Broken
A slow descent into madness.18 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This free verse is very dark and sad as the color shemed shows. I like the metaphor of going crazy in the first stanza. It is sad when a person loses hope and faith so much that they feel suicide is the only answer. The doctors seem extremely young in this poem
Congrats for the honoarble mention.
Keep writing.
drgonpoet
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2016
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This free verse is very dark and sad as the color shemed shows. I like the metaphor of going crazy in the first stanza. It is sad when a person loses hope and faith so much that they feel suicide is the only answer. The doctors seem extremely young in this poem
Congrats for the honoarble mention.
Keep writing.
drgonpoet
Comment Written 04-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2016
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Thanks for reading.
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Any time.
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Comment from Writer51
This is a very strong poem with words that paint a very dark picture. You succeeded in bringing out the story of a very insane and hopeless person. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016
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This is a very strong poem with words that paint a very dark picture. You succeeded in bringing out the story of a very insane and hopeless person. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, Maria, what a phenomenal free verse poem about a woman's descent into madness and ultimately into suicide and oblivion. I enjoy your creative use of stark language. You also told a story. Although we do not know why this woman's mind snapped, you told of her in emotional details.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest. Your poem shows your diversity as a writer.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Wow, Maria, what a phenomenal free verse poem about a woman's descent into madness and ultimately into suicide and oblivion. I enjoy your creative use of stark language. You also told a story. Although we do not know why this woman's mind snapped, you told of her in emotional details.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest. Your poem shows your diversity as a writer.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your very kind words, Andre. Have a nice Saturday.
Comment from aryr
Wow, there was so much depth to this poem, so much sadness and a sense of bewilderment. It presented such loneliness and also some despair. Great job, thanks.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Wow, there was so much depth to this poem, so much sadness and a sense of bewilderment. It presented such loneliness and also some despair. Great job, thanks.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Thanks for reading, Aryr.
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You are very welcome Maria.
Comment from winnona
A beautifully written free verse poetry contest entry. Your well-chosen words flowed line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. The artwork could not have been better chosen for this piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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A beautifully written free verse poetry contest entry. Your well-chosen words flowed line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. The artwork could not have been better chosen for this piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your review, Winnona and for the generous six stars. It's very kind of you.
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It is a beautifully written piece.
Comment from cflorian8
Abusive men give great ones a bad name. Women treated that badly have trouble trusting the gentle hands of a gentleman. The picture and your words create the visual horrors that women face. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Abusive men give great ones a bad name. Women treated that badly have trouble trusting the gentle hands of a gentleman. The picture and your words create the visual horrors that women face. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Thanks for reading. The men in the poem were the ones taking her to a mental hospital (the paramedics). Anyway, I think she must have been hurt by other men before.
More people have understood the poem like you, anyway. I guess I didn't explain very clearly.
Thanks for your review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and the art work went so well with this. Best of luck in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and the art work went so well with this. Best of luck in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much, Teri.
Comment from heyjude
Maria, you've really done a good job with this free verse poem
about telling the hopelessness that some people have. They
don't see life as getting any better and just want to die. Sad.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Maria, you've really done a good job with this free verse poem
about telling the hopelessness that some people have. They
don't see life as getting any better and just want to die. Sad.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Very sad... I don't really know why I wrote it. I just got the idea and had to go with it.
Thanks for reading, Judy.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Maria
= Stunning artwork and formatting paired with your well written poem.
= Your words bounce off the page when describing her despair.
= Super entry for the contest. Good Luck.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings --- Jax
<> Published as --- Jacqueline M Franklin
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Hi, Maria
= Stunning artwork and formatting paired with your well written poem.
= Your words bounce off the page when describing her despair.
= Super entry for the contest. Good Luck.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings --- Jax
<> Published as --- Jacqueline M Franklin
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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I'm glad you liked it, Jax.
Comment from MelB
Hi M J, I can relate so much to this free verse. The emotions are dead on for what someone trafficked or sexually abused goes through. God allows us to make choices, even evil ones. But, He never leaves us and He will take our pain away if we will allow it.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Hi M J, I can relate so much to this free verse. The emotions are dead on for what someone trafficked or sexually abused goes through. God allows us to make choices, even evil ones. But, He never leaves us and He will take our pain away if we will allow it.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
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Thanks for reading and for sharing your thought, Melissa.
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You're welcome.
