Eskimo Santa
An unexpected visitor from the North Pole.31 total reviews
Comment from FxstsLisa
Excellent writing and great story with message from long ago. Hope you had a Merry Christmas and have a great New Year 2017!
-Lisa
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Excellent writing and great story with message from long ago. Hope you had a Merry Christmas and have a great New Year 2017!
-Lisa
Comment Written 31-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2016
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Oh, thank you, Lisa, for your generous, six star review. It came as quite a surprise. I am even more surprised that my story from twenty-nine years ago still resonates today. I hope you had a Merry Christmas and I wish you a great New Year, too.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a wonderfully inspiring entry for the contest! I think using the framework of the beloved Christmas poem was very creative as it clearly drew the parallels of what we assume to be true because it is comfortable and what might actually be true that we find hard to face. Maybe one day color and ethnic origin will no longer taint those things that should only be viewed with pure love. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2016
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This is a wonderfully inspiring entry for the contest! I think using the framework of the beloved Christmas poem was very creative as it clearly drew the parallels of what we assume to be true because it is comfortable and what might actually be true that we find hard to face. Maybe one day color and ethnic origin will no longer taint those things that should only be viewed with pure love. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Mystic Angel, for your generous review. I am glad you found my story inspiring. Thank you also for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from Alaskastory
'Eskimo Santa' is highly amusing. I kept thinking it would be a humorous play for school kids to do. You make the story pretty much a quick picture but the dialog is strongly amusing. That's why I'd like to see it on-stage.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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'Eskimo Santa' is highly amusing. I kept thinking it would be a humorous play for school kids to do. You make the story pretty much a quick picture but the dialog is strongly amusing. That's why I'd like to see it on-stage.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Alaskastory, for your generous, six star review. I never thought of the idea of a humorous play for school kids before, but it is a good one. I am also glad you found my dialogue "strongly amusing." Thanks again.
Comment from CEO2020
Something different from you. But I see it comes from the Christmas spirit. I'm not into Christmas stories but 'tis the season what most posts. I like the opening paragraph -
"Twas the night before Christmas, when all through the house not a creature was stirring . . . except Eugene Morris Funkelbean, who, hidden behind the frosted Christmas tree and armed with a toy laser gun, determined to catch his parents in the act of putting presents under the tree and prove once and for all that Santa Claus did not exist."
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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Something different from you. But I see it comes from the Christmas spirit. I'm not into Christmas stories but 'tis the season what most posts. I like the opening paragraph -
"Twas the night before Christmas, when all through the house not a creature was stirring . . . except Eugene Morris Funkelbean, who, hidden behind the frosted Christmas tree and armed with a toy laser gun, determined to catch his parents in the act of putting presents under the tree and prove once and for all that Santa Claus did not exist."
Comment Written 27-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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Thank you, CEO2020, for your review. I am glad you like my opening paragraph. Cheers.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I really like your Christmas poem, younger version of Sis Cat... You put a lot of thought into this rendition of the Night Before Christmas. Very clever was to portray an ethnic Santa that helps all kids relate to diversity and the Christmas Spirit.
I love the artwork, and have a feeling you could do it again if it was important enough to you.
Happy New Year,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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I really like your Christmas poem, younger version of Sis Cat... You put a lot of thought into this rendition of the Night Before Christmas. Very clever was to portray an ethnic Santa that helps all kids relate to diversity and the Christmas Spirit.
I love the artwork, and have a feeling you could do it again if it was important enough to you.
Happy New Year,
Rhonda
Comment Written 27-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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Yes, Rhonda, I, too, like the younger version of Sis Cat. I would like to harness his creativity and cleverness to create more stories and poems. I may not draw but I take pictures. Thank you for your review. Happy Ne Year to you, too.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
I loved your story, twenty-nine years ago it is as relevant today, if not more so. You've expressed eloquently and with the child questioning the authenticity of lore, then went on to beautifully describe the 'biases' that is related in the telling of stories going back centuries. Well done, Andre.
Merry, merry Christmas and only blessings your way in the New Year.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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I loved your story, twenty-nine years ago it is as relevant today, if not more so. You've expressed eloquently and with the child questioning the authenticity of lore, then went on to beautifully describe the 'biases' that is related in the telling of stories going back centuries. Well done, Andre.
Merry, merry Christmas and only blessings your way in the New Year.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Mary, for your review. I am stunned that this twenty-nine year old story is as relevant today as it was when I wrote it. I knew I had a good idea even though journals at the time rejected it. I wish you blessings your way in the New Year, too.
Comment from emptypage
You wrote, "Now, Potock! Now, Murdock! Now, Cold-Duck and Hydrox! On, Oldsock! On, Ticktock! On, Fifi and Xerox! Steer clear from the trees. Don't wet the wall. Now, dash away! Dash away! Dash away all!"
Hilarious and wonderful!
You wrote, "Eugene shrugged. 'Tourists and soldiers?'"
Eugene is pretty smart.
I adore this story. You make a point so very necessary in society today--a couple of them, actually--and did so with humore and good grammar and everything, LOL.
Color me impressed.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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You wrote, "Now, Potock! Now, Murdock! Now, Cold-Duck and Hydrox! On, Oldsock! On, Ticktock! On, Fifi and Xerox! Steer clear from the trees. Don't wet the wall. Now, dash away! Dash away! Dash away all!"
Hilarious and wonderful!
You wrote, "Eugene shrugged. 'Tourists and soldiers?'"
Eugene is pretty smart.
I adore this story. You make a point so very necessary in society today--a couple of them, actually--and did so with humore and good grammar and everything, LOL.
Color me impressed.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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Oh, thank you, emptypage, for your generous six star review. What really "colors me impressed" was that I wrote and illustrated this twenty-nine years ago. My humor and the point I made were spot on, even though a couple of journals at the time rejected my story. I am going to keep writing new stories while digging around my drawers for hidden gems. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Mastery
Hello, my friend. This is a very creative take on The Night Before Christmas. LOL. Your characters are amusing and in some places you have a good feel for the poem using your own original lyrical sounds as it were.
It all comes down to this though, Andre:
"The boy sighed. "I didn't know there wasn't a Santa. My friends are right. There is no Santa Claus."
"Oh, but there is, Eugene. We are our own Santas whenever we are kind, giving, and loving to the peoples of the world."
Blessings and Happy Holidays, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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Hello, my friend. This is a very creative take on The Night Before Christmas. LOL. Your characters are amusing and in some places you have a good feel for the poem using your own original lyrical sounds as it were.
It all comes down to this though, Andre:
"The boy sighed. "I didn't know there wasn't a Santa. My friends are right. There is no Santa Claus."
"Oh, but there is, Eugene. We are our own Santas whenever we are kind, giving, and loving to the peoples of the world."
Blessings and Happy Holidays, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 26-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Bob, for your review of my story I wrote twenty-nine years ago! I am digging through my drawers for any more hidden gems while at the same time writing new stories. Thanks again.
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You are most welcome, my friend. Bob :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am really enjoying this Christmas story contest. I am having so much fun reading the contest entries. I had a great time reading your entry. Very creative and detailed. Good luck with the contest.
Eugene watched, and then interrupted. "But I thought Santa was white." (comma after interrupted. It's a speech clause. I have always been taught to have interrupted after the speech because it shows interrupted, just mentioning it.)
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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I am really enjoying this Christmas story contest. I am having so much fun reading the contest entries. I had a great time reading your entry. Very creative and detailed. Good luck with the contest.
Eugene watched, and then interrupted. "But I thought Santa was white." (comma after interrupted. It's a speech clause. I have always been taught to have interrupted after the speech because it shows interrupted, just mentioning it.)
Comment Written 26-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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Thank you for your review, Barbara, and comma correction. I am glad you had a great time reading my entry. Thank you for wishing me success in the contest, too. I appreciate it.
Comment from persevere
This is an intriguing Christmas story. Your light hearted reference to race is meaningful in these days of racist acrimony. The spirit of Christmas should be race free.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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This is an intriguing Christmas story. Your light hearted reference to race is meaningful in these days of racist acrimony. The spirit of Christmas should be race free.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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Yes, persevere, and what really gets me is that I wrote this story twenty-nine years ago, literary journals at the time rejected it, but my story with its "light-hearted reference to race" is still fresh, meaningful, and relevant today. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
