Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 442 "The Heart in the City"Small and Specialty Poems
16 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I do like this sonnet format, it's a delight to read. I'll have to have a go at that. Your photo is amazing, Tom, how lucky you were to be in the right place at that time to catch it. And, what a wonderful poem to compliment it. The words are perfect the heart in a city, I doubt this will ever happen again. Well done, and all round excellent presentation. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
  |
I do like this sonnet format, it's a delight to read. I'll have to have a go at that. Your photo is amazing, Tom, how lucky you were to be in the right place at that time to catch it. And, what a wonderful poem to compliment it. The words are perfect the heart in a city, I doubt this will ever happen again. Well done, and all round excellent presentation. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
-
Thank you very much Sandra. Sometime I get lucky! Lol.
Comment from robyn corum
What a fun photograph! That's a one in a million shot, for sure! *smile* And though I am NOT a sonnet girl, I really enjoyed this one. You made it SING. I really, really liked it. Thanks! BTW, I've missed ya!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
What a fun photograph! That's a one in a million shot, for sure! *smile* And though I am NOT a sonnet girl, I really enjoyed this one. You made it SING. I really, really liked it. Thanks! BTW, I've missed ya!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Sthank you Robyn, I'm pkeased you liked it,mand its nice to be missed too.
Comment from Just2Write
Wow - I didn't notice the heart until I read your notes. What an amazing image to capture, and it goes perfectly with your Sonnet about a city having a heart. I love that you stay true to your home town in your poetry. This is an excellent ekphrastic poem, Tom. An excellent start to 2017.
Rose.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
Wow - I didn't notice the heart until I read your notes. What an amazing image to capture, and it goes perfectly with your Sonnet about a city having a heart. I love that you stay true to your home town in your poetry. This is an excellent ekphrastic poem, Tom. An excellent start to 2017.
Rose.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you very much Rose. Sometimes a photographer gets lucky.
-
Amen. But please let it be a photograph of something that has a huge payout.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is beautifully constructed and reads aloud like music. I have never heard of this style of sonnet before and am now dying to give it a go. Your imagery in this piece is marvelous and the couplet absolutely inspiring in its truth and simplicity. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
This is beautifully constructed and reads aloud like music. I have never heard of this style of sonnet before and am now dying to give it a go. Your imagery in this piece is marvelous and the couplet absolutely inspiring in its truth and simplicity. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you Mystic Angel. I would be delighted if you tried one.
-
I will work on getting my courage up.
Comment from William Ross
Nicely done on this style sonnet, great rhyming and a good meter, Cities do have a heart if we take the time to look. great write and thanks for the share. have a great day
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
Nicely done on this style sonnet, great rhyming and a good meter, Cities do have a heart if we take the time to look. great write and thanks for the share. have a great day
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you William.
Comment from Pantygynt
Welcome back from your time out. I for one have missed both your posts and your knowledgeablreviews.
Your photographers eye picked up on that cloud that was there for everyone to see but didn't.
An interesting form and a clever exposition of it. Alliteration on the "B" that includes the word "bridge" alerts the reader to the upcoming bridge on to which we rumble with more alliteration on the "M"
By the time we get to line 19 there has been considerable cleverness but little beauty. The volta however turns our thoughts to that omission and finds it in all sorts of unlikely places.
This has to be worth a six.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
 |
Welcome back from your time out. I for one have missed both your posts and your knowledgeablreviews.
Your photographers eye picked up on that cloud that was there for everyone to see but didn't.
An interesting form and a clever exposition of it. Alliteration on the "B" that includes the word "bridge" alerts the reader to the upcoming bridge on to which we rumble with more alliteration on the "M"
By the time we get to line 19 there has been considerable cleverness but little beauty. The volta however turns our thoughts to that omission and finds it in all sorts of unlikely places.
This has to be worth a six.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you Pantygynt. I am very pleased to be back and its great to recieve a six on it. As usual, your analysis is most astute.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is true. There is beauty in the city with its people, architecture and street art.
Even without green everywhere there is life. Each city does have its heart.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
This is true. There is beauty in the city with its people, architecture and street art.
Even without green everywhere there is life. Each city does have its heart.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you dragon poet. I will try to keep it going.
-
You're welcome.
dp
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi TRIESCEL,
This was a great poetic description of Fourth street in Minnesota. It is a shame that we lose so much greenery in these concrete jungles, but they do have their own attractions especially at night. You were lucky to capture that cloud shaped like a heart.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
Hi TRIESCEL,
This was a great poetic description of Fourth street in Minnesota. It is a shame that we lose so much greenery in these concrete jungles, but they do have their own attractions especially at night. You were lucky to capture that cloud shaped like a heart.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you Brenda. Yes, I was pleasantly surprised.
Comment from robina1978
Thanks for your foot note that helped me to know which form it is-never heard of it. A nice photo, made by you, complements your poem perfectly. It is an Alfred Dorn Sonnet, completely with all requirements.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
Thanks for your foot note that helped me to know which form it is-never heard of it. A nice photo, made by you, complements your poem perfectly. It is an Alfred Dorn Sonnet, completely with all requirements.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you Ine.
Comment from sunnilicious
Concrete jungles are pretty amazing with all the architecture. Good perspective presented. Creative. Descriptive. Well thought out and nicely written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
|
Concrete jungles are pretty amazing with all the architecture. Good perspective presented. Creative. Descriptive. Well thought out and nicely written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
-
Thank you Alicia. You made an excellent analysis. I love that six rating too.
