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Before daybreak

how dreams are made

23 total reviews 
Comment from Sis Cat
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This is excellent. I read it over and over and am astounded by your imagery and emotions at dawn across the Colorado Mountains. Your poem is peaceful, hopeful:

"Before the evening sky appears
a net is cast to catch one more dream
and hold it safe until the next daybreak."

Thank you for sharing and inspiring. Congratulations on your well-deserved win.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
    Thank you so much for the inspiring feedback.
Comment from dragonpoet
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Congrats on the win.

This poem create a strong image and personification of daybreak over mountains.
It also shows the hope of a new day.

Keep writing

Happy Holidays.

dp

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
    thank you so much--appreciate your comments and congratulations.
reply by dragonpoet on 16-Dec-2016
    No problem.

    Happy Holidays.

    dp
Comment from I am Cat
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Beautifully written, you set forth a wonderful moment of imagery
which might escape others.
It's important to hang onto these moments in time...
I find they tend to stick with us,
especially when we write them down.
Congratulations on solidifying this moment in time
and also, for winning this contest,
Cat

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
    Thank you so much for this wonderful review and the encouraging words. I will hang on to these moments....
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
Exceptional
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Amazing concept you've conjured up here beginning with line 8. Lines 1-7, lovely poem, a little ordinary. Then you stirred in the magic!
GoodHearted Woman

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
    thank you so much! I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from rama devi
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Lovely! I can see why this won. It is inspirational, eloquent and well portrayed with apt metaphorical imagery. Lovely presentation too. Fine phonetics


Light
rises

This sets the elevating overtone of the poem.


Love the voicing and the medley of S sounds too:

mountains as it stirs
the restless and beckons
a day of expectations.

Fine S sounds woven through the whole poem and alliterated B as well. Love the assonance of E in the above lines and subsequent ones too. Sounds good read aloud, also with the X and KC sounds echoing harmonically. The consonance of C and K is also superb. I particularly like the sound of these two lines:


Before the evening sky appears
a net is cast to catch one more dream


Perfect closing note:

and hold it safe until the next daybreak.

Congrats...bravo

Kudos!

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
    Thank you for the detailed review --that's what helps me grow. And thanks for your congratulations--much appreciated.
reply by rama devi on 13-Dec-2016
    Yay! :-))))
Comment from Contests

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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 13-Dec-2016
    This is a great honor and I appreciate the acknowledgement very much. Thank you
Comment from Richard J
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Superb imagery and emotional splendor highlight the moment's ambiance, enhancing and reflecting the heavenly wonder of your gently-creative poetic voice.
This is sheer enthrallment, Dear Lady-Poet, of the most dreamy kind.

How can mere words express such feelings inspired by the power of your beautiful skills ... thank you ever-so warmly for your touch! ~ Richard : )

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
    Wow--your review made me feel very appreciated as a writer--thank you.
reply by Richard J on 27-Nov-2016
    By me, M'Lady, you are sincerely appreciated, and admired* : )
Comment from AnnaLinda
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MVBrooks,

You've composed a beautiful Etheree entry!
I enjoyed your nice imagery and smooth flow
within that strict form and syllable count.

I also really like your "net" metaphor to catch
dreams and hold them safe.

Lovely,

Linda

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
    thank you -- I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written etheree. Syllable count is spot on. Line 8 may cause a dispute e-ve-ning depending on how it is pronounced.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
    Thanks for pointing out "evening" -- I used a syllable counter and hope the judges will too.
Comment from frierajac
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This is well done completing the contest format and also having a picture and words that are fairly close to enchanting. If it weren't for the strict syllable requirement, you could add in some kind of mysterious foreign expression that would deepen he mystery

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2016


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
    thank you for the detailed review. Interesting suggestion on the mysterious expression. thank you.