Joan
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you Joan. Yes, to Spring.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi friend, the dream of spring is always there. This is smething that we all love. We shiver at the thought of winter. But it could still be a good time if one accept. But this is a beautiful writing ,so full of natural tenderness.
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Hi friend, the dream of spring is always there. This is smething that we all love. We shiver at the thought of winter. But it could still be a good time if one accept. But this is a beautiful writing ,so full of natural tenderness.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Thank you Danny Jock.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Although Winter can be lovely, it seems to last a long time, longer than the other seasons. At least, they do in the UK. I can't wait for the Spring to come. I had a white and lilac, lilac tree. That sounds weird, a lilac, lilac! I enjoyed this poem, my friend, very much. Well done, now, bring on the Spring! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2017
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Although Winter can be lovely, it seems to last a long time, longer than the other seasons. At least, they do in the UK. I can't wait for the Spring to come. I had a white and lilac, lilac tree. That sounds weird, a lilac, lilac! I enjoyed this poem, my friend, very much. Well done, now, bring on the Spring! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 28-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2017
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Thank your Sandra, yes, bring it on.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom, I love Lilacs, the scent creeps in as I read your poem. Spring seems far off, but reading this reminds us winter is passing by. Blooms, green grass and the scent of spring will come as always. Excellent form and rhyme my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
m
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2017
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Dear Tom, I love Lilacs, the scent creeps in as I read your poem. Spring seems far off, but reading this reminds us winter is passing by. Blooms, green grass and the scent of spring will come as always. Excellent form and rhyme my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
m
Comment Written 28-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2017
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Thank you Maureen. Yes, one of my favorite scents and colors. Glad you liked my poem.
Comment from sunnilicious
Lilacs are so very fragrant. I didn't know it was a winter flower. Interesting poetic style. I like it. Good author notes. The rhymes scheme isn't simple to follow. The poem came out great though. I like the alliteration in clusters-contrasting best. Nice work. Have a great weekend :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Lilacs are so very fragrant. I didn't know it was a winter flower. Interesting poetic style. I like it. Good author notes. The rhymes scheme isn't simple to follow. The poem came out great though. I like the alliteration in clusters-contrasting best. Nice work. Have a great weekend :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you Alicia. It is very complex. Especially getting it Trochaic.
Comment from patcelaw
Nicely done Tom. I can imagine with the cold and snow of winter you are quite ready for the lovely blossoms of spring and the warming of the body and the soul. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Nicely done Tom. I can imagine with the cold and snow of winter you are quite ready for the lovely blossoms of spring and the warming of the body and the soul. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you Patricia. I like soft, fresh, fluffy snow. When it gets old, dirty, crusty, or slushy - not so much.
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
I see you finally got that lilac poem up! And it was worth waiting for, too! *smile* Love the image of snow alllll around and all the plants covered up for the winter, and the homeowner dreaming of Spring to come. That's ME! HAHAHAHA! I can soooo relate! Thanks!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Tom,
I see you finally got that lilac poem up! And it was worth waiting for, too! *smile* Love the image of snow alllll around and all the plants covered up for the winter, and the homeowner dreaming of Spring to come. That's ME! HAHAHAHA! I can soooo relate! Thanks!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you Robyn. See what I mean about in your Pansy poem and ths one?
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Decanelle. At the near end of winter we start to look forward to colorful Spring again and cannot wait for the season to start. An excellent photo.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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A very well-written Decanelle. At the near end of winter we start to look forward to colorful Spring again and cannot wait for the season to start. An excellent photo.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from RodG
I can easily relate to the Speaker's desire to see the blooms of spring.
Nice contrast between what exists now and what she wishes to see.
I am unfamiliar with this type of poem, but like its unique pattern. Rod
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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I can easily relate to the Speaker's desire to see the blooms of spring.
Nice contrast between what exists now and what she wishes to see.
I am unfamiliar with this type of poem, but like its unique pattern. Rod
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you RodG.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is fun. The even numbered, rhyming catalectic trochaic lines make excellent follow ups to the fully troachaic odd numbered feminine ending lines. Something seems to have gone awry at the seventh line that here has a masculine rather than feminine ending. Has it become transposed with "gracing" perhaps? I show it here in between lines six and eight - three jolly boys all in a row? I am sure you will put it right when you see this.
fragrant flowers I adore -
lavender clusters gracing land
with contrasting leaves of green.
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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This is fun. The even numbered, rhyming catalectic trochaic lines make excellent follow ups to the fully troachaic odd numbered feminine ending lines. Something seems to have gone awry at the seventh line that here has a masculine rather than feminine ending. Has it become transposed with "gracing" perhaps? I show it here in between lines six and eight - three jolly boys all in a row? I am sure you will put it right when you see this.
fragrant flowers I adore -
lavender clusters gracing land
with contrasting leaves of green.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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You're absolutely correct. Gracing was supposed to be the end word. I appreciate you pointing that out,
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Fixed now. I Originally wrote it "lavender clusters land gracing." But decided on this consideration to move land all the way to the front of the line, making the first stressed syllable even harder.
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Yup. That is great now.
