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Strange Things Happening

Is It For Real?

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Comment from Rasmine
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Nice story. I like that they told the ghost he could play the piano anytime because it was his house too.
I found one error: As the trespassers enter (comma after introduction) there is a ringing bell attached to the tower of the widows (make widows 's to show possession) walk.
I want to wish you luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2016


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    thank you for your kindness
Comment from frogbook
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A very original story of a haunted house that ended with a compromise. Enjoyable reading and great description of the house. Best of luck in the voting.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2016


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Comment from Ric Myworld
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Oh, yes, I'm sure Alley would have thanked Mister Captain for that goodnight kiss. She would have probably left there running so fast that all she would have left was poop and tennis shoes. Thanks for another fine story. :-)

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2016


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
    thank you for your kindness. she was used to ghosts at her grandpas castle or didn't you read that part
reply by Ric Myworld on 29-Oct-2016
    Yes, I knew she was used to ghosts in her granpa's castle. I was just being that silly me. LOL!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2016
    He he silly you
Comment from DR DIP
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Captain not Caption lol

I like these haunted house stories you hang on waiting for something unsuspecting and scary to happen . At least it was a happy ending

dip

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2016


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
    thanks dip
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Last paragraph , capitalize Alley
I think Mister Caption needs capitalized

sound(s) of the waves were-plural
washouts; the only way in
enter, the real estate man
you magically find yourself
started-facing the cliffs.
cliffs as they scare off others
den which has walls filled
to give the bid for the place
As they were leaving, Alley
house. It feels like
Ghost and all,
the place up-washing
They put up a sign
house, "You will be beautiful
fix you up."
sigh.
cook, too.

An excellent story, just a few corrections to make it ready for the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2016


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
    THANK YOU FOR THE HEADS UP I REALLY APPRECIATE IT
reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 28-Oct-2016
    It is a great piece and I don't want you disqualified or looked over for some mistakes. I am not perfect but those were the ones I thought
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2016
    thanks for the help
Comment from Thomas Bowling
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A very good story. Especially for Halloween. Finally a friendly ghost. Not like Casper, More like that husband and wife from te sixties.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2016


reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
    thank you for your kindness