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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from Natalie Walker
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This is a lovely faith poem. It flows like a spoken word piece. I really like the message of God being greater than us and also being there for us. I didn't notice any errors or typos. Nice work!

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2018
    Rarity hoping my other writes follow these stated intents. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Evil trying to oust good, might be possible if God wasn't on our side. Although we think evil has won sometimes, it hasn't really. Well done this is a thought inducing poem. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Glad aspects of this write were found captivating to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from kiwijenny
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I have to read this over . When I do I get it.i didn't know what virtue sown by ticks touching inner soul meant until I reread it....ticks I first thought of as Rocky Mountain fever critters...but I think you mean positive check marks.
Thanks for the depth of this and it's goodness
God bless

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
    Interesting perspectives you detailed about this write, the latter was my intention, never considering the critter. Great insight. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Cali O
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I know poetry only needs to make sense to the writer but this one makes no sense at all to me and did not seem to have rythmn. I understand this is my first review but it just made no sense to me


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 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
    I share your feelings, finding it difficult to compose a proper statement. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from DonandVicki
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Your poem engages the imagination as all good poetry should do. I feel that God is so powerful that nothing is a challenge or him or her. A good and contemplative write.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
    I came to FS asking the question what were the tiny sketches I wrote. Were they poems? I still seek that answer. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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A very intriguing write that certainly highlights the wonderful aspects of a loving God that conquers hate. Have listed a few grammatical catches below - employ or ignore as you like. Thank you for sharing! :) ;)
"shinning lamplight to" -- 'shining lamplight to'
"in God fullness bright" -- 'in God's fullness bright'

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2018
    Got plenty of them, good heads up. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Kdee1
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You have a way with words that makes the reader think. You're a amazing writer and have a true gift. I enjoyed your poem and seriously made me want to do better with mine,

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Work with them constant revisions. Make it right. I still have pits in my works. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from beizanten
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Interesting first paragraph. A good second and third paragraph. a pretty good fourth and fifth paragraph. Interesting sixth and seventh paragraph. A good eight and ninth paragraph. It is good but not great

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    I will see if I'm able to reach that higher aspect. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from georgelebard
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Sorry, I'm not much of a poem person. I thought it was cleaver but it reminded me of Yoda. If your purpose was to inspire the reader to think about creation and the existence of a god, you succeeded.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    I do have issues with my writes, desiring statements such as your to aid improvement. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Badger_29
Exceptional
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Very excellently worded in a fashion that was somewhat archaic or medieval, which matched the theme of the writing well. I love how you refer to God is the original source of light,
And ou how are you apply the crank contrast of the light to the the darkness. A very pleasing rhyme meter and great ending on a great positive note to seeking wisdom.
I felt like scripture was bothering into it I said it reminded me of a water different scriptures find . In ll Chronicles God says he will heal the land and proverbs says. That wisdom is more valuable than silver and gold .
Excellent read, Oh Happy Day, I will go and tell it on the mountain.

Blessings,

Brother Badger

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018
    Wow! I'm pleased this write fired your inspirations in faith sounding an awakening within you by things stated by your read. Thanking you for your too generous rate and touching remarks.