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Comment from schatzling
I understand what you have written. I understand far too well; far too deeply. Made me think about the friend I once had. My only best friend I could truly be myself with. No pretending in aspect. Your story is my story except instead of swimming we would go volksmarching or bike riding. I was overweight as a child and teenager and in my early 20s. I always had an hour glass figure no matter how much a I weighed tho. No boy/guy ever new the color of my eyes...they were too interested in my 46DDD boobs and my girlfriend was tall and slender and beautiful....model material. We were like you and your friend were. could reveal our deepest secrets, our worst fears, our dreams. We did everything together. Graduated from high school together. When we got older she got heavier and started hanging around the wrong people and she died of heroin overdose. ME, I got older and more slender. Instead of weighing close to 200 pounds, after two cancers and one stroma tumor I now only weigh 100. and have small boobs. I too once had a friend that I could do everything with, share everything with. I always said we looked like the number 10 which is a perfect score...She was the 1 tall and slender and I was the zero.....short and more rounded. Now the zero is left because I lost my ! and only. Thanks for letting me share with you. I never told anyone and I just needed to type this out and see it before my eyes. I love your writing and I am truly sorry for your loss. When I came to America, the same year my best friend passed, I have not had a friend like that since. I know one thing, good friends are hard to come by BUT we all need to have one. No matter what...I am glad we are becoming good friends. We may not be the best of friends but I have a feeling we may get close even if not in distance.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2016
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I understand what you have written. I understand far too well; far too deeply. Made me think about the friend I once had. My only best friend I could truly be myself with. No pretending in aspect. Your story is my story except instead of swimming we would go volksmarching or bike riding. I was overweight as a child and teenager and in my early 20s. I always had an hour glass figure no matter how much a I weighed tho. No boy/guy ever new the color of my eyes...they were too interested in my 46DDD boobs and my girlfriend was tall and slender and beautiful....model material. We were like you and your friend were. could reveal our deepest secrets, our worst fears, our dreams. We did everything together. Graduated from high school together. When we got older she got heavier and started hanging around the wrong people and she died of heroin overdose. ME, I got older and more slender. Instead of weighing close to 200 pounds, after two cancers and one stroma tumor I now only weigh 100. and have small boobs. I too once had a friend that I could do everything with, share everything with. I always said we looked like the number 10 which is a perfect score...She was the 1 tall and slender and I was the zero.....short and more rounded. Now the zero is left because I lost my ! and only. Thanks for letting me share with you. I never told anyone and I just needed to type this out and see it before my eyes. I love your writing and I am truly sorry for your loss. When I came to America, the same year my best friend passed, I have not had a friend like that since. I know one thing, good friends are hard to come by BUT we all need to have one. No matter what...I am glad we are becoming good friends. We may not be the best of friends but I have a feeling we may get close even if not in distance.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2016
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I love your story. I am so happy you told it to me. Best friends tell everything, not just the pretty stuff. It is so nice to get it down on paper so that we understand it. How long have you been in America? That must have been a very difficult transition. I would love to know your story. What is a Stroma tumor? I bet there is a great story in your mind. I am glad you wrote a small part of it.
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I just wrote you an entire short story and it disappeared. This happens far too frequently. I cannot re write it again....at least not today. I am plagued with a migraine today. But to provide you an answer at age 22....single...not like most German women latching onto some poor sucker of a GI to make their way over (Smile). Enjoy the rest of your Sunday Evening Neighbor (state wise anyway...heehee)
Comment from Ulla
Awwww, Judy, you miss her so. A very dear friend and a girl/woman friend which is so precious. How well you say it that your husband understands it the male way. So true. I loved this write. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Awwww, Judy, you miss her so. A very dear friend and a girl/woman friend which is so precious. How well you say it that your husband understands it the male way. So true. I loved this write. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Thank you , I do sometimes just write and not worry about structure, just thoughts. To me it is healing. Also the support and understanding I have gotten from all of you on Fanstory is so sincere and understanding. I so appreciate you. I am ok. It's just that I tend to minimize pain until I am needed and then it pops back up what I am missing. Your words are lovely and healing, Thank you.
Comment from winnona
Your poem is very well written. Very emotional almost made me cry. I am sorry and could feel the sorrow your words conveyed to the reader. Whether it was a made up piece or truly the loss of a good friend you did a very good job on this.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Your poem is very well written. Very emotional almost made me cry. I am sorry and could feel the sorrow your words conveyed to the reader. Whether it was a made up piece or truly the loss of a good friend you did a very good job on this.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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this was all true and just how I felt because I miss Krissie so much. To have a friend to talk to when you do something wrong or perceive it is wrong is a very helpful love. We could tell each other anything and laugh and cry together. I miss her. I appreciate your kind words. By writing it I felt so much better.
Comment from Irish Rain
Awww. Awww. That's how I feel. I SO get this. I guess any woman our age would. I felt it when the young lady kept coming back to tell you how stupid you were, when the blue collar worker said he loved her....when you came to the conclusion 'you had messed up again'....and there was no one to tell. You made me feel this, no more awesome thing a writer can do.... Blessings to you.....
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Awww. Awww. That's how I feel. I SO get this. I guess any woman our age would. I felt it when the young lady kept coming back to tell you how stupid you were, when the blue collar worker said he loved her....when you came to the conclusion 'you had messed up again'....and there was no one to tell. You made me feel this, no more awesome thing a writer can do.... Blessings to you.....
Comment Written 04-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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thank you so much, I miss her every day. One of my new friends on Fanstory did make me laugh. She said , " Screw that young girl, mistakes happen, get over it" Then I realized no one was hurt and she didn't need to be so ugly to me. Thank you for writing make and letting me know you understand.
Comment from frogbook
A fabulous story of love and heartbreak. A glowing tribute to your sadly gone friend. How we long for these people at times like these. Excellent and beautiful.
2 last small items:
1. Screw the girl who's car you hit, everyone makes mistakes.
2. A very small insignificant suggestion but, you might consider putting your words in white or a lighter color for ease of reading by old ladies like myself. I wouldn't change the purple as it is lovely.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016
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A fabulous story of love and heartbreak. A glowing tribute to your sadly gone friend. How we long for these people at times like these. Excellent and beautiful.
2 last small items:
1. Screw the girl who's car you hit, everyone makes mistakes.
2. A very small insignificant suggestion but, you might consider putting your words in white or a lighter color for ease of reading by old ladies like myself. I wouldn't change the purple as it is lovely.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016
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You made me laugh which is what I needed so badly, Thank you so much.
Screw the gril who;s car you hit. I absolutely love it and it is something krissie would have told me. You made my day. Thank you so much. I will change the color too.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. Sorry about the little accident, I am just glad it is not too serious. It is sad about your friend and I am sure you miss her every day.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. Sorry about the little accident, I am just glad it is not too serious. It is sad about your friend and I am sure you miss her every day.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2016
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I do miss her so much. Thank you
Sandra
Comment from heyjude
Judy, so sorry about the loss of your friend. Sorry about the bad experience with the girl in the parking lot. I guess she doesn't remember those times she messed up. I could feel your sorrow in this writing.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Judy, so sorry about the loss of your friend. Sorry about the bad experience with the girl in the parking lot. I guess she doesn't remember those times she messed up. I could feel your sorrow in this writing.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Yes, more than anything I just remember how easy it was to tell her everything. I am fine but missing her so much tonight.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Judy. this poetry is wonderful because it is so base and honest. Heart and soul is poured in the lines and it is very understandable for anyone of us who have ever lost a true friend. Your relationship with Krissie was special for sure. Blessisngs. Bob
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Hi, Judy. this poetry is wonderful because it is so base and honest. Heart and soul is poured in the lines and it is very understandable for anyone of us who have ever lost a true friend. Your relationship with Krissie was special for sure. Blessisngs. Bob
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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thank you for understanding the depth of our friendship. It really helps to have someone, especially someone like you who I admire so much, to understand sometimes we just have to speak bluntly and honestly in order to heal.
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So true. :) X Bob
Comment from create4christ
So sorry for your loss, Friend. I will pray that the Lord blesses you with comfort, peace, and a new best friend. It sounds like y'all had a great time together. Nice tribute!!
Thank you for sharing your heart...Penny
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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So sorry for your loss, Friend. I will pray that the Lord blesses you with comfort, peace, and a new best friend. It sounds like y'all had a great time together. Nice tribute!!
Thank you for sharing your heart...Penny
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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thank you , It is so comfortable to just be yourself. No judgement. That is why I miss her.
Comment from royowen
I know from accidents I've been involved in, one feels terrible, particularly if one is in the wrong, most accidents I've had, I never saw the other car, I guess that's why they call it an accident, I can understand why your friend is your confidante. Well done, nicely written, chatty and sad at the same time, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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I know from accidents I've been involved in, one feels terrible, particularly if one is in the wrong, most accidents I've had, I never saw the other car, I guess that's why they call it an accident, I can understand why your friend is your confidante. Well done, nicely written, chatty and sad at the same time, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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thank your Roy, I think it was the fact that we could just say hey i think I messed up what do you think, that made us so close. I so appreciate your comforting words.
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Most welcome
