Reality Check
Growing up.20 total reviews
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
This short work has all the things required, but a great surprise ending. I didn't even begin to suspect there was one. But it was
great. I'm just thinking how much we depend on our peripheral vision for knowing when the end is, so when there's still "time" to go but yours was so hidden at the very end that my peripherals didn't help either. (I laugh at myself sometimes--I'm sure you didn't need to know that!) Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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This short work has all the things required, but a great surprise ending. I didn't even begin to suspect there was one. But it was
great. I'm just thinking how much we depend on our peripheral vision for knowing when the end is, so when there's still "time" to go but yours was so hidden at the very end that my peripherals didn't help either. (I laugh at myself sometimes--I'm sure you didn't need to know that!) Great job.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind review.
Comment from Hitcher
Got to love the humor of this little slice of magic, congratulations on your placing in the contest friend, this one definitely made me smile. I can remember when my house used to be full of my little ponies-two girls : )
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Got to love the humor of this little slice of magic, congratulations on your placing in the contest friend, this one definitely made me smile. I can remember when my house used to be full of my little ponies-two girls : )
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute entry for the Drabble Flash Fiction contest. You used very cute descriptive wording and I love the art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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This is a very cute entry for the Drabble Flash Fiction contest. You used very cute descriptive wording and I love the art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 19-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much, Teri. Have a nice day.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Funny, I wasn't expecting the ending. As I read, I said, this doesn't fit. It sounds like she's spoiling the fun. Where's her imagination. Then poof, there it was.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Funny, I wasn't expecting the ending. As I read, I said, this doesn't fit. It sounds like she's spoiling the fun. Where's her imagination. Then poof, there it was.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thank goodness for that. Thanks for reading, Thomas.
Comment from sandragee
I looked up the word 'drabble' and learned the purpose of a drabble is to test the author's ability to express interesting and meaningful ideas in a confined space. You did a great job in writing your drabble. You gave a brief, but complete story with a surprise ending that makes the reader smile. When I read your story the words like magical, whimsical and creative came to mind. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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I looked up the word 'drabble' and learned the purpose of a drabble is to test the author's ability to express interesting and meaningful ideas in a confined space. You did a great job in writing your drabble. You gave a brief, but complete story with a surprise ending that makes the reader smile. When I read your story the words like magical, whimsical and creative came to mind. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your kind review, Sandra.
Comment from Ulla
This is a great little story, and a great flash story. You certainly managed to tell a story, which caught my attention in so few words. Well done and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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This is a great little story, and a great flash story. You certainly managed to tell a story, which caught my attention in so few words. Well done and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your review, Ulla.
Comment from aryr
This was absolutely a priceless moment. First the picture was so very cute. And the story itself was amazing. A magical creation denying the presence of another magical creation. I did so enjoy the firmness of the mother figure in both incidences with their distractions. Great writing, thanks.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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This was absolutely a priceless moment. First the picture was so very cute. And the story itself was amazing. A magical creation denying the presence of another magical creation. I did so enjoy the firmness of the mother figure in both incidences with their distractions. Great writing, thanks.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks, Aryr. I'm glad you liked it.
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You are very welcome Maria, It was indeed so enjoyable.
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fun little Drabble about fairies and the fiction we create about them. You used the common childhood question to parents, "Are ____ real?" and give it a delightful flight of fancy turn. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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This is a fun little Drabble about fairies and the fiction we create about them. You used the common childhood question to parents, "Are ____ real?" and give it a delightful flight of fancy turn. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from robyn corum
hahahahaha! I see you have also drabbled. What that mess on your chin there, dear. heeheehee! Mine was fun, hope yours was, too. This pleased my funny bone and I enjoyed it! (Like the name change, btw.) Thanks!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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hahahahaha! I see you have also drabbled. What that mess on your chin there, dear. heeheehee! Mine was fun, hope yours was, too. This pleased my funny bone and I enjoyed it! (Like the name change, btw.) Thanks!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I'm glad you liked it. The name is my full name and the G is the first letter of my surname.
Comment from winnona
adorable, creative,imaginative and just plain well done! Your words flowed well line to line. the story moved right along one line to next. the detail and realistic baby pegasus made the story come to life as I read it.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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adorable, creative,imaginative and just plain well done! Your words flowed well line to line. the story moved right along one line to next. the detail and realistic baby pegasus made the story come to life as I read it.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I'm glad you liked it, Winnona. And thanks for the six stars. It's very kind of you.
