Comment from davidray

Excellent

hiya. I am not a poet, but this really resonated with me. YOu made a vision with your words, like showing us. Beautifully crafted. Thanks for sharing. :)

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you davidray for your encouraging review.
I greatly appreciate your comments

Blessings
Janet.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

I like the metaphors for the moonrise and the start coming out. I see the hope at the end that the start of a new day brings.

Good luck in the contest

Keep writing.

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you for your encouraging review and for your good wishes.

I greatly appreciate your comments

Blessings
Janet.

reply by dragonpoet on 04-Sep-2016

You're welcome on both accounts, Janet. Blessings to you too.

Joan

Comment from WintyBoy

Excellent

Wonderfully relaxing read. I don't know why, but I think that last line is great.
For me, rhyming couplets would enhance the inherant beauty of the poem, "maybe."
However, lovely little gem...Regards Winty.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you Winty for your encouraging review and for your good wishes.

I greatly appreciate your comments

Blessings
Janet.

Comment from Domino 2

Exceptional

For some reason I wasn't notified of this one, Janet, and just fell upon it in 'today's well received' page.

A fabulous sonnet with original phrases and metaphors to convey your dreams in observation of the marvellous night sky.

Every line is strong, and I particularly like the terrific imagery and whimsy in second stanza.

Impeccable meter and rhymes.

An undoubted sixer in my book.

Cheers, Ray xx

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you Ray for your encouraging and exceptional six star review.

I wonder why my poem didn't show up in your inbox. Technology is always a mystery to me but I'm so glad you found it as I treasure your reviews and encouragement.

I posted a silly limerick a day or so ago that might make you smile. :))) I wonder if that came to you.


Blessings
Janet xx

reply by Domino 2 on 04-Sep-2016

I just reviewed your limerick, Janet. I don't remember a notification, but that's maybe because it was an anonymous contest.

Ray xx

Comment from Heidi M

Excellent

This is lovely! It flows smoothly; no choppy or awkward phrases. I like the line "Soon shades of blue and cloudy gray unite". What an apt description. My favorite line is your closer "when day and night caress and dream as one".
Thank you for sharing this beautiful sonnet.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you for your encouraging review and I'm pleased that you shared your favorite lines.

I greatly appreciate your comments

Blessings
Janet.

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

A beautiful sentiment and a marvellous thought and true, "weeping may stay for the night, but joy cometh in the morning" Psalm 30:5. A beautifully written sonnet Janet, as smooth as silk, the meter and cadence are perfect, and the language to "die for"! A great entry in this contest my friend, good luck, and well done. Blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you Roy for your encouraging and exceptional six star review and for your good wishes.
Thank you too for a appropriate scripture to fit my sonnet.

I greatly appreciate your comments.

Blessings
Janet.

reply by royowen on 04-Sep-2016

Well earned and scribed Janet

Comment from RoostyNester

Excellent

I loved your sonnet poem. All God's elements have a beauty and a design in their function for mankind. Love poems and sad sonnets have been written, using them all through history, as the focus point of the message. I love the easy and caressing flow of your words, to create a vision to the reader.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.

I greatly appreciate your comments

Blessings
Janet.

Comment from Natalie Walker

Exceptional

This is a great poem with great imagery. It is a fantastic example of a sonnet, each line flows gracefully to the next. It's not choppy or abrupt, but has an easy rhythm.

The imagery is powerful and imaginative. It really allows the reader to visualize what you are describing.

I can't think of any corrections for this poem, I think it's perfect as is. Nice work.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you Natalie for your encouraging and exceptional six star review .

I greatly appreciate your comments

Blessings
Janet.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This English sonnet, Day and Night Caress, has all the attributes of the sonnet, including the iambic pentameter, rhyme scheme, and turn at line nine. It reminds us of the simpatico of day and night to our ever hopeful observation.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review .

I greatly appreciate your comments

Blessings
Janet.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Janet, what an absolutely beautiful sonnet. I'm sorry, but I'm out of sixes - just gave my last one to pantygynt's awesome Loom sonnet.

You have created beautiful imagery to portray sunset and twilight over the lake, introducing the caress which appears again in your couplet. The volta is perfectly managed in stanza 3 and the couplet brings the whole thing to a pleasing conclusion. Iambic meter is great as well, needless to say.

I love it.

Steve

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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016

Thank you for your most encouraging review. As always, I appreciate your comments and your virtual six is an added bonus.

I think pantygynt got my last six yesterday as well.

Blessings
Janet