Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 93 " Blender"Assorted poetry
10 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I am pleased you too joined the cinquain contest. I really enjoy the form because it employs a significant title and is succinct. I admired your thought-provoking poem and use of contrasting, gender-related colors in the text. I like the way the title foreshadows the theme. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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I am pleased you too joined the cinquain contest. I really enjoy the form because it employs a significant title and is succinct. I admired your thought-provoking poem and use of contrasting, gender-related colors in the text. I like the way the title foreshadows the theme. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Joan, for the encouraging review. Good luck to you as well. Bill
Comment from Craigitar
Ha ha! Clever, clever, clever! Great use of pink and blue text (I didn't immediately pick up on the significance). With the evolution of sexual culture being what it is nowadays, a few more species might need to be introduced to augment the birds and bees. Great job here and luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Ha ha! Clever, clever, clever! Great use of pink and blue text (I didn't immediately pick up on the significance). With the evolution of sexual culture being what it is nowadays, a few more species might need to be introduced to augment the birds and bees. Great job here and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Craigitar, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from mvbrooks
I have to admit, it took me until a second read to fully understand why the verse is in blue and pink. At first, I noticed more that the color 'split' came near the center and then focused on the colors. Timely topic and meets the line and syllable count while providing food for thought.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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I have to admit, it took me until a second read to fully understand why the verse is in blue and pink. At first, I noticed more that the color 'split' came near the center and then focused on the colors. Timely topic and meets the line and syllable count while providing food for thought.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you, mv, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Cindy Warren
I guess that's true. I've even been fooled a couple of times. Of course, I wasn't looking that close. I think people have a right to be whoever they are.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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I guess that's true. I've even been fooled a couple of times. Of course, I wasn't looking that close. I think people have a right to be whoever they are.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Cindy, for taking some time to read this. Bill
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. The poem completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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A well-written contest entry. The poem completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you, winona, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
I think that the world spends far too much time worrying about gender identification. He, she, you, me, us, we. What the heck. Who that matters really cares?
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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I think that the world spends far too much time worrying about gender identification. He, she, you, me, us, we. What the heck. Who that matters really cares?
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Thank you, nomi, for weighing in on this issue. Bill
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo of one of your grandsons I assume, and it complements your poem very well. I enjoyed the subject: forget what we knew about the birds and bees. We must now re-eavaluate gender. Original subject for this contest, a faultless Cinquain. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Excellent photo of one of your grandsons I assume, and it complements your poem very well. I enjoyed the subject: forget what we knew about the birds and bees. We must now re-eavaluate gender. Original subject for this contest, a faultless Cinquain. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Ine, for the great review. Bill
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very clever, Bill, but so is the majority of most everything your pen produces.
Yes, it's the 21st century and this is not your grandmother's or grandfather's world any longer.
We are all, each and every one of us, uniquely made. We are also all human and part of the human race, although I can't for the life of me figure out what it is we're racing towards.
I liked the mixture of pink & blue font.
That did not go unnoticed.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Very clever, Bill, but so is the majority of most everything your pen produces.
Yes, it's the 21st century and this is not your grandmother's or grandfather's world any longer.
We are all, each and every one of us, uniquely made. We are also all human and part of the human race, although I can't for the life of me figure out what it is we're racing towards.
I liked the mixture of pink & blue font.
That did not go unnoticed.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Dean, for the uplifting and complimentary review. Bill
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You're more than welcome. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
You have a way of saying things, Bill, that is sheer magic. Not only does your choice of words reflect the content - one would expect that - but the pink and blue typeface makes a gender specific statement right across the words.
And what you are saying is sometimes a little difficult for us older ones who now have to undertake this evaluation. "This sure and firm set earth" applies the occasional shake-up to our beliefs, when we switch the blender on.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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You have a way of saying things, Bill, that is sheer magic. Not only does your choice of words reflect the content - one would expect that - but the pink and blue typeface makes a gender specific statement right across the words.
And what you are saying is sometimes a little difficult for us older ones who now have to undertake this evaluation. "This sure and firm set earth" applies the occasional shake-up to our beliefs, when we switch the blender on.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much, Jim, for your insightful review. Bill
Comment from Ulla
Ahhhh, Bill, this is one of your clever ones. So true what you're saying and with such an imagination in so few words. Not easy to do. Well done. I like it a lot. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Ahhhh, Bill, this is one of your clever ones. So true what you're saying and with such an imagination in so few words. Not easy to do. Well done. I like it a lot. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:))
Comment Written 10-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Ulla, for the kind review. Bill
