I'm freezing!
Billy is lost in the woods and is freezing.27 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Bill. Well this is such an enchanting story and you are such a delightful fearless little lad. You'll have everyone falling in love with you. Obviously charm was 100% instilled into your heart and soul. Well done. Now Billy must be found! xx d
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Hello Bill. Well this is such an enchanting story and you are such a delightful fearless little lad. You'll have everyone falling in love with you. Obviously charm was 100% instilled into your heart and soul. Well done. Now Billy must be found! xx d
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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A "SALUTE," Debbi! As I said earlier, "You're reading my work is an honor! Hugs and kisses from across the miles, Babee. Since I can remember, I have always been, friendly, flirty and flamboyant. My grandpa was too--Bless his heart. And Grandma used to beat his tail with a broom--"When he flirted with the lady down the road--Ouch!!" Did you get the Valentine's Card I sent you? Best wishes--"And God bless!"
xx Bill
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Hi Bill. No I don't think I got a Valentine's Day Card and it's alright! I would have my own way of dealing with your grandfather if I was his missus. Mainly he'd be too damn busy to flirt with old whats her name down the road. lol I believe I'm caught up now ... xx d
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is going to make a great movie, Darling. What a story, you really write your characters well, as if the readers are right there freezing with Billy. So cute how you grabbed your toboggan and lunch box and headed home, a strong-willed little boy you were, huh? I am presuming long handles are long-johns, never heard it called that before. You had a stove in your schoolhouse? - goodness sounds like "Little House on the prairie". This is a wonderful story, I loved it, and can't wait to see what happens next. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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This is going to make a great movie, Darling. What a story, you really write your characters well, as if the readers are right there freezing with Billy. So cute how you grabbed your toboggan and lunch box and headed home, a strong-willed little boy you were, huh? I am presuming long handles are long-johns, never heard it called that before. You had a stove in your schoolhouse? - goodness sounds like "Little House on the prairie". This is a wonderful story, I loved it, and can't wait to see what happens next. ~Kerry
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the Six Stars, Kerry. I appreciate your review and kind words.
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You are very welcome, Darling, it is a wonderful story. Your a great writer.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
My nose and face were numbed by the freezing wind. I tried moving my arms, legs and the effort failed. "Please, help me someone," I screamed. No one answered. "I'm here by the snowdrift," I yelled. Why, can't you hear me? "What a waste," I thought. My freezing to death at age seven when I had planned much more. "Wait a second," I whispered. How could I be freezing when I felt so warm? I was tired! Maybe a nap is what I needed. Slowly closing my eyes, I drifted off to sleep. ' Certain death would seem logical?
Wonderful, I have enjoyed every chapter of this book immensely, well done kindest regards Meia :)
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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My nose and face were numbed by the freezing wind. I tried moving my arms, legs and the effort failed. "Please, help me someone," I screamed. No one answered. "I'm here by the snowdrift," I yelled. Why, can't you hear me? "What a waste," I thought. My freezing to death at age seven when I had planned much more. "Wait a second," I whispered. How could I be freezing when I felt so warm? I was tired! Maybe a nap is what I needed. Slowly closing my eyes, I drifted off to sleep. ' Certain death would seem logical?
Wonderful, I have enjoyed every chapter of this book immensely, well done kindest regards Meia :)
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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A "Salute!" To you, Meia. Coming from a commendable Arthur such as yourself, "your words touch my heart!" Glad you
are enjoying. Once I finish the twenty chapters, and we start shooting the movie, "I'll invite you to join me on the set. Would
you take a vacation to Dollywood? I'd introduce you to Dolly. She is a "whippersnapper!" Seems I remember telling you, she
and my late wife were best of friends. I think I told you, that I'm posting Chapter 7, "The Fire!" Within a week. Hope you join
in, Meia. Best wishes, sweetheart.
Bill
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Dollywood is my dream vacation because she and I have the same vital statistics :) I used to model myself on her I ADORE her !I love Dolly and she seems such a wonderful as well as talented woman. love Meia :)
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Okay, Meia! We'll plan the movie set for the early fall, when the golden leaves tumble to the ground,
and the brisk wind, "kisses your face." And then, Dolly will sing you, "A Coat of many colors, my mamma made for me." Why! I bet she'll let you
wear it, "to keep you toasty warm!" Oh, yes! You
shall love Dolly, "for she's a trip." Best wishes,
beautiful. You used to model, huh? Wowwww!!
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, again, Junglefighter,
Good chapter, although backward. :P
I found a couple of typos: My dad being home too take charge so to speak, made my falling to sleep much easier (How about something like 'My dad, also home,). "Be sure and tell your parents, (no comma) that school will be out until further notice. [Also, make sure you do your own research when it comes to someone else editing unless they are a professional, which I'm not.)
I really liked these parts: Of course, my theatrics toward being head of the household had been a macho trip and I was walking in tall cotton. Of course, you knew that, didn't you? I remembered counting eight sheep as they jumped the picket fence. And I had watched the ninth one leap. Poor thing, I fell asleep before it landed, and left it suspended in midair. Oh, well, I'd get it down the next night. Cute!!
Okay, I'll wait for the next!
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Hello, again, Junglefighter,
Good chapter, although backward. :P
I found a couple of typos: My dad being home too take charge so to speak, made my falling to sleep much easier (How about something like 'My dad, also home,). "Be sure and tell your parents, (no comma) that school will be out until further notice. [Also, make sure you do your own research when it comes to someone else editing unless they are a professional, which I'm not.)
I really liked these parts: Of course, my theatrics toward being head of the household had been a macho trip and I was walking in tall cotton. Of course, you knew that, didn't you? I remembered counting eight sheep as they jumped the picket fence. And I had watched the ninth one leap. Poor thing, I fell asleep before it landed, and left it suspended in midair. Oh, well, I'd get it down the next night. Cute!!
Okay, I'll wait for the next!
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Hi, Rasmine!
Thanks for the review, kind words and help here. Your suggestion is good and it is edited in. Good hearing from you again, my dear friend. Best wishes.
Bill
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this continuing story about Billy. I read this chapter before, but for some reason, I didn't comment on it. It reads well and we are left with the suspense of waiting for the next part. (I already read it, so I know that Billy is saved.)
Another well written part - looking forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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thank you for sharing this continuing story about Billy. I read this chapter before, but for some reason, I didn't comment on it. It reads well and we are left with the suspense of waiting for the next part. (I already read it, so I know that Billy is saved.)
Another well written part - looking forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Hi, beautiful!
So good hearing from you. Oh! You read chapter 6, huh? You are a "smarty-pants!" Goes to show what you know. Why, Billy found himself an older woman, (22, with curves like in a road) and she taught him all about "the birds and bees." And right before he turned eight-years old, he jerked her into his arms, kissed her lips, bit her tongue and said, "my God, you're beautiful!" She quickly pulled away, and then slapped his face. Ouch!!! Was all of that in there when you read it, Patty?? Of course, it wasn't! Best wishes for, "good health and happiness always."
Bill
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you are welcome
Comment from Mabaker
I have just picked this story up will go back and read earlier chapters if they are as good as this one you have a winner. I enjoyed it very much indeed. Keep writing I'll keep reading. Regards Mabaker.
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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I have just picked this story up will go back and read earlier chapters if they are as good as this one you have a winner. I enjoyed it very much indeed. Keep writing I'll keep reading. Regards Mabaker.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Hi, beautiful!
Australia, huh? So your interest are in, "writing, gardening and cat's. What kind of cat(s) do you have, baby? And is there a
husband? Thanks for the review and kind words. I hope you will enjoy chapter's 1 thru 4. I am about thirty minutes away
from posting chapter 6, "I've found Billy." Hope you enjoy it as well. Best wishes, my dear friend.
Respectfully,
Bill
Comment from Leena
Absolutely enjoyed the read as much as I did Chapter 4. The mystery piling up towards the end is gripping and leaves you begging for more. Eagerly waiting for the next...
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Absolutely enjoyed the read as much as I did Chapter 4. The mystery piling up towards the end is gripping and leaves you begging for more. Eagerly waiting for the next...
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Hi, Leena!
It is an honor meeting you. Oh, I'm so disappointed! Know why? Because you haven't read, "Chapters 1, 2, and 3. Please, read them before you watch the movie. Read your Profile, "ABOUT!" How's everything in India, beautiful? W. Somerset Maugham's quote is awesome...and how true. As I write, "as a greeting," in each chapter of my book, "I invite you to join in, and my wish, is to make you laugh and cry, while leaving you in a state of uncertainty of what will happen next." I am posting Chapter 6, "I've found Billy," within the week. Hope you will enjoy. Best wishes for, "good health and happiness always."
Respectfully,
Bill
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The pleasure is all mine. You are an impressive writer and I'm most definitely going to read the first three chapters at the earliest.
Good luck and grace to you!
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Also thank you so much for visiting my profile and for your best wishes. I just submitted for a contest..Would be glad if you read it. Yes, India is beautiful..evokes emotions every waking moments.
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Please put me on your fan list, sweetheart. I would love to read your work. And when we start the filming of "A Truck Load of Hard," in Pigeon Forge, (Dollywood) Tennessee. Take a vacation and join me. I'll introduce you to Dolly, "she is a
mess," and was a close friend to my late wife. I'll go to your profile, review your submission to the contest, and vote for you beautiful. Are you married?
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A "kiss on your lips," for your kind words, Leena.
Hope this makes you blush.
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haha :)
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Hello Bill Thanks again.. Overwhelmed!
Comment from frierajac
I love the complete story you have done here. I am looking forward to reading more. I wonder if you will be making the scripts as well or if they are going to be a happening and on the spot with production? Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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I love the complete story you have done here. I am looking forward to reading more. I wonder if you will be making the scripts as well or if they are going to be a happening and on the spot with production? Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Hi, Frierajac!!
It is an honor meeting you. I read your Profile, "ABOUT!" And I just love your new ideas for a rainy Spring. Golly-gee! What do you do in your spare time, beautiful? One thing is for certain, and that is, taking the time out to review my writing. A kiss on
your lips for that, sweetheart. Oh, yes! Are you married? No, I'll not be making the scripts. My cousin and I shall be meeting
at Pigeon Forge to discuss and arrange all of the details. I am however, asking my dear friend Dolly Parton to introduce the movie. I'm relocating back to the old home place, building a modern log cabin on the mountain side, and feeding all of my creatures while finishing up my other three books. A "Salute!" My dear friend. Best wishes for, "good health and happiness
always."
Respectfully,
Bill
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A joy to read your story and I have felt freezing temperatures in France when I visited during January 2012 when we had -20C. I put a bottle of Coca-Cola outside and it froze solid in 15 minutes! You ate a very unusual breakfast, but you need good hot nourishing food in the cold I suppose. Love reading about your adventures Bill, have a great evening, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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A joy to read your story and I have felt freezing temperatures in France when I visited during January 2012 when we had -20C. I put a bottle of Coca-Cola outside and it froze solid in 15 minutes! You ate a very unusual breakfast, but you need good hot nourishing food in the cold I suppose. Love reading about your adventures Bill, have a great evening, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-May-2017
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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Hi, Dolly!
Good hearing from you, and thanks for the review and kind words. Shall be posting chapter 6, "I've found Billy," within a week. Hope you enjoy it as well. Best wishes, my dear friend.
Bill
Comment from JDRBAR
I have to ask why Billy took his toboggon to school but didn't use it in either direction? I like the scenario otherwise though.
helping hold my body helping TO hold
Reflecting back on what grandpa had told me to do, if lost in a snowstorm, I stopped abruptly behind a snowdrift, used my tin lunchbox to dig a hole for my lanky frame, hung the lunchbox from a forked limb as a marker for my body, jumped into the hole, and covered myself with snow with exception of my face.
This sentence needs to be broken down to several smaller sentences.
I tried moving my arms, legs and the effort failed.
I tried moving my arms and legs, BUT failed.
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I have to ask why Billy took his toboggon to school but didn't use it in either direction? I like the scenario otherwise though.
helping hold my body helping TO hold
Reflecting back on what grandpa had told me to do, if lost in a snowstorm, I stopped abruptly behind a snowdrift, used my tin lunchbox to dig a hole for my lanky frame, hung the lunchbox from a forked limb as a marker for my body, jumped into the hole, and covered myself with snow with exception of my face.
This sentence needs to be broken down to several smaller sentences.
I tried moving my arms, legs and the effort failed.
I tried moving my arms and legs, BUT failed.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-May-2017
