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Night Caresses Day

A Shakespearean Sonnet

52 total reviews 
Comment from Cynthia1
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Your sonnet is lovely- seems to meet all the requirements and also has some beautiful language. I love the imagery that you use. Very nice.
Cynthia1

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you so much for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I am so pleased with your comments.

    Blessings
    Janet
reply by Cynthia1 on 03-Sep-2016
    You are so welcome.
    Cynthia1
Comment from sandramitchell
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I love that last line: when day and night caress and dream as one... what lovely words, they evoke wonderful imagery. This is a lovely sonnet for the contest, smooth, and perfect rhyme. A real sonnet and a pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you so much Sandra for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I am so pleased with your comments.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from rjuselius
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WOW. this is an exquisite piece of poetry dear friend! the imagery is breathtaking and the wording next to genius. i have never written a sonnet and don't know how but i surely enjoyed yours.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings!
virtual six..
rebekka x

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you so much rebekka for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I am so pleased with your comments.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Ann Dudley Duncan
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A beautiful sonnet, well written and deserving of the prize!
The picture goes perfectly with the poem. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you Ann for your thoughtful and encouraging review.

    Blessings
    Janet
reply by Ann Dudley Duncan on 03-Sep-2016
    You're most welcome dear friend!
Comment from tfawcus
Exceptional
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A very good sonnet both in terms of technique and content. A couple of particularly striking phrases (heaven's lake and days dropping into night). Your description of sunset in the last line is original and beautifully phrased. It's always a pleasure to read a well-considered sonnet, particularly one like this, that captures the mood so well.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review and those beautiful six stars.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Pantygynt
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I have just been reading the rules for this contest and was amused to find that in the quoted Sonnet "Summer's Day" the object of the bard's love is quoted as being a "she". It is generally accepted in academic circles that the object of that sonnet was a "he", Shakespeare apparently kicked with both feet in such matters. No such confusion can be found in your sonnet however which is excellently constructed.

Both sunset (S1) and moonrise (S2) are beautifully covered and the volta sets in at line nine when the "shadows in the evening sky" obscure the obvious transition from day to night. The statement here being that while nature is full of beauty it doesn't necessarilly equate to the business of human life.

The couplet resolves the problem in the time honoured optimistic way with a line that describes the evening twilight in one of the most beautiful phrases I have ever read,

"when day and night caress and dream as one."

This deserves a six but alas they are, like your daylight, all gone.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2016
    Thank you for your most encouraging review. As always, I appreciate your comments and your virtual six is an added bonus.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from EricBrady
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Beautiful sonnet. I love the vivid imagery of your words. This is quite the beautiful scene that you set and the perfect time for memories as this peaceful and serene evening unfolds. The last line is my favorite, "day and night caress and dream as one", beautiful. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you Eric for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for sharing your favorite line.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from Alex Rosel
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I enjoyed reading this, it's very evocative. I can tell that you've crafted a poem here, rather than just writing in rhyme about a particular sentiment. :-)

Some pick out points:
I like how there is a dominance of the letter ess - S - it's reminiscent of Keats' Ode to Autumn.

to blink and glimmer in the moon's embrace / and rouse the other stars on heaven's lake - This is beautifully crafted imagery.

cause my dreams to wither, wane and fade - Succinct and with the dominance of active double-ues - W - you can almost feel the slipping of the words as you speak them.

A nice sentiment to conclude with.








 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
    Thank you Alex for your thoughtful and most encouraging review. I greatly appreciate you comments.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from William Ross
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Very nicely done on the sonnet, great rhyme and rhythm has great meter and flows real well. I like the last line, when day and night caress and dream as one. Great job and write on this, have a wonderful day.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you William for your thoughtful and encouraging review. Thank you too for sharing your favorite line.

    Blessings
    Janet
Comment from oliver818
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Very nice poem! It flows and rhymes well. And well done for taking on such a difficult kind of poem, I'm always impressed by people who do that! Good luck with the competition!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2016
    Thank you Oliver for your thoughtful and encouraging review.

    Blessings
    Janet