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Comment from sunnilicious
Nice family friendly story in a poem. Great visual imagery created. No artwork necessary, but nice accompaniment. Good flow of rhythm and subtle rhymes. I'd trim all the lines to all be under 12-syllables long to make it more unified. Enjoyable read. Have a great weekend
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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Nice family friendly story in a poem. Great visual imagery created. No artwork necessary, but nice accompaniment. Good flow of rhythm and subtle rhymes. I'd trim all the lines to all be under 12-syllables long to make it more unified. Enjoyable read. Have a great weekend
Comment Written 05-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
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thank you so much. I will go back and check the line length to make it better , that's why I love critiques
Comment from Ulla
Hi Judy, good to see you back and I hope we will see more writing from you in the near future. Very well written poem about the Halloween. Good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Hi Judy, good to see you back and I hope we will see more writing from you in the near future. Very well written poem about the Halloween. Good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016
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Thank you , I am happy to be back I truly missed writing..
Comment from frogbook
Great story and I am assuming it was true? If not you did a great job convincing me. Entertaining and funny read that should place high in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Great story and I am assuming it was true? If not you did a great job convincing me. Entertaining and funny read that should place high in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Thank you it was a fun write. and I am happy to finally be back writing it has been tooooooo long
Comment from schatzling
It is good to have you back
And that is a fact
Your Halloween Revenge was just alright
Nothing to scream at but for bro and dad quite a fright
It lacks your special YOUness
You must practice, practice practice
Been missing you too
Hope all went well with the choir recital at school.
Been keeping pretty busy myself
Another year almost ready to be put on the shelf.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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It is good to have you back
And that is a fact
Your Halloween Revenge was just alright
Nothing to scream at but for bro and dad quite a fright
It lacks your special YOUness
You must practice, practice practice
Been missing you too
Hope all went well with the choir recital at school.
Been keeping pretty busy myself
Another year almost ready to be put on the shelf.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Yes, I enjoyed this simple poem but I prefer to write from the heart. So glad to be back. l You know me well.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, it doesn't appear as if you've lost a thing to me by being away, Judy. Most especially your imagination. If you have an inventive, active imagination then nothing is impossible to conceive or write, as evidenced here by you fun, hilariously funny entry for this year's annual Halloween Poetry Contest on FanStory.
Well done, and welcome back!
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Well, it doesn't appear as if you've lost a thing to me by being away, Judy. Most especially your imagination. If you have an inventive, active imagination then nothing is impossible to conceive or write, as evidenced here by you fun, hilariously funny entry for this year's annual Halloween Poetry Contest on FanStory.
Well done, and welcome back!
~Dean :)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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thank you dean. I have missed all of you so much. I have missed writing. It's just that I have been working 14 hour days with choir contests, concerts and our musical. Oh well it is always worth it I have great students.
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You just have a full life, Judy.
But that's a good thing to have.
You are more than welcome and we have all missed you too.
~Dean
Comment from Gloria ....
Great job, Judy and welcome back. You've returned with a terrific story in a poem and a delight for the Potlatch. Especially with the fake blood. HA
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Great job, Judy and welcome back. You've returned with a terrific story in a poem and a delight for the Potlatch. Especially with the fake blood. HA
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Missed y ou all so much . It was lonely not writing. Amazing what it means to us
Comment from Irish Rain
Your entertaining writing has been missed, this is no exception! Funny, clever, and just exactly what they deserved, ha ha! Love this, great entry, blessings...
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Your entertaining writing has been missed, this is no exception! Funny, clever, and just exactly what they deserved, ha ha! Love this, great entry, blessings...
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Missed y ou all so much . It was lonely not writing. Amazing what it means to us
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I know....sometimes my head is just CROWDED with words!!!
Comment from winnona
A very well written Halloween poetry contest entry. Your well-chosen words flowed well together easily combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. your artwork and background color completed it well.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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A very well written Halloween poetry contest entry. Your well-chosen words flowed well together easily combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader. your artwork and background color completed it well.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2016
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Missed y ou all so much . It was lonely not writing. Amazing what it means to us
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I missed your writing. Have you been busy?
Comment from Dustybones
You did a great job of this halloween post. Reads fine with many catchy rhymes. I'll keep an eye out for the contest. Plenty of good one, I like this one lots because it tells a story. dustybones boyd
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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You did a great job of this halloween post. Reads fine with many catchy rhymes. I'll keep an eye out for the contest. Plenty of good one, I like this one lots because it tells a story. dustybones boyd
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much Dusty , It is great to be back to writing again I have missed it so much and I always love to hear from you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Rubylou
This is such a fun Halloween poem. These kinds of memories are what truly make family fun special. LOL
Retelling events of fun like this helps keep the family bond strong.
I wonder how dad and John took revenge on mom and daughter. (It's almost a set-up for a part 2. )
Have a wonderful day,
Rubylou
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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This is such a fun Halloween poem. These kinds of memories are what truly make family fun special. LOL
Retelling events of fun like this helps keep the family bond strong.
I wonder how dad and John took revenge on mom and daughter. (It's almost a set-up for a part 2. )
Have a wonderful day,
Rubylou
Comment Written 30-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2016
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Yes, it sure is. The scaring definitely didn't go away. Happy Halloween
