Comment from Franklin Price

Excellent

This free verse makes me really feel a big loss of any ability to write anything. I feel so fortunate I never been there, but your piece leaves no doubt of what it's like. The chosen picture and white on black reinforce the feeling of the written word. Great job

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well. Your words flowed easily line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

thanks for the kind review.

Comment from angel123

Excellent

Your poem is meaningful and well-written and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well with deep thought and I like it in its entirety. Good luck in the contest and Happy Holidays.

angel 123

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for tekid review.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your title and its repeat and your use of alliteration to intensify the mood. Your appealing to our sense of smell and the reference to an "endless game of hide and seek" are very effective as well. Best wishes in the contest and happy weekend- Joan

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

thanks, Joan. A bit tardy, as usual with my responses.

reply by Joan E. on 28-Dec-2016

Not to worry about being late--I lost October and November and now December is disappearing! Here's to a healthy and peaceful new year! Hearty hugs- Joan

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Actually this resonates with me from the days when I used to write song lyrics exclusvely. Thgere were plenty of times then when I felt that the ability had deserted me and this poem recaptures that feeling perfectly.

Touch wood I have never had the feeling yet that I can't write poetry. Sometimes it flows more readily than at others and if I can't write in free verse I find i can in rhyme and vice versa. But, yes this captures the feeling of loss well.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thank you for the detailed review.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

Oh my - keep yer distance, would ya - it might be contagious! Dallas, I sincerely think this is the best of its kind I've ever read - I LOVED it!

YIKES! Been there, many years ago now (thank heavens)!

I only wish I'd been able to review sooner so a six might serve to bump it to the front page. Gosh, I hope you publish this one!!!

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Wow. Thanks for the awesome review and the bonus star.

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Ooo... Interesting. A marvellous free verse with lots of food for thought. I read this a few times and each time it resonated well.
Rose

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

This poem is full of vivid imagery from the start.
"echoes of forgotten fervor bounce off the walls of my frustration"
Really nice.
Nice use of crisp and clear words to enhance this poem.
Michael

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

Fantastic and unique..one can see the fleeting words...the catch me if you can game....the lost lyrics and darkness of the poet...
Honesty...straight from the heart...like an arrow they will return...

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

An excellent contest entry. This picture reminds me of the commercial years ago for AA. A guy is drinking in a bar by himself. Everything looks normal until the mailman walks in and you realize it's early in the morning.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016

Thanks for reviewing.