Embrace the New Year
ABC contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from RoseWriting
This was the best of the winning entries in this contest - by a large margin, in my opinion. You actually had something to say, and you said it well. Nature poems are not inherently bad, but it's difficult to write one that doesn't seem trite or mundane, yet trite and mundane nature poetry often seems to take away the first place, and I'm not sure why.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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This was the best of the winning entries in this contest - by a large margin, in my opinion. You actually had something to say, and you said it well. Nature poems are not inherently bad, but it's difficult to write one that doesn't seem trite or mundane, yet trite and mundane nature poetry often seems to take away the first place, and I'm not sure why.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Rose.
I appreciate the wonderful comments and that you've taken the time to review a piece that is no longer promoted. :)
Kim
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well written monorhyme ABC suite. It tells us that we all make mistakes but if we respect each other for who we are and what we believe the world would be a better place to live. Maybe with less extremism of any kind, social or religious.
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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This is a well written monorhyme ABC suite. It tells us that we all make mistakes but if we respect each other for who we are and what we believe the world would be a better place to live. Maybe with less extremism of any kind, social or religious.
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
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Hi dragonpoet,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review this poem even though it is no longer promoted. I greatly appreciate your astute observations and kind comments.
Kim
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No problem, Kim.
Joan
Comment from BeasPeas
Congratulations, Kim, on your outstanding ABC poem win. You've said a lot here in a plea for unity for the new year and our country's future. The use of monorhyme throughout is fabulous in your continuous stanzas of ABC. Great job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Congratulations, Kim, on your outstanding ABC poem win. You've said a lot here in a plea for unity for the new year and our country's future. The use of monorhyme throughout is fabulous in your continuous stanzas of ABC. Great job. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Hi Marilyn:
I'm hoping collectively that we'll come to realize there has to be some common ground in the middle where we can all unite. I wish I knew exactly what it would take to get us there. Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate the wonderful comments.
Kim
Comment from Dustybones
Great poem on accepting other points of view. How wonderful and noble to write on this. I love this line...
For the sake of us all, can't we appease
by accepting there's fruit on each of our trees?
Dusty
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Great poem on accepting other points of view. How wonderful and noble to write on this. I love this line...
For the sake of us all, can't we appease
by accepting there's fruit on each of our trees?
Dusty
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. How could there be anything better than being called noble? I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
The alphabet soup is thankfully successfully camouflaged by the complexity of the philosophical argument, the content of the poem and the poetic unity is more apparent in the mono-assonance of the lines thall end in either the "...ease" or "...eaves" sound.
This is cleverly done and I would never have noticed the alphabet soup if you hadn't mentioned it.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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The alphabet soup is thankfully successfully camouflaged by the complexity of the philosophical argument, the content of the poem and the poetic unity is more apparent in the mono-assonance of the lines thall end in either the "...ease" or "...eaves" sound.
This is cleverly done and I would never have noticed the alphabet soup if you hadn't mentioned it.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Pantygynt,
Overlooking the alphabet aspect is the best compliment ever! :) I couldn't hope for better. Thanks for a great review!
Kim
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is probably the best ABC poem I have read. It flows together so well and all three stanzas mono-rhymed with none of the rhymes seeming forced. It should do very well in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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This is probably the best ABC poem I have read. It flows together so well and all three stanzas mono-rhymed with none of the rhymes seeming forced. It should do very well in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Debbie,
I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. The stanzas just kept coming until the poem was done with me. Such is the way of my muse lol Thank you so much for the kind comments.
Kim
Comment from damommy
Quite an undertaking you set yourself, and very well done.
I was amazed that you could keep that rhyming going for that long. Good job.
Lessons not learned in biblical degrees may not be impactful, as those of Eve's - if we don't follow the Bible and learn from it, we may not learn what we should know.
Very good poem. I'm impressed. 8-)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Quite an undertaking you set yourself, and very well done.
I was amazed that you could keep that rhyming going for that long. Good job.
Lessons not learned in biblical degrees may not be impactful, as those of Eve's - if we don't follow the Bible and learn from it, we may not learn what we should know.
Very good poem. I'm impressed. 8-)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Yvonne,
The poem started out to be three stanzas, but it wasn't finished with me until I added the other two lol Thank you so much for the kind comments. I always appreciate hearing your thoughts.
Kim
Comment from Chrissy710
Wow Dovey well done What a great poem and you have managed not only the alphabet letters but excellent final rhyming in every stanza and you should be very PLEASED with yourself. I enjoyed this and thought it was put together with finesse. Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Wow Dovey well done What a great poem and you have managed not only the alphabet letters but excellent final rhyming in every stanza and you should be very PLEASED with yourself. I enjoyed this and thought it was put together with finesse. Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Chrissy!
Thank you so much for the stellar and enthusiastic comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Kim
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My pleasure Kim good work
Comment from WalkerMan
This is all good advice toward a worthy goal. Two questions I especially like: "Are those preaching tolerance granting reprieves?" and "For the sake of us all, can't we appease / by accepting there's fruit on each of our trees?" Well done, and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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This is all good advice toward a worthy goal. Two questions I especially like: "Are those preaching tolerance granting reprieves?" and "For the sake of us all, can't we appease / by accepting there's fruit on each of our trees?" Well done, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Mike,
Thanks for the keen eye in catching my typos! I'm happy you enjoyed this one. I think this may be a challenging year for a lot of people, I hope we (collectively) can move forward with grace and actually listen to each other to promote the greater good.
Happy New Year!
Kim
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You are welcome, Kim. I see both the typo fix and the added illustration, so have revised the review accordingly. -- Mike
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Thanks, Mike!
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You are again welcome, Kim. :)) -- Mike
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Hey show off.lol
Honestly it is very well done using the different ABC stanzas. I looked first to see if you used the whole alphabet and was disappointed to not see the v's and z's.lol
It read smoothly and very light despite the length,.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hey show off.lol
Honestly it is very well done using the different ABC stanzas. I looked first to see if you used the whole alphabet and was disappointed to not see the v's and z's.lol
It read smoothly and very light despite the length,.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2017
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Hi Barb!
I wasn't going for the whole alphabet lol or showing off ;) It just didn't tell me it was 'done' so I kept going. I actually posted with three and ended up adding two more stanzas lol I think I got to say what I wanted, though. Thanks for the great reviews. (I saved the v's for rhyming purposes lol and there is a z in breeze) I know, not what you meant lol
Happy New Year!
Kim
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LOL Didn't think of the z.lol
It was a great piece
