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Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
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Speaking of "Perfecto." I love this teensy tiny story of revenge. Good use of the fifty with nothing wasted nothing omitted. Fun to read. - Wendy

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
    Thanks, Wendy.
Comment from Aiona
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Heh! It took me a while, but I see what you did there. Very cute story, and funny! It is a story of retribution, with a twist, and ANOTHER twist! All in only fifty words. Pretty damn swank.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
    Thanks, Aiona, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from BeasPeas
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The plot worked out perfectly anyway, even though it wasn't the intended outcome. Colorful display of your little story. Fun to read and brought a smile. Marilyn

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Marilyn, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from lyenochka
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That's a pretty hilarious story with a twist and still the narrator's intended result all told in fifty words! That is quite an achievement! Good use of tone in the narrator's language which really sounds like a young boy.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
    Thank you for the terrific review.
reply by lyenochka on 10-Jan-2017
    You had my vote and I appreciated the laugh it gave.
Comment from winnona
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a well-written contest entry, I think you completed the challenge of the contest well
The story flows well from beginning to the end. Your artwork completed it well. One has to see the humor in the story also. It could not have been your brother in the bathroom first,

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
    Thank you, winnona, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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LOL! This is a splendid entry. You set the reader up nicely thinking it is your brother who will open the lid and then deliver a bang up ending as you were setting your brother up for punishments all along. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Monica, for the excellent review.
reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 09-Jan-2017
    My pleasure. It seems safer to read than write these days.
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Well, on the downside you got your father with this goofy gag instead of you brother, Dave, whom you wanted to scare half to death, and rightly so, I'm certain.
On the positive side, your dad knows a great practical joke when he sees or becomes a part of one, so he's not going to kill you, heh-heh.
Best wishes to you in the voting.
~Dean :)
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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Dean, for the fun review.
reply by Dean Kuch on 09-Jan-2017
    My pleasure. :)
Comment from w.j.debi
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Seems David must have a reputation as a prankster or dad would not have automatically assumed the blame should be assigned to him. Brother gets the revenge after all. Good luck in the contest with your humorous tale.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you, wj, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Marykelly
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Pranks have a way of sometimes backfiring on the prankster and in this story you certainly discovered that on several levels. Is your brother still laughing?

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Marykelly, for the great review. Bill
Comment from marinadawn
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This made me smile remembering as a child the many tricks my brothers employed and got me in trouble, it captures that feel perfectly of innocent fun

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you, marinadawn, for the nice review. Bill