Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 438 "Bluejay Array"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from sunnilicious
I haven't seen a blue jay in years. Nice picture. Great poem. Descriptive as it is informative. Well thought out. Good visual imagery. Nice flow of rhythm and rhymes.Good author notes. Great work.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I haven't seen a blue jay in years. Nice picture. Great poem. Descriptive as it is informative. Well thought out. Good visual imagery. Nice flow of rhythm and rhymes.Good author notes. Great work.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Sethank you Alica. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
I loved the poem but hated the maths. That pretty well sums me up but I actually didn't understand your explanation where it reads L3=x+1syllables....5....7....9. Either the total or the formula is incorrect as x= 6....8....10 so x+1 would equal 7....9....11. in the case of this poem we are in column three and the syllable count = 9 so I think it is the formula that is incorrect and should read L3=x-1.
2nd review. Ah! So 2 and 2 still make four. I can never be certain with my maths. Formula is now correct. Back to first review.
A few years ago we had a jay nesting locally but I havent seen the bird for a couple of years at least, or hear him either. They are raucous birds with a screeching cry. could be a different variety to yours but the colours are similar. I imagine they are the colours of the cock bird. The female in bird species is usually a drab creature -- makes one glad to be human doesn't it?
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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I loved the poem but hated the maths. That pretty well sums me up but I actually didn't understand your explanation where it reads L3=x+1syllables....5....7....9. Either the total or the formula is incorrect as x= 6....8....10 so x+1 would equal 7....9....11. in the case of this poem we are in column three and the syllable count = 9 so I think it is the formula that is incorrect and should read L3=x-1.
2nd review. Ah! So 2 and 2 still make four. I can never be certain with my maths. Formula is now correct. Back to first review.
A few years ago we had a jay nesting locally but I havent seen the bird for a couple of years at least, or hear him either. They are raucous birds with a screeching cry. could be a different variety to yours but the colours are similar. I imagine they are the colours of the cock bird. The female in bird species is usually a drab creature -- makes one glad to be human doesn't it?
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you Pantygynt, yes they are very noisy, just as you describe.
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I see the typo and did fix the formula to X-1.
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I'd better amend my review or everyone will think I've gone mad. I have to say I am glad I was right because I am such a duffer at maths.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Birds can be so colourful and Mother Nature has painted them in such wonderful hues and the Bluejay brings joy to our scenes, lovely poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Birds can be so colourful and Mother Nature has painted them in such wonderful hues and the Bluejay brings joy to our scenes, lovely poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Ethank you Dolly. They sure do.
Comment from The Death
Hi T,
This looks like an interesting form. You've captured the traits of Bluejay very well here. The descriptions are vivid, and make this more appealing. The bonus of strong rhymes make your words flow well.
Regarding the notes, L3 should have "x-1" syllables, instead of "x+1" that you mention. The syllable count there contradicts the formula.
I enjoyed reading it.
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Hi T,
This looks like an interesting form. You've captured the traits of Bluejay very well here. The descriptions are vivid, and make this more appealing. The bonus of strong rhymes make your words flow well.
Regarding the notes, L3 should have "x-1" syllables, instead of "x+1" that you mention. The syllable count there contradicts the formula.
I enjoyed reading it.
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you The death. Hmm, my x was 10 and I count L3 as 9, which is x-1.
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Oh i see. It was a typo in the formula. I fixed it. Thank you.
Comment from ciliverde
Another complex form here, and it suits to describe the Bluejay, a bird with beautiful coloring and a real cheeky attitude. Don't you think? We have them around here too. You seem to like exploring new and/or obscure forms - I like that! It's a great exercise for a poet, I believe :))
Carol
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Another complex form here, and it suits to describe the Bluejay, a bird with beautiful coloring and a real cheeky attitude. Don't you think? We have them around here too. You seem to like exploring new and/or obscure forms - I like that! It's a great exercise for a poet, I believe :))
Carol
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2017
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Thank you Carol. Yes, whenever I discover a new one, have to try it out. I really enjoy where they lead me.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned about the Blue jay. It is a very pretty bird and you captured it with the picture you used. Very good descriptive wording and imagery! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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This is a very well written poem you have penned about the Blue jay. It is a very pretty bird and you captured it with the picture you used. Very good descriptive wording and imagery! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you Teri
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
It seems to be a very difficult form of poetry. The Blue Array is a beautiful looking bird, I did not see them around here. An excellent capture at the right moment.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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It seems to be a very difficult form of poetry. The Blue Array is a beautiful looking bird, I did not see them around here. An excellent capture at the right moment.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you Sandra. They are pretty, but noisy and mean to other birds.
Comment from Joan E.
You'd think I'd be familiar with this form, since I am smitten by alliteration--but it requires a complex formula! You managed the requirements well, and I enjoyed your rhymes and apt use of "apparel" as well. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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You'd think I'd be familiar with this form, since I am smitten by alliteration--but it requires a complex formula! You managed the requirements well, and I enjoyed your rhymes and apt use of "apparel" as well. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank You Joan. I am smitten with alliteration too.
