My Ride
alternate rhyme16 total reviews
Comment from For better for verse
Liked your poem, great story, good rhyme and great description.
I really felt at one with that stallion.
Well worthy of its recognised status.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Liked your poem, great story, good rhyme and great description.
I really felt at one with that stallion.
Well worthy of its recognised status.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Helllo to you and Todmorton, nice to virtually meet you.! I love your pseudonym!
Thank you for your very kind review.
Expat Trisha
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A beautiful poem about your horse ride. There is a certain freedom in riding that you can't quite find any where else.
Well written, well rhymed, and a lovely picture.
Well done.
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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A beautiful poem about your horse ride. There is a certain freedom in riding that you can't quite find any where else.
Well written, well rhymed, and a lovely picture.
Well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Hi, faithful reviewer, thanks very much. I?m happy you enjoyed the poem, and I thank you for a complimentary review.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem describing an adventurous ride with your horse through valleys and over dales. The wind through hair and mane until you get back to the stable tired and satisfied.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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A very well-written poem describing an adventurous ride with your horse through valleys and over dales. The wind through hair and mane until you get back to the stable tired and satisfied.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Glad you thought the poem was worth reading
Thanks for your review
Hugs Trisha
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Wow Trisha, how in the world did I ever miss this poem of perfection. This one deserves a ten star review. I almost hate to turn in this review since I am out if sixes. This is a long poem from you and every line and stanza blew me away. I could feel myself in the wind, on the ride with this brilliant Stallion. This poem is elegant and eloqently amazing. Marvelous. You should have entered this one in the Poet Choice 3 contest. It is anither winning poem.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Wow Trisha, how in the world did I ever miss this poem of perfection. This one deserves a ten star review. I almost hate to turn in this review since I am out if sixes. This is a long poem from you and every line and stanza blew me away. I could feel myself in the wind, on the ride with this brilliant Stallion. This poem is elegant and eloqently amazing. Marvelous. You should have entered this one in the Poet Choice 3 contest. It is anither winning poem.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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My friend, your compliments overwhelm me. I write, sometimes it hits big, othertimes it fizzles LO L. Thank you so much for your kind wonderful review. Have a great day
Hugs and blessings
Trisha
Comment from royowen
I love your free wheeling work my friend. Your poem is laced with great imagery, the helter skelter, and sheer good fun worked into your work well. Written in articulate abcb rhyming quatrains, in varying meter, well done, enjoyable work, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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I love your free wheeling work my friend. Your poem is laced with great imagery, the helter skelter, and sheer good fun worked into your work well. Written in articulate abcb rhyming quatrains, in varying meter, well done, enjoyable work, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Hi Roy, I?m surprised and honored that you would review my poem. You gave me a super review and appreciate it very much
Trisha
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Good job
Comment from Possummagic
A very well written and nicely composed poem in what you describe as "alternate rhyme" . I enjoyed your poem and felt as though I was in the saddle behind you, flying over fiends and stone walls. I knew I wasn't riding solo because the last time I did so, I couldn't walk properly for six months. It was over twenty years ago and I pulled a muscle in my back! Well done. Good luck. PM
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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A very well written and nicely composed poem in what you describe as "alternate rhyme" . I enjoyed your poem and felt as though I was in the saddle behind you, flying over fiends and stone walls. I knew I wasn't riding solo because the last time I did so, I couldn't walk properly for six months. It was over twenty years ago and I pulled a muscle in my back! Well done. Good luck. PM
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thanks very much for your review. I?m glad imagery was strong enough to.take you into memory. I find some horses strong and intimidating, but I.do ike the. slim ones.
Hugs, Trisha
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You?re welcome PM
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a charming poem, all the more so for its structure and rhyme. Although the rhyme was uneven in a couple of spots, affecting the rhythm as well, it did not detract from the entirety of the read, which I found satisfying and warm...
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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In my opinion, a charming poem, all the more so for its structure and rhyme. Although the rhyme was uneven in a couple of spots, affecting the rhythm as well, it did not detract from the entirety of the read, which I found satisfying and warm...
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your supporting review, I appreciate it
Comment from MaggieF
Lovely picture. Your poem flowed well with good rhyme and rhythm. I could sense beating hearts. Great imagery. I loved 'as the stallion thundered across the quilt' MaggieF
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Lovely picture. Your poem flowed well with good rhyme and rhythm. I could sense beating hearts. Great imagery. I loved 'as the stallion thundered across the quilt' MaggieF
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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I'm grateful for your review and stars, Maggie. I'm glad you liked the imagery.
Happy Memorial Day
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I was on this horse ride with you, great imagery and atmosphere of the horse ride, a pleasure to ride, love the line 'casting golden ripples of wheat', love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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I was on this horse ride with you, great imagery and atmosphere of the horse ride, a pleasure to ride, love the line 'casting golden ripples of wheat', love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Thanks so much for your appreciated review and stars, Dolly
Comment from J. Salvatore
This is very good with some very nice imagery and word choices. A couple of small suggestions:
1. The line, "We got to the point where the arrow sent" works very well, ending the way it does. However, the next line does not read well starting with :us".
2. In "I spurred whisk ", "whisk" should be capitalized.
3. There is an unwanted space after "scurried".
Nice job. I especially liked "casting golden ripples over wheat
the poppies raised their scarlet heads".
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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This is very good with some very nice imagery and word choices. A couple of small suggestions:
1. The line, "We got to the point where the arrow sent" works very well, ending the way it does. However, the next line does not read well starting with :us".
2. In "I spurred whisk ", "whisk" should be capitalized.
3. There is an unwanted space after "scurried".
Nice job. I especially liked "casting golden ripples over wheat
the poppies raised their scarlet heads".
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Thank you so much for your comments and typo errors.
Happy Memorial Day
