Spanish Girl, Interrupted.
Being bullied in the late seventies.17 total reviews
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Bullying is awful, and you definitely have the personal tale to put the focus on it. I remember when I was a kid, the onus was put on the one being bullied to "stand up" to the bully. Now the responsibility and accountability lies more with bullies and those who witness bullying. I am not sure if bullying is more of an issue now than when I was a kid or if it is just receiving more attention. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Bullying is awful, and you definitely have the personal tale to put the focus on it. I remember when I was a kid, the onus was put on the one being bullied to "stand up" to the bully. Now the responsibility and accountability lies more with bullies and those who witness bullying. I am not sure if bullying is more of an issue now than when I was a kid or if it is just receiving more attention. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading and your comments.
Comment from Judy Couch
You told your story well. Today something might have been done to stop the bully before it went that far. They still get away with it a lot though.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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You told your story well. Today something might have been done to stop the bully before it went that far. They still get away with it a lot though.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading , Judy.
Comment from Alex Rosel
Maybe the darkest episode of my life took place when I was fifteen years old. - A great opening sentence, especially for this contest.
He was red-haired and his face was covered in freckles. He was shorter than me and quite stocky. - A good description with an economy of words. I can see this person in my mind's eye.
I remember he was very good at drawing and often spent lessons making caricatures of the teachers. - And, this gives us insight into his personality :-)
It was like Girl, Interrupted, but in Spain. - I can't understand this. I guess it refers to some aspect only understandable in Spanish.
He was incredibly happy to see me again and so was I. - This is a bit ambiguous. Perhaps. ...and I was happy to see him is better?
I often think this is an episode that changed my life. That changed me. - Typo. Nix the second sentence.
This is a good entry for this particular contest. It's clearly autobiographical, and as a reader, I can feel something of your emotions. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you, and good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Maybe the darkest episode of my life took place when I was fifteen years old. - A great opening sentence, especially for this contest.
He was red-haired and his face was covered in freckles. He was shorter than me and quite stocky. - A good description with an economy of words. I can see this person in my mind's eye.
I remember he was very good at drawing and often spent lessons making caricatures of the teachers. - And, this gives us insight into his personality :-)
It was like Girl, Interrupted, but in Spain. - I can't understand this. I guess it refers to some aspect only understandable in Spanish.
He was incredibly happy to see me again and so was I. - This is a bit ambiguous. Perhaps. ...and I was happy to see him is better?
I often think this is an episode that changed my life. That changed me. - Typo. Nix the second sentence.
This is a good entry for this particular contest. It's clearly autobiographical, and as a reader, I can feel something of your emotions. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you, and good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Hi Alex,
Girl, Interrupted is the title of a book and film (starring Angelina Jolie) about a young girl in a psychiatric hospital. It was very famous some years ago and got some Oscars.
The repetition in This' is an episode that changed my life. That changed me.' is something I did on purpose.
Thanks so much for reading and for your comments.
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I don't watch many films, so that reference went straight over my head ;-)
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The book is good and very short. Give it a try if you ever feel like it. :)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing your well written and touching story. There have always been bullies and anyone who tells the truth has had to deal with at least one, of course, copping a buzz can tend to soften the bite. Great job, and best of luck in the contest. :-)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thanks for sharing your well written and touching story. There have always been bullies and anyone who tells the truth has had to deal with at least one, of course, copping a buzz can tend to soften the bite. Great job, and best of luck in the contest. :-)
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading, Ric.
Comment from Ulla
Hello, MJ, that is a dark period and memory alright, and all because you were bullied. A very traumatic experience that must have been. Well written and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Hello, MJ, that is a dark period and memory alright, and all because you were bullied. A very traumatic experience that must have been. Well written and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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Thanks so much for reading. :)
Comment from misscookie
I found this to be a very interesting read.
I sure you thought this was the worst time in your life...
I felted the same way.
Praise God that He was with us all the time a carried us through.
I pray you get a chance to read my story " First Ride On A Grey Hound Bus"
Cookie
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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I found this to be a very interesting read.
I sure you thought this was the worst time in your life...
I felted the same way.
Praise God that He was with us all the time a carried us through.
I pray you get a chance to read my story " First Ride On A Grey Hound Bus"
Cookie
Comment Written 13-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2016
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I have already read your story, the one about when your baby was born. I think I reviewed it yesterday or the day before. Thanks for reading mine.
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I was a pleasure to read your poem.
Oops this old mind didn't remember thank you for reading mind.
Have a blessed day.
Cookie
Comment from BeasPeas
I hate bullying. No one should do that to another person or animal. Some people don't have the ability to empathize. Your experience is one taken to the extreme--that is having to be hospitalized. I think parents and schools must step in when bullying occurs. Thank you for sharing your experiences with us. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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I hate bullying. No one should do that to another person or animal. Some people don't have the ability to empathize. Your experience is one taken to the extreme--that is having to be hospitalized. I think parents and schools must step in when bullying occurs. Thank you for sharing your experiences with us. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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Thanks for your comments, Marilyn.
Comment from patcelaw
MJ, I am sorry you had to endure such bullying and then was hospitalized and had the electroshock therapy. I worked in a hospital and witnessed ECT when I was 18 and found those treatments troubled me as I watched. I am glad you are better now and even willing to write your experiences. Patricia
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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MJ, I am sorry you had to endure such bullying and then was hospitalized and had the electroshock therapy. I worked in a hospital and witnessed ECT when I was 18 and found those treatments troubled me as I watched. I am glad you are better now and even willing to write your experiences. Patricia
Comment Written 12-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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Thanks for reading, Patricia.
Comment from cupa tea
I think you're a pretty woman. I can't imagine why he'd say something like that about you unless he liked you. I'm told boys did that in those days to girls they liked. However, you did a great job writing the story. Good luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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I think you're a pretty woman. I can't imagine why he'd say something like that about you unless he liked you. I'm told boys did that in those days to girls they liked. However, you did a great job writing the story. Good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 12-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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Thanks so much for the review and the compliment .
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never a issue...I always enjoy help...I have tons of my own problems when I write...
Comment from MelB
It's so sad when bullying gets to the point where it makes someone want to take their own life or take drugs to cope with it. Bullying can do a lot of damage to a person.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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It's so sad when bullying gets to the point where it makes someone want to take their own life or take drugs to cope with it. Bullying can do a lot of damage to a person.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2016
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I agree, that's why I'm happy people take it more seriously nowadays. BTW, I never took drugs, I just had a meltdown but the doctors misinterpreted it at first.
Thanks for reading.
