What it takes
A Dactylic Redoubled Rondeau43 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I love the image; I think the bride
is glad to be free!
-The meter in this is impeccable;
I can't imagine doing it!
-Your poem has such joy; you make
the reader feel like joining in on this merry jaunt!
-Great imagery:
* "Snap out of lethargy! Leap up with wakefulness"
* "leap on a bicycle, pedal most hairily"
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
-I love the image; I think the bride
is glad to be free!
-The meter in this is impeccable;
I can't imagine doing it!
-Your poem has such joy; you make
the reader feel like joining in on this merry jaunt!
-Great imagery:
* "Snap out of lethargy! Leap up with wakefulness"
* "leap on a bicycle, pedal most hairily"
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Very many thanks for your kind words and six stars, Pam. Both much appreciated. Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
Verily I say, this is most merrily, jauntily, airily wondrous
Rhymes done most tunefully, playfully
Drum beat most merrily, boomfully
Scribed most wordfully
What it takes is talent
to ride and drum and write simultaneously
and a master juggler who understands balance beautifully
Well pedaled and sung, my friend
Best wishes in the contest
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
Verily I say, this is most merrily, jauntily, airily wondrous
Rhymes done most tunefully, playfully
Drum beat most merrily, boomfully
Scribed most wordfully
What it takes is talent
to ride and drum and write simultaneously
and a master juggler who understands balance beautifully
Well pedaled and sung, my friend
Best wishes in the contest
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Very many thanks for your cheerful and bouncy review, RS, and for the six stars. Both much appreciated. Tony
Comment from krys123
Hello Tony;
-both are accomplished in making a well written double Rondeau and cheering me up at 1:45 AM in the morning Pacific standard Time, here in the states. Such a very vibrant and radiant piece of poetry that can lift anyone spirit and click his or her heels in happiness.
-Very excellent rhyming and rhythm skills which incorporated the enjambement which is the understanding of the conceptual theme and topic of your writing, that flows fluidly throughout the writing without a hiccup.
-A great picture and something from the old style and is very appropriate and supportive to this conceptual theme.
-Is very typically written dactylic tetrameter was very impressively written throughout the writing. Even the whole format is something I wouldn't want to try and this I was very familiar with style's format.
-Thank you for sharing Tony and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
Hello Tony;
-both are accomplished in making a well written double Rondeau and cheering me up at 1:45 AM in the morning Pacific standard Time, here in the states. Such a very vibrant and radiant piece of poetry that can lift anyone spirit and click his or her heels in happiness.
-Very excellent rhyming and rhythm skills which incorporated the enjambement which is the understanding of the conceptual theme and topic of your writing, that flows fluidly throughout the writing without a hiccup.
-A great picture and something from the old style and is very appropriate and supportive to this conceptual theme.
-Is very typically written dactylic tetrameter was very impressively written throughout the writing. Even the whole format is something I wouldn't want to try and this I was very familiar with style's format.
-Thank you for sharing Tony and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Very many thanks for your kind review, Alex. Glad you enjoyed my rondeau redouble and that it cheered you up in the middle of the night! Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
celebrate crashes but learn when you make a mess - that line really stands out for me in this re-doubled rondeau with many great Dum da da lines. It sounds all too complicated for me, but this is a lovely read Tony, good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
celebrate crashes but learn when you make a mess - that line really stands out for me in this re-doubled rondeau with many great Dum da da lines. It sounds all too complicated for me, but this is a lovely read Tony, good luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Pearl. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from Wabigoon
Tony--
This entire rather abstruse form contest strikes me as a kind of Sudoku. I don't do them. My wife does, this is probably one of the "hard" ones. I read Jim, Pantygynt's entry but could not bring myself to review or grade it because I felt so bad for the person imprisoned in the form. Why does one bother doing this? Why not try to define what is imprisoned in, say, Eurydice's continued imprisonment in Hades? Why strengthen the chains, bars, then make a formal joke of it? Got me. S & M bondage fetish is what I think. You try to break that but it seems into this sort of 1940s bicycle riding dame. Nice effort, lots of cleverness employed, but I'd rather see Eurydice, Wide Justice up in regard to, say, the latest, latest mall shooting in the US.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
Tony--
This entire rather abstruse form contest strikes me as a kind of Sudoku. I don't do them. My wife does, this is probably one of the "hard" ones. I read Jim, Pantygynt's entry but could not bring myself to review or grade it because I felt so bad for the person imprisoned in the form. Why does one bother doing this? Why not try to define what is imprisoned in, say, Eurydice's continued imprisonment in Hades? Why strengthen the chains, bars, then make a formal joke of it? Got me. S & M bondage fetish is what I think. You try to break that but it seems into this sort of 1940s bicycle riding dame. Nice effort, lots of cleverness employed, but I'd rather see Eurydice, Wide Justice up in regard to, say, the latest, latest mall shooting in the US.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Jeff. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from BeasPeas
This a joyful, upbeat, playful poem with fine rhythm that rolls along well from line to line. Colors of presentation work well with content. This looks like a complicated form that demands a lot of attention. From what I can see it looks to be perfect. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
This a joyful, upbeat, playful poem with fine rhythm that rolls along well from line to line. Colors of presentation work well with content. This looks like a complicated form that demands a lot of attention. From what I can see it looks to be perfect. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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HThank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Marilyn. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from Mastery
Bravo, Tony! Good celebratory poetry. Jim should love this. LOL
"giving a wave to the bystanders, cheerily
bellowing, "Follow me! Celebrate zaniness!
It's not the garden variety!" - verily
echoing confidence. Displacing laziness,"
Good job and good luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
Bravo, Tony! Good celebratory poetry. Jim should love this. LOL
"giving a wave to the bystanders, cheerily
bellowing, "Follow me! Celebrate zaniness!
It's not the garden variety!" - verily
echoing confidence. Displacing laziness,"
Good job and good luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Bob. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your splendid creation in this complex form. I admired your retort to Pantygynt and your rhymes, rhythm and repeats. Your "drum" metaphor and "bear" simile are quite effective, along with the classic poster art. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
Thank you for sharing your splendid creation in this complex form. I admired your retort to Pantygynt and your rhymes, rhythm and repeats. Your "drum" metaphor and "bear" simile are quite effective, along with the classic poster art. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Joan. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Rondeau Redouble, when we have fun, we make our lives so much lighter and bearable. Instead of carrying a heavy load of complaints, just have fun.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
A very well-written Rondeau Redouble, when we have fun, we make our lives so much lighter and bearable. Instead of carrying a heavy load of complaints, just have fun.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Sandra. Appreciated, as always! Tony
Comment from DonandVicki
Good poetry like yours, should expand the imagination. Very well composed and thought out. I enjoyed the combination of your poem and art work.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
Good poetry like yours, should expand the imagination. Very well composed and thought out. I enjoyed the combination of your poem and art work.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, DonandVicki. Appreciated, as always! Tony