Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

This is an adorable story! I didn't find any errors, and your choice of font was very easy for the eyes. Haunted houses have feelings, too! Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016

I'm glad you liked it. I voted for your story, I thought it was excellent.

reply by Rasmine on 02-Nov-2016

Hey, thank you! :) I just put on haunted house music and that helped put me in the mood. Also, found a picture of a house in my hometown, built with brownstone bricks--very creepy looking but charming. :P

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016

Good idea to get inspired.

reply by Rasmine on 02-Nov-2016

Yeah. :)

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

good deed indeed for all to share and be happy the children are having a place to meet and play and keeps the off the streets

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2016

Thanks for your review.

Comment from gene roush

Excellent

This is very cute -- the type of story that might make a nice children's book.
The writing is easy to read and proceeds linearly.
Thanks for sharing
Gene

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading, Gene.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hello, María. I see you've written a little terror tale for us all to sink our teeth into. Sorry to be so late to the party...

Everybody in the village knew the house at the end of Dikler Drive was haunted. ... Good opening to draw your readers into the story and make them want to learn more, María. Also, a very good description of the old Dikler house follows.
Nice...

Well, apparently they haven't. You'd better think of a solution and don't call me till you have. I hope your poor father doesn't find out. It would break his already delicate heart.' ... If Matilda's mother was an elegant old mansion by the sea, then what was her father, the boathouse? Heh-heh-heh...

Matilda's father was a stone castle on the edge of a cliff and erosion wasn't a kind friend. Oops...I stand corrected. You see, I read & review as I go.
I feel I can give a much more accurate review that way...

Well...I'll be. A haunted house story with a happy ending.
Who'd'a thunk it?
Good writing, María. This is an excellent story for children.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading, Dean.
I also review as I go, using the little bubble thingy on the left.

reply by Dean Kuch on 22-Oct-2016

Yes, that's how I do it as well.
You're very welcome, my fiend friend. (sorry 'bout the little "slip" there, hee-hee...)
~Dean :}

reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

Fiend indeed! ;)

reply by Dean Kuch on 22-Oct-2016

reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

How cute! In an evil sort of way.

Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

Well ..you had to go and get the adults involved? Could it not be the kids'special place? Smile.
I liked the story...and I can see the renovation...

Matilda shi es!

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading! ;)

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

What an interesting turn this took. A very original and unique idea with a happy ending for a once haunted place. Great idea for the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading.

Comment from Heidi M

Excellent

This is a delightful story told from the unique perspective of the house that didn't fit in with its (her) family. Snooty mother, ailing father, and know-it-all sister were probably not as happy as Matilda now is.
Nicely written entry for the contest!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thanks for your kind review, Heidi.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hi, Maria

= I love this story! The twist on her not wanting to be a haunted house and keep up family tradition was a great idea.
= Nicely told.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings <> Jax
<> Published as <> Jacqueline M Franklin

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

I'm glad you enjoyed my story, Jax. Thanks so much for the six stars.

Comment from ScarBundy

Excellent

This is a warm your heart, feel good kind of story. I kept waiting for the ghost to appear, but I love that you gave the house a personality of its own. In that way, it is different from any other haunted house story I've ever read. Such a clever idea!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

Thanks for your review.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I have no more stars to give. This is the cutest story I have read in a long time.
I love how the children began to love the house which made the ghostly girl be come a happy child again.
Cookie

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

I'm glad you liked it, Cookie. That's more important than the stars. Have a nice day.