Comment from CammyCards

Good

I like you haiku and you have adhered nicely to the rules of the contest. I just wonder if your last line couldn't read "Enshrouds winter food", which would move the verb closer to the threads which are doing the action?
Thank you for using my picture to illustrate your work.
CammyCards

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016

Thank you for your review and suggestion. I think it does work better! Always can use fresh eyes. And thank you for the artwork as well!

reply by CammyCards on 16-Oct-2016

you are most welcome for both. Good writing.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a fine entry for the contest
with exact syllables at 5-7-5
and good imagery in night/threads
that is grammatically connected
Good satori line, even has a kigo in winter
Excellent picture to match
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016

Thank you for your kind review!

Comment from 914

Excellent

Nicely done and very creative and of all things a spiders trap.weaving its web ofdeath . I work the night shift so im up when all are asleep theres always work to ne done.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016

Thanks for the kind review!