Parts of the Whole
What is, indeed, the soul?20 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
I don't know how one could define "soul" better than this. There are so many great images here for seeing beyond the surface iinto the essence; "I see your smile and wonder at the depth in your eyes" - writers everywhere are reading hat and saying "Yes! Why didn't I write that?".
I think one of the questions at the core of philosophy is trying to figure out who we are when all the external trappings are removed. You articulate that so beautifully with your line "it is what we are when all else is dust" - that communicates not only that our soul is ou real self, but that it is not transitory - it will live on when all the material stuff passes.
You can't fake this level of faith - this had to be written by someone with a deep spitiual awareness (and a lot of writing tqalent to boot). It is so uplifting and affirming - this, like many of your other poems, goes on the shelf to be taken down every once in a while when I need a lift.
One small SPAG note - I tink, with the exception of the first stanza (where the "its" are possessive), the rest of the"its" in ypour poem are contractions and should be "it's".
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I don't know how one could define "soul" better than this. There are so many great images here for seeing beyond the surface iinto the essence; "I see your smile and wonder at the depth in your eyes" - writers everywhere are reading hat and saying "Yes! Why didn't I write that?".
I think one of the questions at the core of philosophy is trying to figure out who we are when all the external trappings are removed. You articulate that so beautifully with your line "it is what we are when all else is dust" - that communicates not only that our soul is ou real self, but that it is not transitory - it will live on when all the material stuff passes.
You can't fake this level of faith - this had to be written by someone with a deep spitiual awareness (and a lot of writing tqalent to boot). It is so uplifting and affirming - this, like many of your other poems, goes on the shelf to be taken down every once in a while when I need a lift.
One small SPAG note - I tink, with the exception of the first stanza (where the "its" are possessive), the rest of the"its" in ypour poem are contractions and should be "it's".
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
Comment from DR DIP
lovely write about the soul for your writing prompt. I really like your lines, so beautifully written. You are a true soul writer
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lovely write about the soul for your writing prompt. I really like your lines, so beautifully written. You are a true soul writer
dip
Comment Written 18-Aug-2016
Comment from Bill Schott
The poem about the soul, Parts of the Whole, reminds me that the image God made me in reflects the content and extent of my soul. This is the part of us that serves and survives. Nice poem.
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The poem about the soul, Parts of the Whole, reminds me that the image God made me in reflects the content and extent of my soul. This is the part of us that serves and survives. Nice poem.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you for your insight and nice comments, Bill.
Comment from liz burgoyne
I felt a sense of peace after reading your beautiful poem. All nature when studied shows how God paid attention to the most insignificant detail. Thank-you for reminding us to see and appreciate our on beauty_ especially that of our everlasting souls. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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I felt a sense of peace after reading your beautiful poem. All nature when studied shows how God paid attention to the most insignificant detail. Thank-you for reminding us to see and appreciate our on beauty_ especially that of our everlasting souls. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Liz, you brought tears to my eyes that have needed to fall...thank you.
Comment from Irish Rain
Ahhh...this is a most beautiful description of soul. I like how you describe it as God's signature. So true, when all else is dust....the soul remains...lovely entry...blessings...
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Ahhh...this is a most beautiful description of soul. I like how you describe it as God's signature. So true, when all else is dust....the soul remains...lovely entry...blessings...
Comment Written 16-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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What lovely things to say....thank you so much.
Comment from Pantygynt
I am pretty sure your soul will follow without prompting. What about you though - that bit that is not sould. that's the bit that needs prompting and pushing and kicking into line.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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I am pretty sure your soul will follow without prompting. What about you though - that bit that is not sould. that's the bit that needs prompting and pushing and kicking into line.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for writing! I always enjoy your comments.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You call out one of the aspects of the soul that many overlook which is our connectedness to God and each other through its universal consciousness. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You call out one of the aspects of the soul that many overlook which is our connectedness to God and each other through its universal consciousness. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you for reading this. Your comments are insightful, as always.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
A very good entry into the Soul Writer contest! It is a smooth and easy read. The following sums it up for me:
Its God's signature
of Him who made you
left in you.
Great word choices made this a wonderful and inspirational read for me. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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A very good entry into the Soul Writer contest! It is a smooth and easy read. The following sums it up for me:
Its God's signature
of Him who made you
left in you.
Great word choices made this a wonderful and inspirational read for me. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 16-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Susanne...hugs and blessings right back.
Comment from Heather Knight
I think this is a very original entry for the soul writer competition.
I like how you start speaking about the sky and from there you move to the smile.
Well done and good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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I think this is a very original entry for the soul writer competition.
I like how you start speaking about the sky and from there you move to the smile.
Well done and good luck!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Thanks, MJ.It took me awhile to know how to begin it. Blessings...
Comment from William Ross
very nicely done on the soul, imagine if man didn't have a soul how ruthless we would all be. for those of us that listen to it live a loving and caring life. good luck on this and have a great day.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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very nicely done on the soul, imagine if man didn't have a soul how ruthless we would all be. for those of us that listen to it live a loving and caring life. good luck on this and have a great day.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
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Agree all the way around...thank you and take care.
