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Comment from BeasPeas
This is an older poem, but a goody. I enjoyed your reminiscence of how life was when we were younger. Everything was done by mail, as you say, the good news and the bad news. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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This is an older poem, but a goody. I enjoyed your reminiscence of how life was when we were younger. Everything was done by mail, as you say, the good news and the bad news. Thank you for sharing. Marilyn
Comment Written 10-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
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Thank you, I remember that poem and I too loved it. It brought back so many memories
Comment from schatzling
I still write letters and I still mail them with a "forever" stamp on it. More than one if it goes to Germany. This is so true and in my melancholy sort of mood today has brought tears to my eyes. Everything is making me cry today....maybe I need to stop reading and concentrate on doing some Art. Ever have one of those days......I am sure you have.
Thanks so much for sharing. Brought back many memories of letters received....letters written....No DEAR John's thank goodness (smile).
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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I still write letters and I still mail them with a "forever" stamp on it. More than one if it goes to Germany. This is so true and in my melancholy sort of mood today has brought tears to my eyes. Everything is making me cry today....maybe I need to stop reading and concentrate on doing some Art. Ever have one of those days......I am sure you have.
Thanks so much for sharing. Brought back many memories of letters received....letters written....No DEAR John's thank goodness (smile).
Comment Written 03-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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No , I am sure you didn't have many Dear Johns. I am quite sure men found you fascinating once they got to know you. Yes, do some art today or better yet. write another true story.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written irregular ode to the postage stamp. The days to pay only 5 cents for a postage stamp was a long time ago, we pay now about 50 cents for a stamp.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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A very well-written irregular ode to the postage stamp. The days to pay only 5 cents for a postage stamp was a long time ago, we pay now about 50 cents for a stamp.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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It was a time with lots of memories. I am so happy we got a great prompt that brought this out of me.
Comment from michaelcahill
Jeesh, I'm a little slooooooow, aren't I?
I love this. I totally relate to all of this and the references are all so very warm and familiar to me. I'm sure for others it is a transport or a peek back to a time they might now get a better understanding for.
Great free verse form with this and brave as many here are so stuck on form, but this is so effective to highlight the words exactly as you wish us to see them.
Really a wonderful stand out piece. YES!!!! mikey
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Jeesh, I'm a little slooooooow, aren't I?
I love this. I totally relate to all of this and the references are all so very warm and familiar to me. I'm sure for others it is a transport or a peek back to a time they might now get a better understanding for.
Great free verse form with this and brave as many here are so stuck on form, but this is so effective to highlight the words exactly as you wish us to see them.
Really a wonderful stand out piece. YES!!!! mikey
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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thank you. So much. Obviously I don't know how to follow rules when my mind starts to free style. I love the prompt. Did you ever stop to think that so many of the things I've written that are important to me would have never been written if I didn't have you and Phyllis's prompts. From the very first time in forum when I wrote the myth Wind. Prompts make us think differently and I thank you and fan story for that.
Comment from Pantygynt
Although you don't say so here, since you signed off as completed in the forum, and given the title, I am assuming that this is your potlatch entry to the challenge "write an irregular ode to a postage stamp.
I found it to be an intriguing poem as far as its content was concerned. A good resume of all the types of news that could be transmitted under the aegis of this 5 cent piece of gummed paper.
The irregular owed was clearly defined in the first item of the forum and as far as the irregularity of line length is concerned, but the stipulation that every line must have a rhyme somewhere in the piece has not been met here.
Such rhyme as there is rhyme by repetition but the majority of lines do not have a rhyme elsewhere in the poem.
I enjoyed reading the poem and laughed at the final line's play on words and for these reasons would rate it five stars despite the defining rule on rhyme not being kept.
"bills you payed" Typo, should be "paid"
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Although you don't say so here, since you signed off as completed in the forum, and given the title, I am assuming that this is your potlatch entry to the challenge "write an irregular ode to a postage stamp.
I found it to be an intriguing poem as far as its content was concerned. A good resume of all the types of news that could be transmitted under the aegis of this 5 cent piece of gummed paper.
The irregular owed was clearly defined in the first item of the forum and as far as the irregularity of line length is concerned, but the stipulation that every line must have a rhyme somewhere in the piece has not been met here.
Such rhyme as there is rhyme by repetition but the majority of lines do not have a rhyme elsewhere in the poem.
I enjoyed reading the poem and laughed at the final line's play on words and for these reasons would rate it five stars despite the defining rule on rhyme not being kept.
"bills you payed" Typo, should be "paid"
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Thank you . You are so write . This is good poem but not in any way an irregular mode. I just wrote and for that I have to say I loved it. but I did not follow the rules. I will have to try again.
Thank you as always for your comments and your honesty.
Judy
Comment from frogbook
Excellent trip back to times that meant something portrayed in written hand. I can remember times of waiting excitedly for a letter to come and reading it over and over. Very nostalgic...and likely educational for those born after a later year. One small note-did you notice the first 'f' on five seems dark.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Excellent trip back to times that meant something portrayed in written hand. I can remember times of waiting excitedly for a letter to come and reading it over and over. Very nostalgic...and likely educational for those born after a later year. One small note-did you notice the first 'f' on five seems dark.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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thank you so much. You made my day with the six stars. I love that prompts make us think of things we never would have before. That is just one of the reasons I am on fanstory.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Blasts from the past here Judy. You did a great job recalling everything that life used to offer back when it was simple and calm and we all loved our neighbor. LOL Thanks for the trip back. Good job. Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Blasts from the past here Judy. You did a great job recalling everything that life used to offer back when it was simple and calm and we all loved our neighbor. LOL Thanks for the trip back. Good job. Nancy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Thank you Nancy. It was simpler then but we also didn't get instant pictures of our grand children so I guess that is one thing that is better
Comment from heyjude
Judy, you have done a good job on this potlatch challenge about
the postage stamp. You've covered so much about what a stamp
has meant to us throughout the years. Too bad not many write
letters anymore. I like the thoughts here most about the son
who died in war and receiving the letter after you had heard.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Judy, you have done a good job on this potlatch challenge about
the postage stamp. You've covered so much about what a stamp
has meant to us throughout the years. Too bad not many write
letters anymore. I like the thoughts here most about the son
who died in war and receiving the letter after you had heard.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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thank you Jude. I enjoyed this prompt. It wasn't an irregular ode (not enough rhymes) but it did get out somethings I never knew I thought about. That is what I love about prompts, they take you in a different direction than you are used to . Thanks again.
Comment from Leineco
Verrrrrrry nice!
I love the style you wrote this in. . .
like letters arriving sporadically
bright lights punctuating the blur
of daily life's passage
what a perfect metaphor you have crafted
:-)
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Verrrrrrry nice!
I love the style you wrote this in. . .
like letters arriving sporadically
bright lights punctuating the blur
of daily life's passage
what a perfect metaphor you have crafted
:-)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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thank you so much. The only thing I didn't do was follow the challenge and the rhymes. Instead I just wrote which is really what we need to do. I loved that you understood and liked this
Comment from Irish Rain
I love all of this. The letter written 'in a dead son's hand'....very poignant. I MISS letters!!! I still do the old fashioned Christmas cards. This brings back so many memories! Did I say I loved it???? Blessings...
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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I love all of this. The letter written 'in a dead son's hand'....very poignant. I MISS letters!!! I still do the old fashioned Christmas cards. This brings back so many memories! Did I say I loved it???? Blessings...
Comment Written 20-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016
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Oh , you make my heart race. I didn't do the challenge. I started writing and forgot about the rules and the irregular rhymes, but you understood and listened to my words not the intent and made me feel like what I have to say is valuable and loved . Thank you for that gift.
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Thank YOU for the lovely memories!
