Glorious Blues
short story7 total reviews
Comment from schatzling
I must admit, I got lost in your writing here. Perhaps it is because English is my second language.....probably it is because it is very late and I have been plagued with an excruciating migraine all day long. Nevertheless, there were some very inscriptive (is that even a word...hmmmm) words/sentences that have caught my attention. Your style of writing grasps me and wants to keep me. Therefore, tomorrow, when I no longer have pain in my head and it is early in the morning, I can assure you, I will sit once more and read what you have written. I want to understand it totally. Once I have that accomplished, I promise I will expand on my Review.
Congratulations on your win.
BRAVO BRAVO......clap clap
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I must admit, I got lost in your writing here. Perhaps it is because English is my second language.....probably it is because it is very late and I have been plagued with an excruciating migraine all day long. Nevertheless, there were some very inscriptive (is that even a word...hmmmm) words/sentences that have caught my attention. Your style of writing grasps me and wants to keep me. Therefore, tomorrow, when I no longer have pain in my head and it is early in the morning, I can assure you, I will sit once more and read what you have written. I want to understand it totally. Once I have that accomplished, I promise I will expand on my Review.
Congratulations on your win.
BRAVO BRAVO......clap clap
Comment Written 26-Nov-2016
Comment from WalkerMan
As a lifelong non-drinker, I have never sat alone in a bar. Yet, I can imagine that this story is the dream of many men who do, though most would not be able to follow through so elegantly. It is heartwarming to read, and richly decorated with vivid imagery tastefully presented. I would call this a superb prose version of the "discreet heat" poetry now trending at FanStory, and the illustration certainly matches the theme.
(Two typos not caught by your spellchecker: "Those who one would dare call stereotypical shout out there [their] monotone admonitions." and "... ooze from every poor ["pore"] of the cave.")
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As a lifelong non-drinker, I have never sat alone in a bar. Yet, I can imagine that this story is the dream of many men who do, though most would not be able to follow through so elegantly. It is heartwarming to read, and richly decorated with vivid imagery tastefully presented. I would call this a superb prose version of the "discreet heat" poetry now trending at FanStory, and the illustration certainly matches the theme.
(Two typos not caught by your spellchecker: "Those who one would dare call stereotypical shout out there [their] monotone admonitions." and "... ooze from every poor ["pore"] of the cave.")
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
Comment from Heather Knight
This is absolutely wonderful. I like your use of language. Your prose reads like poetry.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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This is absolutely wonderful. I like your use of language. Your prose reads like poetry.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
Comment from nordicgirl
This is a thrilling read, Michael. It matches the music beautifully and I see the inspiration you got from your friend`s poem so very clearly. This is you at your best. O know that no one but you writes like this. One of your best. NG
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This is a thrilling read, Michael. It matches the music beautifully and I see the inspiration you got from your friend`s poem so very clearly. This is you at your best. O know that no one but you writes like this. One of your best. NG
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from Gloria ....
Aw I'm just smiling over here, Mav. What a beautiful tribute to my little quote. The entire story is filled with sensual imagery and a glorious trip that ends with the all important morning smells of bacon and coffee. This is beyond incredible. As always your creativity wends through your words like a fine tailor.
Just incredible. I am so thrilled... thank you. :))
Ange.
She was permantently (permanently) arrived from afar and exotic.
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Aw I'm just smiling over here, Mav. What a beautiful tribute to my little quote. The entire story is filled with sensual imagery and a glorious trip that ends with the all important morning smells of bacon and coffee. This is beyond incredible. As always your creativity wends through your words like a fine tailor.
Just incredible. I am so thrilled... thank you. :))
Ange.
She was permantently (permanently) arrived from afar and exotic.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from Justin Yhoung
And the 1st 6th star rating of the week goes to--you my friend! I will not end with "bravo" or "well-done," I will start with them, for this poem is worthy of praise. It's like your heart has been stabbed and the result is a blood flow of words and fantasies and desires and happenings.
"But it must be shared and enjoyed for it to have value."--I saw this, and I needed to copy it, because I simply loved it.
And that scene in the grotto!! How intimate! How hot and heavy lol.
Again I will say, well-done--you have blessed my day. Cheers!
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And the 1st 6th star rating of the week goes to--you my friend! I will not end with "bravo" or "well-done," I will start with them, for this poem is worthy of praise. It's like your heart has been stabbed and the result is a blood flow of words and fantasies and desires and happenings.
"But it must be shared and enjoyed for it to have value."--I saw this, and I needed to copy it, because I simply loved it.
And that scene in the grotto!! How intimate! How hot and heavy lol.
Again I will say, well-done--you have blessed my day. Cheers!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
Comment from damommy
Very powerful story. I don't think you should listen to "Rhapsody in Blue" anymore. LOL.
As all of your writing, this is compelling and keeps the reader hook to the end.
I think someone is a little bit comma-challenged. LOL.
-broken-down dreamer[,] too.
-She was [permanently]
-In the middle of the room[,] screams
-[their] monotone
-As the brawl ensues[,]
-cocktail for two[,]
-scream out[,]
-Together[,]
-pleasure[,] if possible
-every [pore]
-Before long[,]
-shorts[,] intent
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Very powerful story. I don't think you should listen to "Rhapsody in Blue" anymore. LOL.
As all of your writing, this is compelling and keeps the reader hook to the end.
I think someone is a little bit comma-challenged. LOL.
-broken-down dreamer[,] too.
-She was [permanently]
-In the middle of the room[,] screams
-[their] monotone
-As the brawl ensues[,]
-cocktail for two[,]
-scream out[,]
-Together[,]
-pleasure[,] if possible
-every [pore]
-Before long[,]
-shorts[,] intent
Comment Written 07-Nov-2016
