Comment from William Ross

Excellent

As far as the writing goes I think it's a great job as far as a fable goes not bad about My fox it's the moral that I question. well done and good luck, have a wonderful day

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2016

The moral is just a joke, William. I was trying to write a parody of a fable. Thanks for reading.

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

HAHA! Yes, I guess they should! A cute little tale. Not easy to write a fable - I guess Aesop had that genre pretty much tied up. :)

walking was (to) much work - too

Best of luck in the contest.

Av

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading and for noticing the typo.

Comment from Spiritual Echo

Excellent

This is a really cute story and from the one's I read, looks like the winner.

However, you have spacing problems starting in the first paragraph. Edit on FS and eliminate all the double spacing between words before it works against you.

Nice story.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016

Thanks for your review. The double spacing is a consequence of the straight margin on the right and cannot be fixed unless I give up that margin.

reply by Spiritual Echo on 07-Oct-2016

Not true. Hopefully you write on Word then copy/paste onto the site. When you type in Word, allow TWO spaces between paragraphs as FS will steal one. You DO NOT have to set up a format, FS will automatically put it into the right setting, but DO NOT indent. TRUST ME--8 years on site.

Comment from schatzling

Excellent

I enjoyed your story. It was a bit whimsical and a bit wisdom filled and somewhat written perhaps for a child....not too young, but old enough to be able to understand. I wanted to also thank you for selecting my photo to accompany your story...even though the grapes were not purple in the photo itself, the photo was still a good accompaniment for your fable like story. Thanks so much for sharing and wish you good fortune in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016

Thanks for your picture and for the kind review.

reply by schatzling on 07-Oct-2016

My pleasure.

reply by schatzling on 11-Oct-2016

My pleasure.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good image.
-Interesting story.
-You describe Mr. and Mrs. Fox well
and set the mood with the very hot day.
-Mr. Fox was very bored, but his wife
wanted him to avoid the heat.
-Being a fox, he figured it was better
to go out than being stuck inside.
-He couldn't believe his good luck--beautiful grapes;
how tasty they would be.
-He couldn't reach them no matter how much he
tried to jump.
-I guess thirsty foxes only end up with sour grapes!
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016

Thanks for your thorough review.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

I will admit to having to read the final line / moral a few times, but I still think the moral is a bit unclear. I think it is about giving up too easily and really going for it despite the obstacles.

Good luck in the contest.
GMG

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016

The moral is about nothing. It's just a silly joke.
Thanks for the review.