Brushstrokes
My life in a few words.8 total reviews
Comment from valmay
A beautifully written piece on an ordinary life of ups and downs. Congratulations on a well deserved win. I so enjoyed reading about you. Valmay
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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A beautifully written piece on an ordinary life of ups and downs. Congratulations on a well deserved win. I so enjoyed reading about you. Valmay
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Thanks. You're very kind.
Comment from zanya
Yes here is a tableau of a life - a most interesting journey , lived to the full and coping with life's inevitable 'slings and arows' as they happen -what a wonderful start to life'the most beautiful baby in the hospital'.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Yes here is a tableau of a life - a most interesting journey , lived to the full and coping with life's inevitable 'slings and arows' as they happen -what a wonderful start to life'the most beautiful baby in the hospital'.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Thanks for your kind review.
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Thanks for your kind review.
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed easily from beginning to end. the way you broke your life down into the most important parts worked very well for this contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your words flowed easily from beginning to end. the way you broke your life down into the most important parts worked very well for this contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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I won! Thanks for your good wishes .
Comment from country ranch writer
Such a wonderful peak into your life and an exciting one for your parents having to chase their little girl around to keep up with her.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Such a wonderful peak into your life and an exciting one for your parents having to chase their little girl around to keep up with her.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I am going to review this as it was categorized: General Fiction.
The 'story' is bare-bones. There is little in the way of showing, no depth, no connection, just a... a list.
Did she like her husband? Why was she in a class with a down syndrome child?
Why did she read her first English book at 18? What language does she normally speak?
How did she deal with her heartbreak?
As a general fiction story, it is lacking in the basic elements of a story.
This is not an insult, just a review of what was written.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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Hmm, I am going to review this as it was categorized: General Fiction.
The 'story' is bare-bones. There is little in the way of showing, no depth, no connection, just a... a list.
Did she like her husband? Why was she in a class with a down syndrome child?
Why did she read her first English book at 18? What language does she normally speak?
How did she deal with her heartbreak?
As a general fiction story, it is lacking in the basic elements of a story.
This is not an insult, just a review of what was written.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2016
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I never understood it as an insult. I'll have to change the category. It's non-fiction.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from oliver818
Nice story. I think you presented your life clearly and in a very interesting way. So this is a very good entry for the life competition. Good luck and have a great day
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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Nice story. I think you presented your life clearly and in a very interesting way. So this is a very good entry for the life competition. Good luck and have a great day
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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T hanks so much, Oliver.
Comment from vizee
Brushstrokes: To me it felt like your words were a stone thrown across a large, smooth lake. It skipped across the water, leaving an ever expanding wake in it's path. The moments of your life story were mirrored by each slap of the flat stone against the silvery water - leaving the expanding ripples to tell the rest of your story. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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Brushstrokes: To me it felt like your words were a stone thrown across a large, smooth lake. It skipped across the water, leaving an ever expanding wake in it's path. The moments of your life story were mirrored by each slap of the flat stone against the silvery water - leaving the expanding ripples to tell the rest of your story. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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What a beautiful review. Thanks!
Comment from barleygirl
I love this. The conversational tone is very friendly & upbeat. You chose just the right number of life events & you detailed your examples just the right amount to show us instead of telling us -- the mark of excellent writing. The closing sentiments show us your thankfulness & appreciation for all that came before.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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I love this. The conversational tone is very friendly & upbeat. You chose just the right number of life events & you detailed your examples just the right amount to show us instead of telling us -- the mark of excellent writing. The closing sentiments show us your thankfulness & appreciation for all that came before.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for your kind words.
