Comment from Aussie

Excellent

A powerful expression of feelings for the writing prompt entry. Even using large letters to get your hurt across. I have been there when my leg was amputated. Fully understand the feelings you have written. Well done friend.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Thank you so much for your review. Thank God, 'there have been times' of great joy to balance out. Hope that was the case for you as well.
Relda

reply by Aussie on 18-Nov-2016

We never know when we must pass through the darkness and pain. I came out the other side a more humble and spiritual person. All lessons I think. No pain, no gain. Bless you, Kay.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

I like the repeat of "There have been times". It gives you room to continue on with more verses. Happier and happier verses. Mainly because life continues and it is bless with good things. Lovely work.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Hi! Nice to meet you.
Thanks for your comments and encouragement. Yes, 'there have been times' of job, as well.
Hope to stop by your site soon to see what you're up to.
Relda

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Wow that would be the lowest of times and despair i hope those don't come to you often. Your honesty and emotion shines through in this piece Thanks for sharing

dip

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Hi! Nice to meet you.
Thank you for the comments and encouragement.
There have been a few ... but 'there have also been' times of great happiness to balance out.
I'll stop by your site, soon, to see what you're up to.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hi Relda,

For a piece that conveys such raw emotion, your free verse was a wonderfully "unstressful" read.

words, food and tears
stuck in my throat, ...a strong line. It conveys a lot.

Well done. :)

Sonali xx

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Sonali - Your encouragement comes just at the right time.
At 5 am to be honest. Can't sleep - can read/write.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from Tom_Roach

Average

This is a nice start for a longer piece. It really cries out loud for a third and, perhaps, a fourth verse. I feel as if I am left hanging in the air because the poem is crying out for a resolution.
Also, there is no need to have a comma at the end of a line because the line break itself acts a comma.

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 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Hello. Nice to meet you, Tom.

Pesky punctuation! I need all the help I can get with that. I stopped by your site - it's an honor to have your critique.

Fourth verse - Many folks have noted that. When I'm in a dark place I feel that I'll be there forever. I think that's the reason for the abrupt stop.

I'll be back to your site to see what you've been writing.

God bless and my best,

Relda

reply by Tom_Roach on 18-Nov-2016

Relda: You should take a look at the poetry of e.e. cummings who started the fashion of writing without capital letters or any punctuation. ......

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

thanks for the tip
Relda

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Exceptional

I love how you laid it all out there for everyone to see what it's like during those times. We all have those times, whether we admit or not, you're not alone. If you ever need to talk I'm here and will listen.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016

Hi! I'm so grateful for the review and the stars.
Thanks for the encouragement and the offer. I'll take you up on that. The encouragement of your comments has already made my day.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

There is a strong image of emotion and feelings in your words. Your first verse is especially strong, one can feel the sadness in your words. Excellent use of words to bring forth feelings.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Thank you so much for your review and encouragement.
God bless and my best,
Relda

Comment from Delahay

Excellent

There are times when our emotions can be so strong they can cause physical pain. This can be hard for some people to understand since there are no visible marks to show where one hurts.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

I know what you mean about hidden scars. I try never to judge people by the outside.
Great pain can give a person great depth.
Thanks for the review.
Relda

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

I have loved through some of the very times you speak of. I feel the emotions from this poem which makes it an excellent entry for this contest. You mentioned the right moments that sparked emotion in me as a reader. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Hi, Joy! So nice to talk to you again.
Thank you for your comments and encouragement.
I've been 'there' a few times. Thank heaven, not for long.
Regards,
Relda

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

When life gets you down, read humor until you break out laughing. The negative spell has been broken. This is very well written with good imagery.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016

Charlie - Good advice! My hubby doesn't like reading so watching old TV comedies does the trick for us.
Proverbs says, 'Laughter is like a good medicine.' Bottle it and you'd make a million.
Regards,
Relda