Where's Bob?
A story of a toddler's love and her 'missing' grampie...25 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I wish I had a six. Thanks for sharing your personal and touching chapter of your story. I thought I added you to my fan list after the very first post of yours that I read, but I was running so far behind that maybe I didn't. However, I now can't imagine why I would have been so foolish. Great chapter! :-)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Well, I wish I had a six. Thanks for sharing your personal and touching chapter of your story. I thought I added you to my fan list after the very first post of yours that I read, but I was running so far behind that maybe I didn't. However, I now can't imagine why I would have been so foolish. Great chapter! :-)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Hi there Ric. What a lovely review, thank you so very much for your kind words and virtual six stars :) I appreciate your interest in my work. Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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 A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review. |
Comment Written 08-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2016
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Wow, the competition was stiff and I am very honored. Thank you for the opportunity. So very appreciated.
Comment from Kelly2
Mary, this is so sad. I lost my dad 14 years ago when I was 40. In a very different way, though.
Your descriptions of your daughter are of sweetness, love, and innocence. It is too bad she won't remember him. But you have your memories you probably share with her now.
Great job on the writing, but can we have some laughs soon?
Kelly
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Mary, this is so sad. I lost my dad 14 years ago when I was 40. In a very different way, though.
Your descriptions of your daughter are of sweetness, love, and innocence. It is too bad she won't remember him. But you have your memories you probably share with her now.
Great job on the writing, but can we have some laughs soon?
Kelly
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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Hi Kelly, thank you for the review on the first part of the story too. And only for only 2c 😯
Thank you so much. Laughs are coming...have to check my vault!
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I know...that's the price I get for disappearing for a couple of weeks. You have to catch up for a measly 2 cents.
Comment from Judy Couch
This is a depressing story. I came close to tears while reading it. It brought back memories of my mother's death. One thing to think about: "Emily wandered the house and backyard asking repeatedly the same two words on repeat..." You used a form of the word "repeat" twice in this sentence. You might want to change one of them.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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This is a depressing story. I came close to tears while reading it. It brought back memories of my mother's death. One thing to think about: "Emily wandered the house and backyard asking repeatedly the same two words on repeat..." You used a form of the word "repeat" twice in this sentence. You might want to change one of them.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Judy, for your RR&R, and pointing the repeats out...I have eliminated one if them. Much appreciated. The conclusion will be much brighter, promise.
Comment from Marvin Calloway
Mary This had to be one of the most difficult stories you've ever written. And it's perfect.
Your sentence beginning with, "I was forty years old . . ." says so much in just two lines. It is a gem!
I imagine that shaving your father will always linger in your memory.
One superb, sad story.
Marv
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Mary This had to be one of the most difficult stories you've ever written. And it's perfect.
Your sentence beginning with, "I was forty years old . . ." says so much in just two lines. It is a gem!
I imagine that shaving your father will always linger in your memory.
One superb, sad story.
Marv
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Hi Marvin. Thank you so much for your review, and for the six stars attached to this story. It was tough, I cried as I wrote...when my Emily read it a few days ago, she cried as she read...Your assignment of a six is especially gratifying to me with this writing. I appreciate you!
Comment from Unspoken94
This is a remarkable story written in an
exceptional way. I write many pieces about
those who came to the end of life and their
families but yours was a gem. I look forward
to its continuation. You had a remarkable
father. -Bill
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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This is a remarkable story written in an
exceptional way. I write many pieces about
those who came to the end of life and their
families but yours was a gem. I look forward
to its continuation. You had a remarkable
father. -Bill
Comment Written 20-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
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Bill, thank you for this wonderful review and kind words. I appreciate you! Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Joy Graham
You have a gift for writing. You bring tears to my eyes with laughter, and now this time the tears are for sorrow. This is incredibly touching. I think of my own dad's passing 3 years ago, and more recently my dear father-in-law.
I look forward to reading part two of this story.
- "...blossomed as a two year old (todder)..." - toddler with an L
- "...Lewis grandchildren (wtih) the next closest to her in age..." - with
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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You have a gift for writing. You bring tears to my eyes with laughter, and now this time the tears are for sorrow. This is incredibly touching. I think of my own dad's passing 3 years ago, and more recently my dear father-in-law.
I look forward to reading part two of this story.
- "...blossomed as a two year old (todder)..." - toddler with an L
- "...Lewis grandchildren (wtih) the next closest to her in age..." - with
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Joy, for those catches and for the fabulous six. It means so much to me to receive a six on this write, especially.
The conclusion won't be as sad, I promise. Thank you again!
Comment from barkingdog
I feel like I was stopped in mid-stream.
Guess, I have to wait for the next part.
This introduction to your father and his ordeal with cancer, and your darling daughter was a wonderful read. Sad but wonderful.
:) e
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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I feel like I was stopped in mid-stream.
Guess, I have to wait for the next part.
This introduction to your father and his ordeal with cancer, and your darling daughter was a wonderful read. Sad but wonderful.
:) e
Comment Written 19-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
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Hi Ellen, thank you for your RR&R and your lovely comments. I promise the conclusion won't be nearly as sad--it will leave you with a smile. :)
Comment from Spitfire
Talk about being spiritually aware. Yes, that dream and sensation of peace and love was your father's soul passing over. The song was another message. And that lamb is no coincidence as it ties in with the "lamb of God" so often quoted in church.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Talk about being spiritually aware. Yes, that dream and sensation of peace and love was your father's soul passing over. The song was another message. And that lamb is no coincidence as it ties in with the "lamb of God" so often quoted in church.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Shari, for the RR&R and kind remarks. You know, I had not even thought of that lamb in that sense until you mentioned that. I hunted high and low before posting that story for one of Emily and my dad. I settled on the lamb...must have been dad again the other night... :)
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For sure. Another spiritual awareness.
Comment from F. Wehr3
What a great heartfelt story, Mary. I enjoyed it even though it was tragic. I look forward to the next part. I found a couple of things for your consideration.
"Lub you Bob."--Suggest a comma before Bob. Remember to use it when addressing someone directly.
Many nights I laid in bed staring into the dark nothingness -- I believe lay would be the appropriate word or had lain.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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What a great heartfelt story, Mary. I enjoyed it even though it was tragic. I look forward to the next part. I found a couple of things for your consideration.
"Lub you Bob."--Suggest a comma before Bob. Remember to use it when addressing someone directly.
Many nights I laid in bed staring into the dark nothingness -- I believe lay would be the appropriate word or had lain.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 18-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
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Good morning, Russell, and thank you for a great review as well as a great eye. I have made those changes. Thank you for the continued follow and support. Much appreciated. Have a great day!
