Making A Fool Out Of Him
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Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. Your story flowed from beginning to end. You captured the reality of the bulls at the rodeo well.I think you completed the challenge of the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
A well-written contest entry. Your story flowed from beginning to end. You captured the reality of the bulls at the rodeo well.I think you completed the challenge of the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your support it means a lot to me
Comment from LIJ Red
corner's office==coroner's office?
were still talking ==are still talking.
Bellowing loudly(,) at a loss as what to do next(,) he ==add commas
I read somewhere that they do all kinds of tricks to make a bull weak, sick, and crazy in Spain and Mexico before bullfights. Might be fun to sneak in a mean wild bull right off the pasture and see what happens. Excellent story.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
corner's office==coroner's office?
were still talking ==are still talking.
Bellowing loudly(,) at a loss as what to do next(,) he ==add commas
I read somewhere that they do all kinds of tricks to make a bull weak, sick, and crazy in Spain and Mexico before bullfights. Might be fun to sneak in a mean wild bull right off the pasture and see what happens. Excellent story.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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thanks friend for your support
Comment from doggymad
Excellent read my friend. A great contest entry. I love the the conversation that takes place between the pair and their observations on humans.
Best of luck with this fun write
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
Excellent read my friend. A great contest entry. I love the the conversation that takes place between the pair and their observations on humans.
Best of luck with this fun write
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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thank you for your support
Comment from Dawn Munro
"...coroner's office."
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Commas needed:
"More frightening was(,) it was..."
"...threw his rider(,)..."
"...constantly(,) and he..."
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Period after "arena".
Capital on "(T)hey say..."
You bring us right into the action with this one, and it's especially exciting for those who aren't familiar with cowboys and bull-riding. Good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
"...coroner's office."
~~~
Commas needed:
"More frightening was(,) it was..."
"...threw his rider(,)..."
"...constantly(,) and he..."
~~~
Period after "arena".
Capital on "(T)hey say..."
You bring us right into the action with this one, and it's especially exciting for those who aren't familiar with cowboys and bull-riding. Good luck!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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fixed and re wrote some of the talking
Comment from sunnilicious
That story started out pretty normal. The change of events into the ending is frightening. I like that it's hearsay versus actual sightings. Well thought out and written good. Great visual imagery. Conversational. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
That story started out pretty normal. The change of events into the ending is frightening. I like that it's hearsay versus actual sightings. Well thought out and written good. Great visual imagery. Conversational. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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so glad it kept your attention
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a very well penned entry with a really creative topic. I thought the beginning really worked well with the contest theme - having the bulls all talk about the silly humans who try to ride them. The end kind of threw me as it became more of a story and not so much what the bulls thought of human behavior. It might of worked better for me had Bushwhacker expressed his depression as his owner's loss and questioned why it might happen. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
This is a very well penned entry with a really creative topic. I thought the beginning really worked well with the contest theme - having the bulls all talk about the silly humans who try to ride them. The end kind of threw me as it became more of a story and not so much what the bulls thought of human behavior. It might of worked better for me had Bushwhacker expressed his depression as his owner's loss and questioned why it might happen. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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thank you for your kind support
Comment from Ric Myworld
I never thought I would see the day that I would learn about things from the bull's perspective. I guess animals get just as attached to us humans as we do to those animals. One of those strange but true types of stories that will stay with us readers for a long while. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
I never thought I would see the day that I would learn about things from the bull's perspective. I guess animals get just as attached to us humans as we do to those animals. One of those strange but true types of stories that will stay with us readers for a long while. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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thank you for your support
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sad story on the point of view of the animals. The human trains their animals to do all kind of things to amuse people. When the human dies the animal is lost and dies of grief for the loss of its owner.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
A very well-written sad story on the point of view of the animals. The human trains their animals to do all kind of things to amuse people. When the human dies the animal is lost and dies of grief for the loss of its owner.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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it is sad the animals give unconditional love to all the humans and ask nothing in return but love and companionship
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good contest entry. I always wondered what the bulls were talking about while waiting to go on. God luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
A very good contest entry. I always wondered what the bulls were talking about while waiting to go on. God luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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THEY BULL SHIT HAHA
Comment from c_lucas
If one would check, they would find out the animals were mistreated in order to make them bad. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
If one would check, they would find out the animals were mistreated in order to make them bad. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2017
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NOT ALL THE ANIMALS ONLY TJOSE WHO TRY TO BUCK THE SYSTEM