To Last Forever
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23 total reviews
Comment from daeneam
Hello there dear Michael! How you've been? I've been browsing the net and I come across with an article about TEXAS... Then you suddenly popped into my mind...
Quite a busy year for me... spending precious times with my loved ones... I avoided the internet during those days so I did not greet my precious friends, so I am doing it now!
Happy new year dear! I hope everything is in good shape and so are you! God bless you! c", MAE
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Hello there dear Michael! How you've been? I've been browsing the net and I come across with an article about TEXAS... Then you suddenly popped into my mind...
Quite a busy year for me... spending precious times with my loved ones... I avoided the internet during those days so I did not greet my precious friends, so I am doing it now!
Happy new year dear! I hope everything is in good shape and so are you! God bless you! c", MAE
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
Comment from Merlin2016
I am Merlin...I translate...
The poem is a double entendre... It is a maiden voyage...She is a maiden not a married woman....This is his first voyage with her..
Florescent..she is bright...He sings their anthem. I n released breath..he drifts no more...
He says her name is Freedom and she longs for home...he hopes in his love..
He says We swing the moon...above the world...She is his America...his home...
Ta da....Tear it up Rec...
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I am Merlin...I translate...
The poem is a double entendre... It is a maiden voyage...She is a maiden not a married woman....This is his first voyage with her..
Florescent..she is bright...He sings their anthem. I n released breath..he drifts no more...
He says her name is Freedom and she longs for home...he hopes in his love..
He says We swing the moon...above the world...She is his America...his home...
Ta da....Tear it up Rec...
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hey Merl....-smile- ...I'm Michael and I do too.
most of my poetic expression is "double" if not triple or quadripple entendre. from what I hear anyway... I've suspicion it comes from a Rod Mckuenisym mentality subjected to Mcarthyism....but I really don't care do you...?
well I think youre interpretation delightful....and your insinuation shameful. but then again we are on opposing sides of mentality...my names Reconciled merl...not wrecking ball. Adios-
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Opposing sides of mentality? I am a wizard...shameful insinuations? Not me...
If that is the way you understood it..lo siento...Adios to you ...
Comment from Leineco
we pass the moon
from one hand to the other
as royalty once did
to independence
the people rose
and voiced
their freedom anthem
they sang it
as their kinsman built foundations
to construct faith's mansion on.
we pass the moon
from one hand to the other
quinquennial
tradition
course corrections
steady the ship
or lead us on diversions
only time
will tell the tale
of progress or regression
we pass the moon
from one hand to the other
but never lose connection
with liberty's
awesome fluorescence.
;-)
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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we pass the moon
from one hand to the other
as royalty once did
to independence
the people rose
and voiced
their freedom anthem
they sang it
as their kinsman built foundations
to construct faith's mansion on.
we pass the moon
from one hand to the other
quinquennial
tradition
course corrections
steady the ship
or lead us on diversions
only time
will tell the tale
of progress or regression
we pass the moon
from one hand to the other
but never lose connection
with liberty's
awesome fluorescence.
;-)
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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woo...do that cat walk Leinko....Lady Liberty who?
do you think we lookin' at...woo do the walk Cat...aha...-smile-...you know you making us all look bad Leinko, you write better poetry in your reviews then most of us put out...ew watch her walk...ahh love Michael
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hm....after re-reading this...I'm somewhat embarrassed. I mean you no disrespect Loraine I hope you know that....love-
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Whatever is there to be embarrassed about??? - You
complimented my writing - tossed out some banter
and did the playful flirty thing
In other words. . .you brought a smile to my face
**mwha**
(and besides. . .what girl doesn't like to have her
catwalk applauded -lol-)
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love you Lady Liberty....-smile-
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I know I'm not really qualified to say anything about this poem, Michael, but I do believe those poor people who were on that maiden voyage to a new, unknown, possibly hostile world were good people with hopes and dreams worth fighting for. They brought God with them and settled. They fought for their rights, and brought honesty and decency with them. It's people like that we need now. In your country and mine. I thought you said this so well, my dear friend. Love you always. Sandy xxx
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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I know I'm not really qualified to say anything about this poem, Michael, but I do believe those poor people who were on that maiden voyage to a new, unknown, possibly hostile world were good people with hopes and dreams worth fighting for. They brought God with them and settled. They fought for their rights, and brought honesty and decency with them. It's people like that we need now. In your country and mine. I thought you said this so well, my dear friend. Love you always. Sandy xxx
Comment Written 28-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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of course you are...
the first Americans came from England.
and in gradual witness of both enemy and then ally
we've seen our foundation exalted and then hidden in shame
which produced the better blessing...?
love you too Sandy...hope youre well. Michael
Comment from Neonewman
Awesome Michael! I always enjoy reviewing your work. Pure, raw and uninhibited. Masterfully crafted piece you have delivered. I enjoyed the music as well.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Awesome Michael! I always enjoy reviewing your work. Pure, raw and uninhibited. Masterfully crafted piece you have delivered. I enjoyed the music as well.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 28-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Hey Steve,,,thanks Buddy...appreciate you enjoying with me. love michael
Comment from MissMerri
My first six star rating this week goes to the poet who swings the moon around his head and believes with an unshakable faith that America can once again be as strong as the first settlers believed it was meant to be. "Freedom longs for home sweet love" is especially meaningful to me. I also liked the line about "faith leads more than follows." That seemed profound and wise, carrying more meaning than what first appears. As always, Michael, you have written a poem packed with strong imagery and inference, allowing your readers the privilege of participating in the creative process. I always enjoy the way your poems carry me to lofty places. Thank you for this fun trip. ;") I really like this!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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My first six star rating this week goes to the poet who swings the moon around his head and believes with an unshakable faith that America can once again be as strong as the first settlers believed it was meant to be. "Freedom longs for home sweet love" is especially meaningful to me. I also liked the line about "faith leads more than follows." That seemed profound and wise, carrying more meaning than what first appears. As always, Michael, you have written a poem packed with strong imagery and inference, allowing your readers the privilege of participating in the creative process. I always enjoy the way your poems carry me to lofty places. Thank you for this fun trip. ;") I really like this!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2016
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I believe what I see...seen, when it comes to men.
I've faith in God for the power to change...anything...everything.
we as firstborn placed God cornerstone and were blessed world wide undeniable. if we recognize that we still are.
yes there is some of me personally in here. apparently I'm a poet who puts his feelings on loose-leaf...-smile-...always love Michael
Comment from RGstar
A nice little one for Thanksgiving day, my brother,
Even through your cryptic style one feels your emotion, sees your heart.
There are always two parts of any arrangement or compromise.
Have a great day, my brother.
RG
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A nice little one for Thanksgiving day, my brother,
Even through your cryptic style one feels your emotion, sees your heart.
There are always two parts of any arrangement or compromise.
Have a great day, my brother.
RG
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from Oatmeal
reconciled,
Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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reconciled,
Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible. This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from Dustybones
Good verse. All about the freedom of liberty. Thanksgiving is when we all visit for dinners and relax. This is only for America while the rest of the world waits for Christmas.
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Good verse. All about the freedom of liberty. Thanksgiving is when we all visit for dinners and relax. This is only for America while the rest of the world waits for Christmas.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from robina1978
Great photo that complements your free verse poem perfectly. I especially liked the fact about swinging the moon from one hand to the other. Did you really mean to say florescent believes, or should it be fluorescent.
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Great photo that complements your free verse poem perfectly. I especially liked the fact about swinging the moon from one hand to the other. Did you really mean to say florescent believes, or should it be fluorescent.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
