Comment from Giggles0630

Excellent

Perfectly characterizes obsession in a poetic manner. After the first sentence, the flow is seamless. I'm either not reading the first sentence the way it was intended to be read, or else it might be improved by instead saying "I'm a force to be reckoned with, even if you try hard to resist."

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thanks for the suggestion. Good to see the things through someone else's eyes.

reply by Giggles0630 on 20-Nov-2016

Very welcome! Enjoyed your poem very much!!

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This free verse is well written.The way obsessions grow is well expressed. You have used good metaphors anddescriptive phrases. This piece is well presented, also. Good job!

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Thank you for the positive feedback!

Comment from jlsavell

Excellent

Author,

I think you have described Obsession extremely well in this work of emotion.

Obsession is probably a result of too much mind wandering. Most people spend up to 50 percent of their time mind wondering instead of staying focused on priorities such as a task or learning something which engages the brain. Researchers have concluded that a wandering mind is an unhappy one. When one becomes mindful changes, good changes happen in the brain.

Thank you for sharing. Best wishes with the contest.
Jlsavell

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Thank you for your kind comments!

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very good, obsession can take total control it can consume one. Nicely done on the free verse with this. Good luck on this and have a great day.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Many thanks for the encouraging feedback.