Haiku the sea meets the shore
A pleasant place a thoughtless mind16 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the haiku contest
in the 5-7-5 syllable form
Nice imagery in the sea meeting shore
and personification with the sound of sea "singing"
Excellent reflective satori line
the relaxing sound of the waves
Excellent poem
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
This is a fine entry for the haiku contest
in the 5-7-5 syllable form
Nice imagery in the sea meeting shore
and personification with the sound of sea "singing"
Excellent reflective satori line
the relaxing sound of the waves
Excellent poem
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thanks for you generous comments and good wishes.
Thanks Jax
Comment from rjuselius
"The sea meets the shore
Singing continually
Cerebral repose"
for a haiku, capitalizing letters is frowned upon. the poem itself is very original and the satori is rather clever. this should do well for its uniqueness.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
"The sea meets the shore
Singing continually
Cerebral repose"
for a haiku, capitalizing letters is frowned upon. the poem itself is very original and the satori is rather clever. this should do well for its uniqueness.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 13-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2016
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Thanks for you clear and positive comments. I made the edit and also thank you for that.
Jax
It's to be blessed Thanks
Comment from royowen
A really good take in this haiku poetry contest. The theme is an unusual one and the satori is a really good one, a left field gem, I rather like your chances, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
A really good take in this haiku poetry contest. The theme is an unusual one and the satori is a really good one, a left field gem, I rather like your chances, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your kind words and positive comments. the blessing too.
Jax
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Most welcome
Comment from mvbrooks
This haiku has a peaceful sense with words like "meets" and "singing continually" and gives a sense of a soft, rolling tide and rhythmic wave sounds evoking a restful feeling. Meets line and syllable count.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
This haiku has a peaceful sense with words like "meets" and "singing continually" and gives a sense of a soft, rolling tide and rhythmic wave sounds evoking a restful feeling. Meets line and syllable count.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I am glad you enjoyed it and please it evoked a restful moment.
Thanks Jax
Comment from Bill O'Bier
A creative entry for this contest- The arrangement of your words are expressive.Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
A creative entry for this contest- The arrangement of your words are expressive.Thanks for sharing this piece.
Wishing you all the best...
Bill
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks Bill These are fun. I hope I can get the hang of them. I have bought a few books on them and it seems there is quite discrepancy as to what they should be. Some on them just leave me scratching my head. Thanks for the good wishes
Jax
Comment from Irish Rain
And what a beautiful, magical song it is, promising enchantment! This is a most lovely haiku, best of luck in this contest, blessings...
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
And what a beautiful, magical song it is, promising enchantment! This is a most lovely haiku, best of luck in this contest, blessings...
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the review and kind comments.
Jax
Comment from djsaxon
Love it. This evokes memories of a childhood (mine) living beachside. The sound of the waves breaking on the shore was way past awesome. I referred to it as a 'mental enema' best for the contest - DJ
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
Love it. This evokes memories of a childhood (mine) living beachside. The sound of the waves breaking on the shore was way past awesome. I referred to it as a 'mental enema' best for the contest - DJ
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Thanks for the Interesting comments. I am glad I evoked a pleasant memory. Thanks Jax
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good entry in the contest. You should do well.
A friend showed me a poem he wrote. He said it was Haiku. It was eighteen stanzas long.
I told him it wasn't Haiku.
He said, "yes it is. A guy in a bar told me."
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
A very good entry in the contest. You should do well.
A friend showed me a poem he wrote. He said it was Haiku. It was eighteen stanzas long.
I told him it wasn't Haiku.
He said, "yes it is. A guy in a bar told me."
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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They can be multi stanzas. I have seen them on this site and I checked the net. just ask Siri ;the computer lady in the phone. Thanks for the review
Jax
Comment from Joan E.
I like the mood you created with this 5-7-5 haiku and easily could visualize the scene. Your use of alliteration accentuated the message. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
I like the mood you created with this 5-7-5 haiku and easily could visualize the scene. Your use of alliteration accentuated the message. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for your kind words and good wishes.
Jax
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well worded haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
This is a very well worded haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for your review and good wishes
Jax