Into the light
Turning our heads won't solve the problem.9 total reviews
Comment from wondertwin
Wonderfully done poem for this contest. Socioeconomic biases is something people don't even recognize is there. Nicely done. Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Wonderfully done poem for this contest. Socioeconomic biases is something people don't even recognize is there. Nicely done. Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 06-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is really very good and fulfils the demands of this poetry form. If we could manage what you write would truly be a challenge well met - much like your poem which is a well met challenge - good luck and warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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This is really very good and fulfils the demands of this poetry form. If we could manage what you write would truly be a challenge well met - much like your poem which is a well met challenge - good luck and warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-4-4-12, Into the Light, has a compelling tone that asks the reader to work for justice by acknowledging what is hiding in the shadows. Knowing is not enough to defeat something.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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This 2-4-4-12, Into the Light, has a compelling tone that asks the reader to work for justice by acknowledging what is hiding in the shadows. Knowing is not enough to defeat something.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from mvbrooks
Interesting take on this poem. At a time where people are saying "happy" and "merry," this poem is a reminder that there is a darker side that needs to have light shed upon it. You've met the line and syllable count well.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Interesting take on this poem. At a time where people are saying "happy" and "merry," this poem is a reminder that there is a darker side that needs to have light shed upon it. You've met the line and syllable count well.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I knw this is right. Many are left behind because of greed , talk, and not enough action. Good contest piece. Hope it does well.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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I knw this is right. Many are left behind because of greed , talk, and not enough action. Good contest piece. Hope it does well.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Marykelly
This poem suggests a good New Year's resolution, speak out for the causes that matter. It doesn't suggest any particular issue but does remind us that speaking up can make a difference to the issues that are important.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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This poem suggests a good New Year's resolution, speak out for the causes that matter. It doesn't suggest any particular issue but does remind us that speaking up can make a difference to the issues that are important.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the poem. Is a subtle propaganda on the imperative of coming together as one to uphold that which is right and to bring to justice that which is wrong.
The work highlights the potential ambivalence of a united society in upholding that which is right and in the same vein upbraid the wrong.
Excellent work! Bravo!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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The objective correlative of the poem. Is a subtle propaganda on the imperative of coming together as one to uphold that which is right and to bring to justice that which is wrong.
The work highlights the potential ambivalence of a united society in upholding that which is right and in the same vein upbraid the wrong.
Excellent work! Bravo!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Happy New Year
Comment from flylikeaneagle
*** stars for a great message***
Yes, so many people walk by. The homeless asks for money, food and shoes.
Maybe, they were one paycheck from staying in their home. What happened to their lives? We all have stories to tell. Some, abuse the system and get "give-me" all the time. Others, work so hard and sacrifice to make the payments. Trump smiles...what will he do for the American people.
Great photos. We can be the hands and feet of Jesus as we touch people's hearts and feed the hungry and give them clothes and a home. Yes, great message!
God bless! Happy New Year! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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*** stars for a great message***
Yes, so many people walk by. The homeless asks for money, food and shoes.
Maybe, they were one paycheck from staying in their home. What happened to their lives? We all have stories to tell. Some, abuse the system and get "give-me" all the time. Others, work so hard and sacrifice to make the payments. Trump smiles...what will he do for the American people.
Great photos. We can be the hands and feet of Jesus as we touch people's hearts and feed the hungry and give them clothes and a home. Yes, great message!
God bless! Happy New Year! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the awesome review and the bonus star.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Great poem with an inspirational/motivational message. The poem encourages the reader to stand up for societal's injustices. Great use of word economy and rhymes.
Good luck int he contest, and Happy New Year!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Great poem with an inspirational/motivational message. The poem encourages the reader to stand up for societal's injustices. Great use of word economy and rhymes.
Good luck int he contest, and Happy New Year!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thanks for the kind review.
