Wrinkles
Time to smooth things over.12 total reviews
Comment from angel123
Enjoyed reading your well written poem. It flows well with a profound message. Your artwork goes powerfully well with your poem.
Angel123
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Enjoyed reading your well written poem. It flows well with a profound message. Your artwork goes powerfully well with your poem.
Angel123
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from foxangie123
This must be the most talent filled contest I ever been blessed with reviewing. Another brilliant and down right awesome entry. More please.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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This must be the most talent filled contest I ever been blessed with reviewing. Another brilliant and down right awesome entry. More please.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for the awesome review. There was a lot of tough compeitition.
Comment from rama devi
Awesome theme, word economy, presentation with apt artwork and phrasing phonetics The alliteration of R, F and C plus consonance of S and assonance of E contribute to making this is six star worthy three liner...combined with the intense insightful descriptive subject and substance. Bravo. Brilliant.
I rarely give a six for a three liner...kudos!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Awesome theme, word economy, presentation with apt artwork and phrasing phonetics The alliteration of R, F and C plus consonance of S and assonance of E contribute to making this is six star worthy three liner...combined with the intense insightful descriptive subject and substance. Bravo. Brilliant.
I rarely give a six for a three liner...kudos!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
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Thanks, rd, for the awesome review and the bonus star.
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:-)))
Comment from l.raven
oh you are so very right...it is a crime what wrinkles can make you feel like...what they do to our lives...but they are just the shell...it is what is inside that counts...very well written...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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oh you are so very right...it is a crime what wrinkles can make you feel like...what they do to our lives...but they are just the shell...it is what is inside that counts...very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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thanks for the kind review.
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you are so very welcome...xxoo Linda
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written senryu poem. Over the years we have many regrets about things we done wrong and should have done differently, all the worries just give us wrinkles.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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A very well-written senryu poem. Over the years we have many regrets about things we done wrong and should have done differently, all the worries just give us wrinkles.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Nika2016
No problem...use coconut butter with Brazil Nut...works wonders...
Regrets usually have a window of foreseeability...don't go there...
Interesting poem/artwork
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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No problem...use coconut butter with Brazil Nut...works wonders...
Regrets usually have a window of foreseeability...don't go there...
Interesting poem/artwork
Comment Written 22-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from mike1817
It's hard for me to go above four stars with the limits of this form. I refer you to a black and white portrait of his mother in law done by Chuck Close. It was affectionate, but when he related his rationale, he did it with one thumbnail dipped in ink. Hence, no one could copy it. He owned the tools. Senyu mystifies me bit the art draws me in. Thanks. Mike1817
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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It's hard for me to go above four stars with the limits of this form. I refer you to a black and white portrait of his mother in law done by Chuck Close. It was affectionate, but when he related his rationale, he did it with one thumbnail dipped in ink. Hence, no one could copy it. He owned the tools. Senyu mystifies me bit the art draws me in. Thanks. Mike1817
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from loismddavis
How did you find a picture that had both a wrinkled and youthful image at the same time. Great little poem that uses imagery of fabric and cutting so appropriately--so so clever--I might have used the word repressed rather than
recessed but yours perhaps fits the fabric image better. So good!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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How did you find a picture that had both a wrinkled and youthful image at the same time. Great little poem that uses imagery of fabric and cutting so appropriately--so so clever--I might have used the word repressed rather than
recessed but yours perhaps fits the fabric image better. So good!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
This is a very clever little senryu, laden with double meaning. If I've got it right, the 'crime' is to have regrets - those pesky little things that there is no cure for, that only crease and crumple our fabric beyond any hope of being ironed out.
'I've had a few', as ol' Blue Eyes would sing - maybe that's where these crinkles came from.
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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This is a very clever little senryu, laden with double meaning. If I've got it right, the 'crime' is to have regrets - those pesky little things that there is no cure for, that only crease and crumple our fabric beyond any hope of being ironed out.
'I've had a few', as ol' Blue Eyes would sing - maybe that's where these crinkles came from.
Steve
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the poem is a reminiscence of how unresolved regrets predispose misdemeanor in the social fabric of such a victim.The poem earns its texture from its fortrightness. Excellent work!Bravo!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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The objective correlative of the poem is a reminiscence of how unresolved regrets predispose misdemeanor in the social fabric of such a victim.The poem earns its texture from its fortrightness. Excellent work!Bravo!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Remain Blessed!
