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2-4-2 (raven)

Contest entry

17 total reviews 
Comment from dragonpoet
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A sarcastic description of the raven fertilizing the dried field. His gift will do no good now.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
    Thank you very much. But I was focused more on the circling like a crop dusting plane than anything else so I need to work on it :).
reply by dragonpoet on 10-Sep-2016
    You are very welcome.

    dp
Comment from zanya
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A mazing what poetic ideas can be conveyed in this short but interesting format - the 2/4/2 -the raven not often celebrated

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 25-Aug-2016
    thank you very much, Z! I really didn't think it would do anything as I was just practicing haiku with this. HUGS for your always generous kindness and support.
Comment from Joan E.
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Congratulations on having your tiny poem place in this highly competitive contest. I like the "crop dust" wordplay and the perfectly parallel photo selection. Keep on writing about the birds and especially your namesake! Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 25-Aug-2016
    Thank you so much for such lovely words of kindness.
Comment from wiljacro
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Hi! this combination of a sun ravaged field and a hungry raven was so realistic that I could almost feel the fiery heat and the raven's frustration at not finding suitable food. Very good in only 8syllables. wiljacro.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
    WOW! Thank you with all my heart. I am overwhelmed by such generous encouragement. I keep working at these and feedback like this inspires me to keep striving for improvement. Blessings and many thanks.
Comment from Mastery
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Hi, Monica. Very nice 2-4-2. I like your satori very much in keeping with the rest of the poem. It looks like a winner to me and I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 16-Aug-2016
    Thank you, Bob. Birds over a field always remind me of crop dusting. I will not even place but the lovely thought made it worth the effort.
Comment from Spitfire
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The raven is a symbol of death. That seems to be the case here. "Scorched" is a wonderful verb choice. Looks like more of a crop bust that crop dust. LOL Good luck in the contest, Monica.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2016
    Thank you very much, Shari. LOL at "bust" when I saw the picture I thought automatically about crop dusting which led to the write. I am always very grateful for your lovely words of encouragement and support ... not to mention the giggles that often go along with it.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Monica

= Great combo of the gold/black. Striking presentation.
= You wording choice is spot on, making for a super entry.
= Good luck in the contest.

(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ... Jacqueline / Jax

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
    Thanks so much, Jax! I doubt it even gets two looks by the judges BUT it was good haiku practice. You really brighten my world with your always uplifting encouragement.
reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 19-Aug-2016
    You're very welcome. (*<*)
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very good 2-4-2 poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and I love the picture you chose for this. hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
    Thank you. I appreciate your time and feedback very much.
reply by Teri7 on 19-Aug-2016
    you are so welcome. Teri
Comment from Irish Rain
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I like this! That accurately describes what it looks like this raven is doing. This is SUCH a difficult challenge, 2-4-2, but I think this is great! Blessings....

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016
    Oh how much can I say I thank you. You are great at these and so this means tons to me. I doubt it does anything with the judges, but words of generous praise from folks like you mean more to me than any ribbon. HUGS and deep gratitude.
reply by Irish Rain on 06-Aug-2016
    Oh, my, THANK YOU!!!
Comment from Marykelly
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These words create an image of drought where the crop literally becomes dust. All of the imagery in this short piece depicts destruction.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2016

reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
    Thank you. I appreciate your time and feedback very much.